All Comments on 'Party Swap'

She is a fucking lying cheating slut, fine to fuck but not to fall in love, dump her ass, she really won't care. P.S. if you are a man you owe Mark a ass kicking.

she a slut for mark.

You have to be kidding, right? Why would he put up with that deceit? He should have walked up to her and told her to stay with Mark since that was what she wanted. Dump her now!!! Sorry, it just didn't work for me.

Tim

Mark needs his ass kicked, big time. The girlfriend needs to be got rid of. But overall not a bad story, at least the lead character got some sex which is far better than most stories of this kind.

Maybe he has had a good insight to what his life with his girlfriend will be like when if he makes her his wife.

Dump the cheating slut before it costs him half of all of his stuff.

Thanks for the story, but it is in the wrong genre.

Are you that much of a wuss?

Here are the results:

1. Kick Marks ass!

2. Slap that cheating slut in the face!

3. Walk away from this shit as fast as you can!

4. Never look Back!

5. Find a woman who really loves you!

6. Live hapily ever after!

If no one is married, how can this be a Loving Wives story?

....not only stories but whole genres hide from legitimate critique. Bitch should hang.( I'm serious, actually hang until dead, lancing the boil before it can infect the host) -she's the worst kind, accusing him of what she in fact set up. Death really quite moderate a punishment upon reflection.Death,Death,Death.Hmmmm....This gives me an Idea. (" Chuck the Cuck, harbinger of death! "- The germ of an Idea....

this story made no sense, two girls both named Karen, cheat on their respective boyfriends and the "hero" only finds out because his best friend gave him the wrong directions to a fantasy that didn't make any sense at all because he was enacting a "rape" fantasy at a house party....I mean, seriously, what the fuck is going through your head?

It wasn't all that bad, it was actually a decent read.

Please folks, please realize this is a site dedicated to FICTION. It's pretend. These are fantasies and head games that people write down. Don't act as if this was the real thing. As fictional erotica, I think it's kind of good.

and I'm not blond!

You go to a party, prepared for a lot of fun by bringing a box of condoms but later on get pissed because your girlfriend wants to have some fun, too.

You meet your friend Mark, who hadn't been with a girl in months and who claims to have been together with his 'Karen' for weeks. Remember, the 'Karen' you don't know but as we learn later on, whose ass you've been wanting to grope for a long time. Then we are introduced to 'Tracy', who never gets mentioned again ...

I could go on like this but it would only get more confusing.

Don't get me wrong. Parts of your story were fun to read and I think it has got potential. BUT you've got to get your basics right first.

Typical LW story of no honest communication between partners, and it all seems perfectly normal to them. There is no resolution to the situation brought up so the reader doesn't even have enough to imagine an ending to the story.

You build up tension, put your characters in a situation which demands some unfolding or untangling. Then you don't resolve it: result -- frustration for the reader. Tsk tsk.

The story, not so much. It was very difficult following two Karens and in the end it didn't matter all that much.

Only one thing I can take away from this posting... YOU'RE A FUCKING MORON!

Seriously, did you put ANY thought into this??? ANY AT ALL?

Ha ha ha only laughable!!!

So... if he has any sense, just move on. He doesn't do it for his girlfriend. He's not enough and no man ever will be. Her actions are one's of deceit, betrayal, lies, and disrespect.

Add all the above up and what does he need to do to protect himself? Cut bait.

She's a just girlfriend. Dump her and move on. The girlfriends moral compass is broken. In all other areas of her life she perhaps is quite different, but this woman would be a thorn in the side of any man she coupled with.

I enjoyed this little tale of cheating and betrayal because the way the story unfolded presented the dimwit boyfriend a hard choice to make but the author left that for the next chapter.

I enjoy reading some of justifications for these types of scenarios the characters use to accept cheating in their relationships. When children are involved I totally get it. But this case?

That said ...looking forward to the next chapter to see how the boyfriend deals with this. Does he have what it takes to walk away? I don't this so. I get the feeling from the tone of this chapter the boyfriend will keep her. What I want to find out is the reasons he uses to justify a decision that go directly against his own good.

I think you have a hard time finishing stories.