All Comments on 'Out Of Nowhere'

Well done, my dear. An excellent first outing. He has certainly broken out of the friend zone.

Excellent first story, very hot! Thank you for sharing

A really good first entry.There is some editing work needed, but you're on the right track. Keep going!

Great tension and super at revealing the way the woman feels getting aroused by surprise. Stick to one tense, probably past tense is best.

Good story, some editing needed but very much enjoyed the story. Potentially series in the future?

Love him.. hate that it ended waiting for more with baited breathe and a lady chubb

I enjoyed the story but it left me hungry for more.

and I sometimes think that everybody in my field is sexually frustrated, judging by how often comments on typos, verb tense, etc. show up in the comments on this site. The main thing--and the hard thing to accomplish--is to make a story arousing, and the author definitely achieves that here. I have to assume that if she wants editing advice, she knows how to ask someone--though, again, I really feel the story is too hot for it to matter much, unless the ultimate goal is print publication in specific kinds of contexts. And she needs to be very careful not to let an editor change her voice in the story, which is already terrific.

The big question to me is when will this story go on? Obviously a lot of us are hoping the answer is soon.

I just stumbled across this. Apparently it is your only submission to the site. You should write more and this story begs for a sequel.

...is what you are!! Please finish it!

Reluctance is so exciting, especially when it is overcome and she finds out she wants his large warm cock.