All Comments on 'Proper Housewife to Slut in One Day'

Same old swinging story nothing new and nothing erotic.

With a nice little twist near the end. Sounds like the beginning of a good series.

Too many child-like language errors, blatant racism, stale plot line, characters that you can't really believe, and lacking detail in the sexual descriptions.

If you write more, an editor would be useful.

Good story and the foundation for more. Keep up the hard work!

Yes, it has a few errors that can be fixed, and perhaps the story can develop in later chapters, but it's a good start to a first story. Sad comments of the Anonymous kind should be ignored (the use of "slut" and "wife" together is like a red rag.) This is very obviously a fun fantasy! Don't be discouraged, I'd like to read more.

This story though not the best I have read, it is far from the worst and you only get better through practice and experience. Sooo.... keep writing and listen to the constructive comments that come your way and don't listen to the "this is shit crap" stuff.

I would like to see where this goes.

This is a well written story and straight to the point. This was a unique story line. Thanks for sharing this gem with us.

The story made me hot and I am curious to read what happens next. That's the make or break point. You seem to have established the wife as a tragic figure; neglected, bitchy, and horny , also not entirely deserving of the fate that seems to be awaiting her. Conversely, the husband is clearly a dick. Therefore they are both believably set up for further scenes.

The writing could use some technical cleaning up, "could of gone..." should be "could HAVE"; and the excessive use of exclamations is redundant. But you have an excellent start here!

great story kept writing more about this Cindi and what happen next

I could so identify with "Cindi" in that story! I'm 44 years old and married to a man with an extremely low sex drive. Tired of being unfulfilled sexually, I seduced and eventually bedded a 19 year old guy who works at a local convenience store. I guess I'm the textbook definition of a "cougar", but he is fulfilling the sexual needs that my husband doesn't provide. So caution to all of you husbands that ignore the needs of your wife. Take care of her, or someone else will!

Caught so early on in the story, what a total setup.. I wonder what's going to happen to this beautiful slut, it's obvious her hubby isup to something, and I want to know what it is.

very good should have been longer tho

I loved the pool guy. It's just amazing how many sexually frustrated married wives there are in real life. Unfortunately, I am one of them. I do love my hubby and my 18 year old red headed daughter. Sexually satisfied? Not by a long shot! I'm constantly so horny and sexually unsatisfied and sexually frustrated.

My daughter is now pledging to my old sorority. I contacted the President and asked if she would please see that she would place her week with the Black sorority I was placed with. I was sent to that Black sorority for pledge week and placed under training to be taught to pleasure, please, and learn to see that whoever I was eating always squirted. Trishia was my trainer. She taught me really well! I learned that the old saying that some women just couldn't squirt was not true.

My oral service was rated by 'stars. One through five. I quickly got a number of "ones." Trisha spent extra time instructing me (thank God.) Soon I was getting two stars, then by Wednesday I was getting some 4 and 5 star ratings and actually beginning to enjoy it. Thursday I got one 4 and five 5 star ratings. I was improving, and proud of it., so was Trishia.

Friday morning I got six 5 star ratings and one 4 star. Friday afternoon I was sent downstairs totally naked and served drinks and refreshments to their sorority party. Guys and the sorority members were almost all partly naked. Some were on their knees, with breasts exposed, sucking Black hard erections. My eyes practically popped out when I the guys hard big hard erections. Oh my! I didn't know a cocks could be so thick and big. Thank God no one was allowed to even touch my naked body as I walked around the rooms serving drinks and snacks. In some rooms I saw a lot of fucking. My c unt was so wet I could feel my wetness running down my inner thighs. A bunch of the guys said Smith sexual things to me. God I'd never been so horny before. Right then I knew that sometime in my near future I'd be begging some Black guy to really fuck me. I wasn't a virgin, but I'd never had sex with a man that had a big thick cock like all those Black guys had. WOW! I knew that night I wanted a Black thick cock like those to really pound my white pussy hard and deep. I just knew from the sounds of every Black girl that their wasn't anything in the world that would feel better. Unfortunately my time at their sorority was up that night. Yes back at my sorority I admitted that I had dreams of hard Black men taking turns having me suck their beautiful hard thick Black erections and pounding my eager willing white pussy hard and deep. I still get soaking wet just thinking about it! Unfortunately I never got the chance. I still fantasize about it though. It is way up on my bucket list! Orpheum 69

Colored, dark helpers. Wow. I'm guessing that was a confederate flag string bikini you had on too. 😬