by LocusOnus
This has been a great story. Please keep posting more stopies in the same manor
Yes, definitely love the happy ending. Small thing -- for future reference, it's "Kegels" not "Keagles." :)
A very nice ending to an interesting story. You tied up most of the minor points that I had nitpicked about and the rest were just that in any case. Please write another story because you bring a fresh viewpoint to a site that can get a bit repetitive at times. In the end it's all about feelings and relationships instead of just sex acts.
this is my kind of a happy ending... :) more stories please... :)
you did very well for a first attempt. The only thing I would have included would have been the reunion with her real family and the wedding but those are moot points
Congradulations. Very moving story from Chap 1-11 as well as very nice
ending. Please keep writing. Love you work.
Thank You
Overall, I thought it was a lovely story. Congratulations on the completion. Looking forward to your future works. :)
The entire story is wonderful and delightful. Truly, this is excellent work. Keep writing.
I thought the interactions between Toby and Dani were great, and those with Stacy and Nikki and Chuck were pretty good. I thought their interactions with everyone else, especially the police, were so severely illogical and reality-challenged that I couldn't enjoy the rest of the story.
Just when I think I've read every good story on this site, I get proved wrong.. Loved it! Can't really say enough about it.. Hope you start another series soon.. I'll definitely be watching to see..
-LI
I just read your story again after some time. I remembered the story but couldn't place the name and, at the time, was not actively using my membership (and not actively leaving comments).
You have a good, imaginative voice. You really should continue writing.
I had to read them one after the next, they were so great. Great writing and creating emotions.
Great start, trite, naive,fairytale ending, you had so much
Going thru 6 or 7,`then it all became mush.
A nice simple tale, well-told.
Frankly, I'd have preferred fewer episodes, each slightly longer, but it worked OK
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HP
I would have liked to read about her meeting his family and her new family.
One of the best and one of the few stories on this site that writes about love and shows it in its truest forms. I wish you still wrote on this site.