by jobcal
I saw that it was 15 pages and didn't bother to read. Make the stories short.
good story but should have begun from where it left the last time. hope to read more submissions in the future.
nice take off. hope the flight would be long and enjoyable till it lands far away. wish ur business all success, hi hi
sub-standard treatment as it is not:
- structured neatly (split into parts)
- focused enough (too little of escort agency)
- very imaginative (repetitive descriptions of sex)
do find a good editor. all the best!
btw - why didn't it continue where the 1st part left off,. instead of repeating the whole tale?
sub-standard treatment as it is not:
- structured neatly (split into parts)
- focused enough (too little of escort agency)
- very imaginative (repetitive descriptions of sex)
do find a good editor. all the best!
btw - why didn't it continue where the 1st part left off,. instead of repeating the whole tale?