All Comments on 'Our Little Secret?'

This definetly needs a sequal as Mark gets his revenge as this was planned by his wife.

Can't wait to read it.

I'd enjoy reading a revenge followup

Otherwise it's just another wimp husband story.

Either now, or you have the option to wait about 15 minutes and do it when they move the action to your marriage bed.<P>

'How do I betray you? Let me count the ways.'<P>

She starts planning the betrayal as soon as she gets the Facebook contact from Kyle. She tells him she will be alone that weekend and 'jokingly' invites him to stay with her. Her mindset is clear already. She is now "hot" and going to score the high school quarterback. Jill starts having an online relationship with Kyle at the same time she stops talking about the reunion to Mark. She buys sexy clothes with the dual intention of showing off to her ex-classmates and seducing Kyle. When Mark offers to go with her she refuses and lies to him about going to the reunion. She is cold and distant on Friday morning - already she is looking forward to her time with Kyle. She readys herself for him by making sure her pubic area is very smooth. She disrespects Mark to Kyle implying he is screwing around on her in Vegas. After the reunion, on the couch, she is the one to initiate the blow job. She is the one to straddle herself onto him. She eagerly fucks him. When he warns her he is about to come she allows him to do so inside of herself. <P>

At the end is she overcome with remorse and guilt? Nope. She is very happy, smiles at Kyle and wants him to keep it a secret.<P>

News flash Mark, you don't have the marriage you thought you had. You don't have the woman you thought you had. She intentionally set out to cheat on you. She lied to you. She had unprotected sex with a man who may be a complete player and have given her a disease. She now disrespects you. Or do you think that a wife who will do this holds her husband in high esteem?<P>

This story feels very unfinished. Mark seems to vacillate between being turned on and being angry. Even to the point where he climaxs watching them. At points in the story he is jealous. suspicious, and angry so he doesn't appear to be a husband who wants his wife to fuck other men. On the other hand he had ample opportunity to stop this. Why didn't he? Was it because he had lost his trust in her? Well that actually was a given when he stayed home. Is it because he wanted to confirm that she would actually cheat on him? Well, that is now a proven fact.<P>

So what does he do? I am hoping that he understands that he has wasted seven years and takes a walk. <P>

Thanks for sharing.

LETS SEE IF MARK IS A MAN OR WIMP. HE SHOULD MAKE HER PAY DEARLY IF HE WANTS A NORMAL MARRIAGE WITH TRUST. A DIVORCE OR OTHER SOLUTION WOULD BE NICE! HATE COCKHOLDS.

what it is , another cuck story . I dont like them , however as other posters pointed out , you can still redeem it if the guy gets some balls and deals with both appropriately . I have no respect for willing cucks . I have tried watching short porn clips with swingers , etc . to at least try to get a half an understanding of why people would do this willingly . I cant . Then I look at the husband after its all over with complete disgust and contempt . Why would anybody do this , I will never understand . Give this husband character a backbone please .

If you don't like "cuck" stories, why do you bother reading them?

#1 . Like many authors , this one did not write the reader a warning about what it was all about , which should always be done .

#2. because of no warning this story could have easily been one about how a husband catches his wife cheating and does something about it . Stories I do like . only way to find out is to read it .

now with that said , the author could easily change tack and make that so .

that answer you little comment ?

I have NOT read this story, so I have no idea what it's about, although I have read some of the comments, and I therefore will NOT waste time reading it. But someone has to read and CRITIQUE it for OTHERS not to have to read idiotic stories or types of stories they don't enjoy. That is, IF THE AUTHOR does not give warning, something to the effect of: <p>

"This story is a man who likes to catch his wife fucking other man and enjoys watching her doing it, and is not sure whether to masturbate or tell her to stop it, since he's rather enjoying it himself," etc., etc.<p>

"This is a materpiece" is NOT a meaningful critique. It's a total, personal gibberish. It doesn't even help the author in anyway constructively, positive or negative, since such nonsense says nothing...

yawn. don't post any more if yuo can't come up with anything better than a 10 year old's effort. this is just a joke as a reader I really couldn't care less what happens, you could kill them all and I'd just move on without a thought. You've COMPLETELY failed as a writer.

If only I could find a story in LIT like this but one in which the husband has a "normal" reaction instead of wallowing in lust to see his loving wife screwed by another man! Writers. I have no sympathy or literary interest in those men who yearn to be cuckolded. Give me a man who will take revenge on both the wife and her lover.

read the reviews after i read the story and don't understand why others feel as though they are lord and judgement of all things written ... i enjoyed the story - had a solid plot, good characters, yada yada ... there are several hundred Loving Wives stories on here that do not have the "warnings" one hack spoke of ... read a story, don't read a story, but why go out of the way to stomp on someone who put some time and effort into getting words on a page; it's not easy task so give a guy a break.

i'd like to see a sequel, but i'd prefer to see what the author has in mind, not a few mindless hacks who feel as though they are the Shakespeare, Dickens, or Tolstoy of erotic writing ... at least he wrote in complete sentences, used correct grammer, and knows how and when to capitalize - free submissions to a free website isn't going to give you the next great novel ...

