by rockandroller
Very unusual, very delicious, makes me want to do all those things. You've tapped some of my kinkiest fantasies. :-)
I don't think you have ever written a story that I haven't
liked! Keep it up because you are very good.
Joel
sounds like a TRUE STORY to me if not it sure is a great one good job we need more like this one
At least there is a plot, a progression of events! While I confess this type of thing doesn't turn me on (as a male) you wrote this very well and it has good erotic details. Perhaps the "P" name thing went on a bit too long, a few examples would have done the job just as well.
most people not in the D's lifestyle may not like this kind of story.... i read some rather rude comments about it, but to each their own right?...i think it was a great story,, nicely written, a lil slow in the beginning but still a good story .. will watch for more of yours in the future...
"P" also stands for PREGNANT- what a shock to him when his sissy tells hil that P also stands for PAPA, which he is going to be from all the fucking he has been giving her which has her PG and is going to soon have her tummy PROTRUDING out in front since she found out she is is exPECTING.
absolutely breathtaking...reminds me of a game Sir and i played.. i loved this story
i simply loved it. you tapped some of my kinkiest desires here, i wish this could happen to me! thanks,
antoinette
Honestly,,,, don't write in this tense. Its really obnoxious and it ruins a story! this story could have been amazing if only you had written it normally... your other stories are amazing but seriously
There's some issues at the beginning with the POV, but on the whole its a great read. Interesting, fun, erotic. Great stuff.
I'm not someone who likes the first person point of view in storytelling, but this was something spectacular. 5 out of 5.
It was simply gorgeous. The writing was like poetry, so beautiful and deliberate. Keep writing :)
There are elements that I love. I like the writing style, and the poetic sentence structure. It is a bit different but I feel a bit more substance for the story, say hints about how they got together the first time and how they fell in love, etc.
Try that in public and you'll quickly be in solitary. Been more realistic if he'd invited the waitress to go home with them. . . one into 2 = satsfaction.
Although pretty far fetched, it was a titillating enough read. ;-) SL
sick bastard writer HOPE DON T SEE YOUR WRITING ANYMORE,sick bastard asshole.........
P is also for pathetic, poor, plagiarized, and pitied. All the phase fit this piece quite well. Several sections of this piece are remarkably similar to others in the novel area of Literotica. One piece in particular, which I do not remember the name, was set in the French quarter of New Orleans, where a gentleman took advantage of the young lady in the same way and a dark portion of a French restaurant. Much too similar to be accidental. Using a belt in the same situation, I don't think so, that's why I think this story should be pitied. Sorry about the grade of two stars it's one better than I should've given you. Bob
Damn, I was sure the waitress would pop back in at the end!
Well that was fun :)