by beatriceguy
The story starts out a little rough but soon smoothes out nicely. Good job on filling in the background information without info dumping. The whole Walmart sequence was very well done and the pacing was great. Look forward to your next chapter.
One small technical issue: Glocks do not have a thumb safety. The safety on any Glock is on trigger.
One of my favorite genres. I hope you have the time and energy to continue with the story.