by Eros_343
An improvement on the previous, which I liked too btw. I see these stories have been up for a while, but boy am I glad I found them! Good work.
Yo keep going your story is interesting.
really interesting try and do more pls
Very interesting. I like where this is heading. Good work. Keep it up.
Chapter 2 is better then chapter 1 keep it up. It is a good read
This is getting better and better! Please get chapter 3 out!
keep goin...i will wait to read more from you on this yarn