All Comments on 'Poor Hunter'

Great story, CP, thanks for sharing. Some absolutely brilliant “unintentional” zingers that cracked me up. Very well written, thanks again for a great read. 5 stars. ✨ ✨✨✨✨

Brilliant writing. Thank you for a hard to write refreshing story.

Haha 5 stars, and that just for the phone dialog with the attorney-bastard.

I really laughed to tears.

Hehe great dialog. Dawn was a head case. Janet was awesome.

Easy five stars. I almost fainted when he gave his retort about the paternal parentage of one of the guys.....

Janet was priceless...

Incredibly clever story line. I loved the character development. His statements and comebacks were priceless. A really great piece of writing. An easy 5-😊😊😊😊😊’s

Decent story but great main character. Love his little factoids!

Really liked the story but dam it was hard to read when Anthony dove off into his Asperger's response. I know it was the nature of the story, but it was also exasperating having to slow the story down. Still gets four stars and a thanks.

One of the most heartfelt stories written in LW

somewhere a village is looking for its idiot LOL

like most of your stories,well done...4stars... JZK

Very much enjoyed this story. And I completely agree with ZippityDoDaDay below. That line was priceless

"Somewhere a village is looking for its idiot,"

Worth the read for this line alone! 🤣

Wonderful!

WONDERFUL STORY< 10 stars. Even without benefit of paperwork, Janet has a husband, daughter and another son. A LOVING FAMILY! Besides that, it's really FUNNY!!

I heard this entire story in Sheldon’s voice. Good job. Clearly fiction, but I enjoyed it!

I read it again and I am still enjoying it. The author turned a rather sad story into something downright funny on the last page with a bunch of memorable lines. Great effort!

Absolutely hilarious. Definitely 5 star.

great dialogue

Not bad and some moments of humor. A solid four stars.

Sheldon comes to life. Nicely done. TC Ireland

Liked

Good story. It will keep me reading.

Good story but with a moron as a lawyer he would have gotten much more from the twit than described.

Very good story,quite amusing in parts.

Wonderful. Clever. Well-written. 5 stars.

Wow what a great read!

You have a couple of nice quotes. Good story.

Thanks.

Wonderful.

"The last 1% are the nonperforming deadwood. Historical Kings, Queens, Princesses and Princes, also; trust fund babies, second generation CEOs and most political leaders who hold office past eight years."

Your mc is consistent, entirely believable, and scintillating throughout.

Thank you very, very much.

LWlurker

You have the talent ,why you stopped writing?.? This story was good but the divorce facts were so wrong.she abandoned the family and was a whore. Now way she would get all you wrote in the story for here.

Really Good. I loved it

5 Stars

1. "Time is relative" means that it DOES speed up or down in the reference frames of moving observers, or for observers stationary in a gravity field. Exactly the opposite of what you say. The only thing that doesn't change is the speed of light. I suppose the "time" you refer to is of the "perceived" kind, but this has nothing to do with relativity and clocks...

2. The rest mass-energy equivalence (E=mc^2) has ablolutely nothing to do with chemical detonations in which energy comes from a chemical reactions AND NOT from the conversion of matter to photons (energy).

You may say... so what, this is just a story. True, but then your blunders are really hilarious and not in a good sense. Just try to write things you really understand...

Is that even a lousy attorney cleans her clock when they divorce. He has solid evidence that she abandoned him and the kids and was carrying on an affair. No walking away from that. So your portrayal of his losing in Court was ludicrous. As was the ending. A complete fool could have and would have sunk Dawn's boat and her 15 seconds of fame in a heartbeat. Even for a fictional story this was just too unbelievable.

Very good I loved his aspie story. There is another one on LIT called Love in the Age of Chemicals it is rated highly

Mr. T should have caught that

A very good story with a better than happy ending. I enjoyed it again.

Very good and funny, while giving insight behind the witty comments. 5*

It is hard enough to write from a person's point of view. It is incredible if the spokesperson is so out of normal experiences. It reminds me of Faulkner

Got half way through and gave up. Felt like I was reading a transcript from Fox News.

Wait I think I did.

Loved it, another 5

Aspergers is not a mental disease it is a collection name for people who have development issues and further more the only docters in the world who would put you in the catagory aspergers are american's proberly so the can sell some more drugs

You entertained me. 3rd read, still 5*

Did not like that the slut wife got all the money and lifetime alimony...