Note to the author - solid story, solid plotline, solid characters - don't hesitate to write more; don't let the others get you down.

I will never understand why people get so moral about stories on an erotic site. Why are they here at all? And it usually concerns loving wives, so does that mean they are all chauvenists with weak egos?

....I mean you idiots that condemn anyone who needs a moral element to a story to enable eroticism. Adequately written and not over the top the story was still just O.K., it broke no new ground and it ends very unerotically, unless you are twisted enough to actually get off on heartbreak and deceit. In which case how dare you even write when you need to report back to the clinic.

Same song, different verse. The husband is a wimp that watches his wife behave like a pathetic whore and gets off. The writer is a giggling voyer who treats all woment as a slutty bags of hormones incapable of higher functioning. The only things good about this are the over the top idiotic defenders of this trype who view this as art to be protected on some highground of freedom. You guys are a crack up. Morals be damned. You will never understand the revolting view of female humanity that this crap represents.

Just another closet queer or does our man get satisfaction, or does he want to be a swinger???

...what he should do, what he'll likely do and we know that he is getting aroused watching.

We know he is an educated (supposedly a mans' man) and that he should now come out, calmly sit down next to them and ask Kyle if he would mind helping his wife pack...she is leaving tonite - their divorce is pending.

Why. She supposedly was a good, educated happy wife, sneaked around behind his back, lied, cheated and became an adulterous, a common slut...there is no way a man of his calibre would stand for this...even though he loved her.

You Sir, need an Epilogue - this story ends as an insult to your readers!!!!!!!!!!!!1

de Crappo....

Hot stuff, looking forward to more!

a story

But, I hope this is not the end. Good work, Mr. Stark.

not sure where you go next, but want to read it!

As a first time author I had no idea this many people would actually take the time to read this! To those that complimented, asked for sequel and made suggestions, thank you! For those who didn't like it, didn't realize what most "Loving Wives" stories involve, or were offended... sorry, can't please everyone! Lastly for those who just have nothing better to do than rip someone for taking a shot at writing a story and have nothing to offer... won't waste my time.

Thanks again for the support and remember, as someone intelligently pointed out in a previous comment, the story doesn't always reflect the personal views of the author or his/her lifestyle. It's fiction folks!

As for the information on warnings at the beginning, thank you. I will incorporate that on the next one if deemed necessary.

Tony Stark

Thanks. By the by shut the fuck up PPP you cunt.

What would lit be without them, how can standing in a closet jacking your little dick while the love of your life cheats on you be erotic? Sick, oh ya.

Your wife is a slut and you are a perv cockold, and? You now have a open marriage and a new hoby so what do you do next, nothing but jack off. Pretty sad dude.

.....if you are going to spar two points. Don't contradict yourself in one paragraph. Don't agree with me first. Complete loser.

How long was it before the husband come out of the closet (in more ways than one) and ate that warm gooey cream pie? Did he have time to put some nice frilly panties on before he did?

You want to suck cock. Tony, to even be able to write this, you have to be gay. It's a simple fact. you get off on being dominated by another male, you get off on comparing the other's males cock to yours... and you want the female to be a whore. So, Tony, why are you writing here? Why don't you just go out and get a sex life? Who are you pretending for? the readers? yourself? So many sad and pathetic losers on this site. I'm starting to get the big picture here... a large group of fat middle aged losers who have only had their palm for the last ten years... and they start getting off on gay sex, but can't face it.

The "storyline" was very good, but you could have provide much more details about the sex...............could have been great

Could have been a "reluctant seduction" that went too far..........with details.

Almost a GREAT story..........

Yet another WACC with a loveless slut wife story, how boring.

Mark has dozens of opportunities to stop this train wreck, but Stark brings out all of the time worn excuses why Mark doesn't do anything except watch the wreck. Both Jill and Mark deserve the bleak futures they now face. There is no realistic happy ending available for this couple if Stark writes it. It would probably continue with Jill screwing everyone who derided her as a geek in high school. She would of course screw them in the marital bed, feed Mark cream pies, and have 6 children by everyone except Mark. Mark would masturbate in the closet and plan for revenge after he had paid for all of his bastards to graduate college. Horrible story.

I read this because of a sequel written by another author. I really wish I hadn't. Now I hope the sequel fixes this disaster. We'll see...

Definitely hot and well written, but the hubby's reaction is disappointing. Perhaps he can come to his senses and turn the cheating bitch out.

Wimps do not deserve to be married... to anyone.

Wimps deserve to be beating their pud 10 years after their wives destroy them in divorce lamenting on their own sick memories.

So go on and beat your pud and watch the real men pass you by.

What a bunch of assholes to come to a porn site, go to the section about slutty wives, then complain about it. Go read your Duck Dynasty biography again.

Another amazing husband who can't get enough from watching. Unbelievable!

No, comments are fine, it's fucks like you that are pathetic.Who elected you the policeman of literotica? Don't like the comments, don't read them. Fuck you asshole, everybody is entitled to an opinion on an open public feedback. No comment on the story, didn't read it, the tags told me it wasn't anything I would enjoy and the comments backed up my decision. I detest the sick willing cuckold tales and stay away from them. Too bad this category has way too many of these lousy stories.

