All Comments on 'Out of Order'

Hubby needs to find out just how cold hearted this bitch is. He could do better with a bag-lady instead of this lowlife tramp.

While I can't find too much fault with the writing, the subject matter certainly made me almost puke.

1* Garbage

Who reads a story like this, (in which the "clueless" husband is portrayed to be lacking sexually, and since marital sex is unsatisfying, the adultery seems "justified")

yet still get the largest sense that even the author knows that it is actually the wife who is to blame for the poor sex life. And not just because she is cheating so flagrantly. The very descriptions of her sex life with her husband paint herself as the one who is lacking in the bedroom. She is the cold fish. She is the one who, instead of teasing and turning him on to get a decent response, is abusive, cold and distant. Now compound that with the obvious lack of respect that he feels, is it any wonder he can't get it up for her? This isn't his fault, it is hers. The blackness of her soul has manifested itself on the outside, making her repulsive to him. Sure, he would like his marriage to improve, so he is trying. But DAMN, she isn't making it easy.

Lets pretend that he IS AND STAYS clueless of her multiple infidelities. (which probably ended the night of this story, how could it not?? If he didn't know before, he does now....) Anyway, even IF he buys her lies and bullshit for a little while longer, and never mentions another man to her out of suspicion, I STILL see him divorcing her, because of the lack of love and respect. Somehow, these sex obsessed women HAVE to realize, that if it is bad for her it is ALSO bad for him. How much longer will HE really put up with a shitty sex life with a selfish bitch?

This is dumb writing, there is an odor with sex. Does she have a bracelet on that could do that much damage to her clothes? For him to be a smart business man, you make him into a real dumb ass.

goes to write there should be someone there to hit them over the head with a hammer and we would not be subject to this garbage.

It was a nice story but hard to believe that the hubby didn't catch on to her cheating. She on the other hand is a tramp and one can only hope that when she catches a STD her hubby's lightbulb will go on and he will find someone that will love him like he loves her.

When a story begins with: "I like him because he is kind and considerate, and relatively well off - he takes care of me financially"...I know the story is aiming for less than 1 *...And I wasn't wrong with this one...Just a question: How could the husband be so "well off" being so stupid?

Thanks for the story: it was hot, passionate, and a fun read! What surprised me most about this here are the comments regarding the subject of the story. Are you kidding me? All of a sudden literotica is full of prudes judging the female subject in this story? Come on!

Well this is not your strong suit.

Nothing else to add

The scary part is that RIGHT NOW there are many marriages like this one when one spouse is CAKE EATING like crazy. She has the best of both worlds, so why change?

There is no excuse for what you are doing. although you have many. I detest lies and those who tell them. You are a piece of work.

All I could sense was total apathy regarding this woman. You could have been writing a story on watching grass grow, that's how boring it was. I mean, it's sex. Even bad sex is still pretty good but you, my friend, sucked the life out of it like a starving vampire! It's sex, how the hell did you make it so fucking boring that I damn near tell asleep?

Too bad he couldnt find out and just leave her there with nothing but her pussy to make her way home with.

I wish I could vote a negative number.

First line "and relatively well off - he takes care of me financially". The only reason she is with him. There is no love or respect on her part only greed.

Oh and a boring monotonous read that was pure formula.

Very hot! This woman deserves another chapter. Hilarious to read the comments from all the religious prudes who get sooo angry by the thought of a cheating wife. What are they doing on this site anyway?

I HATE CHEATERS

and hot! What a fucking evil bitch. 5*

This shouldn't be tagged as a cuckold story. Cucks know about their cuckolding.

Dan's (the husband) story.

I sat on the hotel bed listening to Ann my wife humming to herself in the shower, quite an amazingly recovery from her earlier unwell state. At least this time she had not embarrassed me with a client. Fucking a waiter in the ladies was reasonably low risk. I would have to get the sperm sample checked for STD's like usual before resuming contact with Ann again which was annoying as I was quite randy tonight. I would have to wait until tomorrow to celebrate today's business success, that assistant manager at HCH limited had been happy to have lunch at the Hyatt down town tomorrow, I had promised her a great discount on her next order which would get her brownie points with her boss. The quite little woman was a typical wall flower hiding behind frumpy clothes, she looked good even with no makeup. Divorced and pretty much ignored at work her follow workers filled me in on Sally, didn't date bring up two kids, exhusband gone, did a runner. I love the type they are so eager to please, have tight pussies which for my size is so important. Ann had lost her tightness long ago in her lust for the big one and as many as she can, there was now very little pleasure in seducing the wife. Still I needed her for awhile longer the economy was picking up and the shares I had received as a bonus or three were accumulating nicely, won't be long now a simple divorce, leave her the house which is mortgaged to the max, just need to find a little low maintenance replacement. Ann had been great for business, she had fucked all the senior managers and Company Directors, which had ensured I wasn't laid off in the down turn and had me managing the largest sales area of the company. I couldn't fail to make money. My peers at work took me for a mug a cuckold, laughing behind my back but I would be retiring to a paradise somewhere at 42 and they would be checking their dicks for sores. Ann had already had two bouts of clap, thrush she said, right, the blood test said otherwise. It is much easier testing the panty waste then getting a blood sample from her but one must protect ones self. Who knows tomorrow is another day Sally might just be the right fit she seems really nice. Two kids wouldn't be to bad, Ann refuses to have any. Well may be not, plenty of woman out there who are happy to be seduced by a quite little man like me, who treats them like a queen. Life is funny like that. Someone is always there who needs a little TLC and is happy to show their appreciation.