The anon comments

Is it true that you must be devoid of a sense of humor to be allowed to post as an anon on Lit? In this story, the Yogi Berra quotes alone are worth the price of admission (ok, my little joke there). Seriously, Cpete, you are a great Lit author, and I love to read, and sometimes reread, your stories. Tanglosax

There were some great lines in this story. That was fun!

Caught and he doesn't give a shit

Many times. There was quite a lot of use of metaphors like "over the moon" etc. That he not only understood but used himself. The whole point of aspie literalism is that they don't get metaphors. Since you slung them all over the place with nary a care, the suspension of belief was nigh impossible. He just became another wisecracker like all your MCs. Missed in this one. 2*

I would have preferred that Dawn got screwed in the divorce since the pictures of her infidelity were everywhere. How could his lawyer lose? And just because he doesn't think he needs money, his kids do. This could have been a lot better.

I got lost in that story. It was that good. Reading Anthony was a lot of fun. Dawn was such a lefty twit that she was fun too. Just a really good story.

Funny story, even when you "borrowed" as scene from the Big Bang Theory episode where Sheldon and Amy had their first date. ("Do you consider yourself a slut?" was Amy's line about PEnny after Sheldon calcuted pretty much like your character the amount of men she slept with)

The word vegetarian, coined by the founders of the British Vegetarian Society in 1842, comes from the Latin word vegetus, meaning "whole, sound, fresh, or lively," as in **** vegetus-a mentally and physically vigorous person. The original meaning of the word implies a balanced philosophical and moral sense of life, a lot more than just a diet of vegetables and fruits.

logic and indifference are the key to all the best vacuous wife stories.

I love snappy dialogue and will forgive a lot in a movie or story if it entertains my inner adolescent. This was my second read through of this story and it still made me laugh, so it gets a lot of forgiveness, even if it doesn't need much.

That cpete was going for the oblivious straight man routine was a given and playing every response for laughs must have been fun, but I doubt your average Aspie would give such deadly appropriate comedic comebacks every time.

Of course, in the tradition of Blazing Saddle or The Naked Gun, you don't give the audience time to groan before you hit 'em with another one. Mel Brooks would approve, probably.

Not bad, not bad at all. 😃

I admire your humour!! That is at a 5 star level!

There are no Steelers in Pittsburg. Steelers are in Pittsburgh.

For the fun. Five stars plus.

...one of the great ones.

Vapidous Lookatus. Ha! How'd you come up with that? As well as the other great statistics, lines, ideas and wirricisms? A genius and a comedian rolled into one.

Paul in Oklahoma

This should be in the humour category... I was laughing my ass off

You keep spelling through as thru, that's a big no no in prose, after all it's not text speak, but a story you are trying to write.

I implore you, please fix it and never do it again

Sorry I couldn't grant 6 stars... I forgot...

Even better when he sugested his mother has multiple partners... Ha Ha ! Ha ! Even before that the guy was stutering !!! Ha !

Sorry I couldn't grant 6 stars

I really laughted my Ass Off... What ever that means ! When reading about the pompous straying wife's paramour's questionabout who his father is ... Ha Ha

Shit. I'lll even put a bookmark to read again later !

A fun read.

and those she hurts can unravel. TK U MLJ LV NV

Sounds like the wife was good for nothing slut who got away without any repercussions. Would have liked to see her with aids or something.

I like this story. My son has aspergers and the potrayal was dead on. The conversations and behaviors were entertaining having lived with it. The good guy wins. Good job. Thanks.

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Second time reading this, and I liked it even more this time. You kept up the protagonist's persona consistently throughout, and it gave us a wonderful window into the absurdity of what most people just accept as normal.

So I gave it 4* . what's really funny is some retard on here wondering what 80% has to do with 4*.

In an enclosed space like the vault would have done more than give the people inside earache. It could have caused serious injury and even death with the shockwave it is capable of.

When I first joined the army, I attended a safety brief where a flash bang was placed under a tin helmet. The explosion sent the helmet 250-300 feet in the air... They are not things to be underestimated or treated with anything less than the respect you would treat any ammunition.

Your story was wonderful and it was well written. 10 stars.....

That is brilliant.

I think that I have known many people throughout my lifetime who have Vapidous Lookatus.

If it is not a real condition, it should be, because it certainly exists in a lot of society.

Thankyou.

I don't see how it matters if it IS revealed that it was only a flash bang grenade.

