All Comments on 'Possession Ch. 01'

by SpiceNWolf

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lavatrainlavatrainover 4 years ago
Nicely constructed and well told

Your style and your content speak well of your abilities. One reads it and wishes that it were autobiographical.

Gemini_KnightGemini_Knightalmost 12 years ago
Ditto...

just a little more of break when switching between his part and her part would make it easier to follow and flow much better. Other than that I agree whole heartily with the previous comment

jpalsgrjpalsgralmost 12 years ago
Great start

This is a great start on a tale of submisssion and exploytation, want to see where it goes.

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