I hope he finds out someday and scorches her ass, what a bitch.

Wish I had a wife like this

Grow up and get a pair you limp dick Gaylord.

Its obviously just a made up story to retard

...NOT! And for the record, TonyKiwi put a great spin on it with his 'finish-the-damned-story'-esque comment. Funny, that actually made it palatable.

If not for TonyKiwi's value add, this story would have been in the crapper less than three lines in. Until I read that, you were headed for sub-1star territory.

Her faithlessness, her derisive, derogatory attitude and shrewish behavior towards her husband is testament to just how much bullshit most men will put up with before the hammer falls....If it represents anything at all.

Next time try a story line with some equity in it,.....or get smart and have him BTB, like he should.

Just nothing good here. I LIKE cuckolding stories, but only when there's actually a loving relationship between husband and wife. This is just a waste of good electrons.

I liked it. Some of the commenters clearly misunderstand what is meant by the words erotic fiction. Ignore the anonymous hate- bunch of cowards who wouldn't speak it to your face.

An anonymous calling out the anonymous. Now I've seen it all. Get a fucking life fellow and don't worry about things that don't concern you.

you can fool some of the people saga, TK U MLJ LV NV

As they say, "demons run when a good man goes to war". Seems to me like the husband is the only good person in the story.

Whatever your conveniance...do whatever floats your boat. To hell with any, and I do mean any, moral consideration. Go ahead and fuck anyone you want, abort any consequence, lie whenever it's necessary, and blame others when the shit hits the fan. Be the quintessential American woman! You are, aren't you. Oh yeah...don't forget the war on women...you can get huge amounts of justification from that, and blame men in the process.

Way to go,baby!

shoot that worthless cunt in the twat

You're trying to tell us that her husband can't take one look at her face and KNOW she just had sex? You trying to tell me her husband can't take one whiff of her when he gets close to her and not SMELL the sex on her? And you trying to tell us that her husband can't LISTEN to the lies she's telling him and not know she's cheating? That's got to be the dumbest story I've ever read.

I love it!

It will compel me to write stories. What a waste of DNA and oxygen. Sadly, there are people like her, I have known a few guys and gals so repulsive. OldBearSwitch

You have constructed so complete and compelling despicable woman that most of the commenters can't distinguish the difference between your fictional character and real life.

Excellent job of making the readers feel this is a news report, not a fantasy first existing ONLY in your mind, now shared with us.

Several small errors in the mechanics of writing (grammar, missing words, etc.) but having an editor and scrupulous re-reading and reading a can improve that.

All in all, a great effort.

You write whores really well. He should slip the restaurant owner a few bucks to feature some ground whore on the menu. It makes killer burgers and meatloaf.

When I woke up in the room by myself the next morning... until I found his Goodbye slut note.

I just can't read the story, this kind of story. I am appreciative for the author to have time despite work , to take time out to write a story for someone to read. I mean it takes a lot of goodness on a person to write so other person will enjoy and for that kudos to all writers who want to share their work for free.

Now for comments ABOUT the story and not the author. I can't read this kind of stories even though I know it is fiction but I cannot bring to torture myself. Just like in games I don't lambast the game creator on his genre but I also don't push myself to play it because I don't concur with the creator's theme. So I am not a hater, I just know what is right for me. I only read the first two paragraphs and decide I don't like it.

Anything much below a four is shit. Just so you know.

Come on men cant really be that stupid.

Half a star for stupidity, idiocy and ignorance for even entertaining the thought that husbands are unaware of what goes on around them. You would do well to study your subject before concocting a BS story.

This falls under the "STUPID STORIES" category.

I think it would do you good to read "Separation And Anxiety" by TCct.