by TxRad
Clearly hot - so it's a 5 - but, you use, far to many, commas. :-)
Also "chuckles" and "looks" and "laughs" is a bit overused in the intro. Just leave them out, and let the reader fill in the gaps. Otherwise, really good.
SN
Took me a while to read this because i was so horney but it was one great read. I dont like many stories with anal but this was told in a way,(realistic or not), that made it fun and even sexy. "jakk"
absolutely loved it....I could easily picture myself as "Julie"....sexy, hot, sweet all at the same time
In most stories I don't believe the passion. In most stories I don't believe how long the passion lasts. You take us all the way and every bit is believable. Great characters, too. Thanks.
My boyfriend just ordered a bondage kit for us to try out. I think I'll send him this story to give him some ideas. WOW! This is the first time that I've been moved enough to leave a comment.
I have cummed several times myself as i read this.
Keep up the good writing.
Thanks. Whef. I came well and often thanks to your story. I like how their relationship progresses and I also like their conversations. Nice dialogy.
my cute little pink thong is very wet now.. wow!! I <3 your story.. good job.. it got my pussy very moist..
really good story, combining almost-too-sweet romance with hot-and-alittle-rough sex. The perfect daydream... Thank u
TxRad:
An excellent story and - well written to boot. The dialog was believable and I found zero typos; a rare case indeed.
Thank you!
If only everyone could do this a few times a month.
An excellent story, great dialogue, and wonderful naration makes this story one of the toughest to beat on the site.
In the future, try using "piqued my interest."
Damn OCD.
A great ending, I definitely didn't see it coming. For such an incredible story, everything was actually believable.
So very well written, definately didn't expect the ending... *tears* Powerful writing.. and now.. I think I've had a shower.. or need one.. *grins* Since I'm terribly wet...
~Rebellious Sub
So good. Well thought out, almost as if you took notes during the scene. An excellent example of role-playing as a relationship enhancer. I wish I had a chaise lounge now!
After reading more than 60 of your stories, this is by far the absolute best I have seen from you. Your usage of commas is well within reason, much less than your normal. The story line is absolutely fasntastic, and there are few, if any, typos. I never really noticed any in this story that I can recall. Your spelling has improved as well as word usage. My hat is off to you, well done!
I rode my dildo while reading this with a vibe on my clit. Thank you for this. I wish it was me.
A refreshingly romantic tale of sensual dominance. And exceedingly well-written . . . I'd usually roll my eyes at any story in which the woman had that many orgasms in one session, but you made it believable. Nice surprise ending, too.
I should note that I actually began to identify with the sub on this one . . . Very unusual for me, as I'm domme to the core! Well done.
You are such an epic writer!!! Best story I've read on here ever xxx
wow,i cant even begin to imagine that haha.
This is a work of art. It has to be the all time best story that I have read. Thank you so much.
All I have to say is just WOW. Best story I have read on here so far it just sent my fantasies wild!
If only this happened in real life.
If you trawl the internet using 'Bing' looking for "10 best BDSM stories" you will find TxRad there twice, this story tells you why that is. Need I say more.
As sir_Nathan said, there are way too many commas. That's my only criticism. You are a top-notch writer. The story held my interest and unfolded the budding attraction that led to the perfect conclusion. Thank you. JudyLee
This was an amazingly well written story. Like so many others have said, "yes, please!"
One of the best stories I've ever read. Very graphic, explicit and erotic. I only wonder if a woman can have that many orgasms in such a short period of time, and if a man can hold off as long as he did