The point is that at the time HE didn't KNOW that as far as he knew it was a deadly grenade and he acted heroically

Well written with an interesting plot ... At times extremely funny

Loved it ... Thanks ... 5/5

I loved this story. It reminded me of a young lad I looked after in a care home many years ago. It made me question a lot of things we take as being acceptable but don't necessary make any sense! His questions and answers were so blunt and in your face. A good rendition of the problems encountered I thought.

as do people. TK U MLJ LV NV

I laughed from start to finish. What a treat!

He's a Vulcan! People with Asbergers still have emotions,and Anthony seemed devoid of them!

My best friend has Asbergers, along with the quirkiest sense of humour ever! Yes, he is wired differently, and has no idea how to handle social situations, but that doesn't make him a robot. Anthony seems to be based upon 'Rainman', as you earlier mentioned, but the reality is that movies, and actors, are as far removed from reality as you can get. Being socially awkward and being able to give undivided attention to whatever catches your interest, (my buddy has taught himself to master the guitar, as well as building his own high end computers on the cheap), doesn't mean you turn into Mr. Spock! They have the exact SAME range of emotions, they just don't feel the need to have those emotions on constant display, or allow emotion to make their decisions.

Still an enjoyable story, told from a completely different point of view, which makes it stand out above most others on lit, so good job.

One thing bothers me -

I know are divorce laws are crazy, and overly skewed in favor of the wife, but even with that, and a big-shot lawyer, I don't see how documented abandonment along with adultery gets the floor wiped with him.

He's not going to be able to BTB, but he's probably gonna get a fair deal, and certainly when she signs that book deal the settlement is going to be re-visited!

Very funny

"The medium income of a law enforcement official is well within the mean of most wage earners."'. In most major cities, Patrolman, or street cops make from $50,000-$70,000 per year. Definately NOT in the range for most wage earners.

Some pretty heady stuff surrounded by offbeat humour that made way for a fun read. It is quite impressive to see such serious human interest issues weaved with back-slapping tongue in cheek humor. Although, a person with Aspergers syndrome doesn't feel or sense emotion like those unafflicted, they nevertheless live a parallel universe under different rules.

As I was reading this and had gotten to "Vapidous Lookatus", a reverse mortgage commercial starting showing.

ROTFLMAO!!!

Sweet!

I really enjoyed the humor. Very entertaining, thank you

Wonderful story and outstanding humor. More than 5 stars

well written and entertaining can't ask for more since time is all it costs I would assume a comment for the author with 'constructive' thoughts is good.

I really enjoyed the humor of the story made it a better read.

Please keep writing and I will keep reading

Keep those zingers coming.

For me, during the entire story, it was the voice of sherlock that was narrating. The face, the mannerism, it was like a real life version au of the tv detective.

5 stars.

5 starrs

but when they are thrown at you over and over and over again the joke wears thin. they become as annoying as the cliché upon which this story is based.

too much, too often, to still be funny.

it was funny the first 4 or 5 times. but eventually the object lesson you were trying to teach us was lost in the redundancy and repetition.

yes, aspers are a unique lot. yes, they have a singular viewpoint of society and the rules of common behaviour. but beating us over the head with the same trite "joke" again and again destroys the humour. in the end, the over repetition of the use of literal language demeans the purpose of the example.

Sheesh! Good story. I gave it 5* because it got me laughing--especially at the end!!

I enjoyed the story very much.

an interesting tale. Well written. Thanks for the offering.

Thoroughly enjoyable. I hope the stats are right, because I will be quoting them.

A very well written and witty story.

I was married for 18 years. Before she became pregnant by another man. I do not not begrudge her having other lovers but I did not want to know. I suffered a serious lower back and neck injury. Due to my injuries I have endured from pain an instant "Soft On" . I was still working in a underground coal mine in the hunter valley in Australia. After 3 children I had a vasectomy but I did not know at the time we separated that she was pregnant but she told me that she had her womb scraped which is really what a abortion is. Our divorce took my Nissan Nivarra 4WD my 1340 Dyna Convertible my home that was left to me by my father before we married so as you can imagine I an still very pissed. I have found a love in a way with a sport. I started shooting handguns for my chosen sport because I can no longer play Golf. In Australia shooting handguns is a VERY serious thing. Sorry bud pissed again.

Life doesn't always make sense, so a story about it doesn't have to make sense either.

this was the highest rated story in LW in the last few weeks.

Thanks so much Cpete!!!!

BTW, I had to read some of the one-liners out loud just to share some of the laughs with my wife.

Great Work!

I enjoyed every word.

No additional comments or complaints except to say we have what they call paleolithic bodies, but we are living in a post-paleolithic world, hence the obesity.

Have a five!