All Comments on 'Promising Danielle Ch. 01'

in a short chapter. Enough so I wanted to read more, not enough yet to tell if it is stupendous or whatever.

sorry but I can'ot give you a 5 please keep it comming

It seems very promising and I look forward to the next installment, hopefully not quite so short.

you finished of the chapter leaving the mystery of what is to come. I gave you a 5 for the following reasons:

start off the story bored student out to clear his head,

meets the dream girl from high school, who in the past she wouldn't talk to now he becomes the knight in shining armour.

he rescues her and asks nothing in return...

keep up the excellent work... can't wait for the next chapter.

Short but interesting. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

very vague, yet makes you want more, like its going to be an onion. more is reveled as you peel, i gave it a 3 but as more comes, and if it is like this the number will rise, you have two people that you can flesh out in anyway you wish( and somehow i think his landlords are going to figuire in to this in a big way)

Short, but interesting enought to look forward to next chapter.

60 year old George

I liked it, and it shows a lot of promise - as somebody else said, this is going to be an onion that you peel back one layer at a time

Not a 5, because by itself it isn't a great story - but a lot of promise

some of the dialogue is a little clunky.

"How's that working out for you? Been her long?"

My guess is Tobey is being sincere, but every time i've heard someone use the phrase 'How's that working out for you?' they were being a smart ass. It might be a regional thing though. Other than that, good job.

Today, I stumbled across this story. This opening chapter shows promise (no pun intended).

This now marks the 4th time I have read thus story. I find myself loving it even more every time I read it thank you.

Very Gentle.

I rather like it.

HP

great opening