That the husband liked to watch, is his decision...But to like to be cheated by his wife is another...All things must be a compromise between husband and wife...

Not my cup of tea, but the story was well-written. Why did Hubby expect them to come home rather than go to Kyle's hotel room? Why didn't she worry Hubby would call her from LV?

I know some people are stupid but this wife is the queen of them she cheats on her loving and caring husband with her highschool crush.and unfulfilled dream who dident give a ass abouth her in highschool

This story is about what? Has any meaning? A woman with no self-esteem, that was laughed in high school and then cheated the man that loved her with the man that despised her when she was a ugly duck? A man that found out his wife will cheat on him and does nothing? Then the story end in the point where should be beginning...So a waste of time writing it and also reading it...1*

No wonder it didn't continue by this author. Hopefully someone else will develop the characters so that they become real people with a conscience and some morality. 1*

Another cheating slut wife. But the background information really wasn't sufficient to set her cheating up. And why would the husband really be in the closet? That seemed far fetched and unreasonable without further explanation. With too little information, lacking original or clever writing, this just wasn't worth the time spent to read it.

Makes my blood boil what a slut

Thanks for the effort.

I give it five stars, not because it was great, more just to piss of the one clown who feels it's his life's calling to post negative things on stories in this section.

for writing this you putz.

This story is terrible, but you do have a chance to save it. I hope you can.

Nicely written short story. Keep writing more however you see them and FUCK these pathetic tiny dick assholes who go to "loving Wives" and then complain because no one warned that these stories contain sex between adults. For the complainers why don't you just stay in a dark closet and beat off reading your bible. If every writer on this site listened to these dickless idiots nothing would ever be written and published here. I often start reading stories on here which are not to my liking. What do I do? I, as a mature adult, simply go to another story. I do not insult the writer or tell them how I would have the story written if I wrote it myself. Hell if you want the story to end differently write your own damn story. Most of these complainers could not write a simple grocery list without fucking it up.

You are typing while you are waiting for your favorite fudge packer. Idiot

Liked the story , so far you have kept it real . But that would not be the end , the husband keeping the secret as well as the wife and donkey dick . 2 things if they live in the town of the reunion , who else might know ? Also and more important could he now trust her ? Next time would he even know ? Donkey dick had just ended a relationship what would happenn now , especially if she'd so easy ? I realize you set the stage for him to be a voluntary cuck maybe a wimp but , in most relationships like what they had before the big cheat , he would want to take control and not allow his threatened marriage to free fall . Already things changed before he left her , I think he would play his full house go off really bad feeling betrayed ECT.......... Of course he would have to say he came home after the trip was canceled , plus he doesn't have to tell her he found the clothes but now he could lay it on her it was premeditated , with the freshly shaved cunt . I think he could to assure no one else knew really go off about her shopping friend knowing ( the best defense is a good offense .) Why all this? She will do anything to save her marriage , and this gives him control when he does have her do it again , perhaps her having donkey dick believe he is out of town for a weekend , so husband and wife together could enjoy the many after stretched cunt fuck sessions . If this couple conflicts let it be because she tells a friend and it gets back to donkey dick after the old football team knows many who live in town . .

More needed , lots of options available , should you do more please have her madly in love with her husband , even when she's addicted let other men be the ones that demand more .

Iron Man is a cuck?

Part 02?

It would be fun if hubby steps out and confronts them. Hubby could wait until they're in bed and crawl in next to wifey and see the look on her face when she wakes up.

That’s the end of the second act. Not the end of the story for fucks sake. “Little did they know….” Is a cop out anyway. It sounds more like a place holder written to remind you of where you intended to take the third act after you finished your cheesesteak, dropped an epic deuce and finally made it back to your keyboard. Don’t forget to wipe the crumbs from your belly you heathen and get back to work. I’m tired of authors writing decent stories and then abruptly ending them without actually ending the fucking story. Ugh. Super frustrating dude. What a waste of time. I don’t care how you end it. Meaning I’m agnostic to which direction you take your characters, but they need resolution. Wtf. He just finally watched his wife blow and fuck another dude. This whole time has just been speculation and catastrophizing. We know it turned him on but does that make him a cuck? Does it breed resentment and ruin his relationship? How does she handle the fall out of such an indiscretion? Do they confront the fact that the QB Kyle was the only one to act reluctant and bring up her husband. Before the dance and twice before the ultimate betrayal. Which is an interesting choice for that character. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ id Probably try to keep her mind off that shit when my Weiner’s in charge. Siri must think my Weiner’s important and deserves to be a proper noun. Ima leave it. Cuz this is way too long already. Just fucking end it damnit. Fucking Mexican shootout or whatever. Ala reservoir dogs. Or some crazy ultimate gun battle like tombstone. That would be my preference for every author who wastes my time like this. Let’s kill ALL YOUR DARLINGS!. . Read about Joseph Campbell’s heroes journey if you need help with an actual story arc.