by PennyOlive
*VERY* dont make us wait too long for another chappy :)
I have to agree with the other commentators. We need another chapter, or two, along with more details. This was extraordinary and left me wanting to know the end of their tale.
That can't be the end of the story? This needs to be a whole series. I'm waiting for chapters 2 to whatever... Please and thank you. I like the character build. They really have great chemistry together...
Finally, a non-consent and impregnation story featuring a black woman!
Hope you won't make us wait too long for chapter 2.
Wow - what an intense and hot chapter. Please update soon! I hated and loved Jeffrey.
i dont know how long ago you wrote this story but i have read it multiple times and want more plz
Hope you are not going to abandon this intense story. It's too damn good to be left hanging in the air. I sure be eagerly waiting for more.
that this was not the end and you plan on continuing this. I find the premise interesting and I look forward to seeing whether or not you can round this out to completion (no pun intended).
This is sooo good lol Been waitin 4ever for the next part :) Please write more <3
I would love to read the next chapter i check back ever so often to see if you updated this story
it was great - you can even end it there - but you should write other love stories. gave it a 5
I have enjoyed reading this story lol and this is like my 6th time rereading it. I'm dying waiting for an update lol please continue! :)
I REALLY love this story! It would be a crime not to finish it!
Why wasn't this story about Elsa? The moment she was introduced I thought wow she's awesome I want to know more. Then the moved on to that jackass and boring submissive danielle.
Not wrong with being a submissive I suppose but Elsa sounded like a firecrackr I can't help but be dissapointed that she wasn't the main charater.
Well atleast the sex was good.
that was good. I want to know how they progress... work, her pregnancy, and their relationship. great story!! loved his obsessiveness.
This was hot......and Danielle is not boring.......she's cute cute actually. Once he turns on the charm offensive, the game's afoot!
I love when the tables get turned on a man. Very good story. Updates?
I enjoyed reading this story so far. Ready for more updates plz.
TThat story was like a damn tornado.
It blew thru and wrecked shit and was over before you knew it.
5 stars. And would love more chapters or at least an epilogue.
Please show us what happens next! I like the idea that this obsession he has for Danielle has him by the balls. Hopefully, we get to see more from her? I feel like she is going to need a great deal of spine and spirit to get through this.
please more i want to know what happens next and then what she does if she does get pregnant with his baby
I am a black woman and even though I love me some chocolate men I've always been for the most part with white men and don't plan to change that, please continue with these characters, thank you in advance.
Loved this first chapter would love too see what the future holds for these two
If she gets pregnant he will have no reason to doubt who the father is!
This story deserves to be completed. Please try not to alienate your readers by making the wait so long between updates, it really breaks the flow of the story. Perhaps the best strategy would be to finish the whole story before posting it... This story is so good that it gets frustrating not to have closure...
I would add, Totally fucked up! Who treats a virgin like that? I mean isn't she supposed to enjoy it as well?
I wanted more of this story but also appreciated how you left it. Thank you
Just "Wow!" I was swept away here, surprisingly so because this isn't my favorite story type.
I think some editing but especially some proof reading would have resulted in a tighter product but I am definitely going to read the rest of your work.
Thanks for sharing.
I love this story everytime I read it. It never gets old even after all these years. X
Please continue this story. I want to read more.
That last sentence was just epic. To go with the story, of course!
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Please continue.....๐ฉ I have been reading this story over and over. I just get excited everytime I read it but always left unsatisfied when I get to the end. I hope you continue on with the story because I just want to see where it goes.
Yes! The white guy gets the black girl pregnant! Please write more chapters!
I hate obnoxious male bullies that force themselves on women.
I hope James' & Danielle's love survives and she doesn't fall in w/ the feminists who'd say, "Press charges! Put him in prison!" "Sue him for child support!" "Take out a restraining order."
Into glass
I took you home
Set you on the glass
I looked away
I pulled off your wings
And I laughed
I watched the change
In you
Into glass
I took you home
Set you on the glass
I looked away
I pulled off your wings
And I laughed
I watched the change
In you
I've read that story years ago and again just now. It's so sad because this story has so much potential if it was more drawn out and had a slower build up. It could have been even better! I dont mind the non-consent/reluctance aspect of it. But it moved so fast and the obsession was so instantaneous (too much so) that it just made the guy sound deranged. It would have been so much more fun if he had fought it a little, with the characters more fleshed out.
But thank you for the story.
I believe this story has real potential to be a great story if continued. I would flip it though into an erotic romance story.
Where it plays out that while James is fooling around with Danielle, he ends up fooling himself and falls in love for the first time in his life.
Their relationship shifts from one where James is dictating the tone of relationship and then moves to one that becomes more traditional.
Of course, even though James knows what he wants, Danielle's not quite so sure. As the relationship shifts to something more meaningful, Jordan reappears on the scene.
On and on really.
Why didnโt you do more chapter? You need to finish this and I think Jordan should be Danielleโs cousin. Of course I also wants James to get her pregnant and marry her
Elsa Who? I loved the twist at the beginning. I thought it would be about Elsa but I'm just fine with Danielle. Why was there never a part two?
I don't know if it's just me, but I believe that there should have been a little more fight. I don't know, but it turns me on so much, to pretend you don't want it, and being pursued by a man so "manly". Pretending you don't want it, and putting up a fight, because you know the outcome of the roughness. That is what turns me on the most. Making him fight for what he wants, and then finally giving in, but still putting in a little fight. Yummy! This story was good, but I like a little more of a fight, slowly but surely giving in.
PS. Seeing a guy angry, and being rough is very sexy to me. Turns me on like nothing else!!!
Wattpad toxic men! But I would have liked a bit more struggle because that's the kind of erotica I personally like
He could have at least ate her out and made her cum. Selfish selfish asshole. Ugh.