by beachbum1958
Happy to help you on this one, I was so happy to hear you were continuing the story and can't wait to see more of it.
Really great to see you're continuing this story, I'm looking forward to chapter 6. I would give you 10 *'s, but they only let you give 5, so 5*'s it is!
I was wondering about the two brothers Nick left behind - and now there are two sisters as well. I am looking forward to reading how they will eventually link up with Nick and the rest of the extended family, and I am hoping that the new information will lead to a murder conviction for Robert Davis / Davies Senior. Five stars, beachbum1958!
It was an amazing chapter as alway BB. I really love this plot twist. Please update ASAP I'm hooked to this story.
I took you at your word that ch. 5 was the end, and after reading this, I'm still convinced 5 was it. I'm sure people can change over time, but your characters and story over the first five installments were so strong, that it made me not care what happened to the brothers (though was glad to see Sr. get his just desserts).
I believe the phrase is 'leave well enough alone.' Many will disagree with this; as well written as it was, I don't want anything to do with these four--let 'em rot!
A backhanded compliment to you, BB, for creating such a full and thorough story & characters.
Marvin
I think you did a fine job adding another pr of 1/2 siblings tot he lot to aid them thru this journey. you made it all fit together and the timing of the new headstone, It would be good to see this come together. Now I only hope you dont take to long to bring out another chapter. ty/ bill
See Will, I knew they'd love it. Already a Hot even though it just posted yesterday. It looks like your fans might want more. Love ya, Bonnie.
I believe there should be at least one more chapter in this series. All the siblings should meet and also see them in the future with kids of thier own.
I originally saw this story as being in two halves of 4 chapters each; Nicky and Ashley and their story, so the second half would therefore need to be at least a 4-part continuation to stay true to the original format, covering Nicky's brothers, the truth about Barbara and their father's nefarious activities, some of the consequences of those activites for all four of them, and Bobby, Rick, Yaz and Shari's subsequent quest to find Nicky and to get justice for both mothers, plus some more of Leon and Judy's story (because I really like her, and I think she should be having some fun too!). Having said that though, it may well become 3 longer chapters to tie the story up to all its logical conclusions
The whole thing will come to a final conclusion that includes the whole clan, including David and Julia Nixon and their family, Nicky and Ashley and their children, and of course Bobby, Shari, Rick and Yaz and all their kids as well. And to forestall any comment, I have a suitable fate in store for Robert Davies, because I'm a firm believer in natural justice, and the tenet of 'what goes around, comes around'! God, I love a good baddie, they almost write themselves!
While I know how the story will go, I'm also happy to accept suggestions about twists and surprises that readers think will add to the story (please, rational suggestions only, no monsters, aliens, magic, voodoo or time-travel, please) or will address their own view of where Nicky, Ashley, the brothers, and Yaz & Shari should go, but no family orgies, this isn't that kind of story. Any and all suggestions will be gratefully accepted and considered, so please, if anyone wants to stick their oar in and muddy the waters a little, I urge you to give it your best shot, the worst I can do is say no!
Until then,
BB1958
chapter 5?! I haven't been able to bring myself to read chapter 4 yet. Too painful after the first three..
It was a very pleasant surprise to find this little gem in the new story listing. I am so pleased you decided to resume the story from a different view point. I do so hope you plan to continue this view of the story for a few chapters. Excellent story by the way. Thank you.
No aliens?!?! I was so looking forward to this moving on to Area 51! Seriously, great job and I'm looking forward to reading the continuing story.
All i can say is lets get chapter 6 published asap ,8 pages of chapter 5 read in no time at all.
I love this beautiful storey. I hope to read more in the near future. Woderful job. Keep up the great work.
This is simply one of the best romantic stories that I have read in this site. The characters are vibrant and the story is engaging. Here's to waiting for the new chapter.
Cheers
you have did it again... got me wanting more of this story... more please
Awesome story and the continued opening of.the story
Is done very well.
Thank you
I put off reading this chapter because I thought nothing could top Chapter 4 and it would be a disappointment. Nothing you have written has ever been a disappointment, so I should have known better.
It is an awesome chapter. Waiting for more. Can you please tell when will you release the next chapter?
BS
A really good story, waiting for the next part hope you finish it soon.
Great story. This chapter really opens the for additional chapters resolving the issue whether Bobbie, Ricky, and Nicky find each other ....
It's really shear chance that I happened to read this story again, or rather the first original part and then realized that the author had added chapters for a part of the story I never expected to see! So far I'm really enjoying it too! Humerous irony that all the brothers and sisters are with brothers and sisters ;). Looking forward to the next chapter! ;)
I've read all the stories so far and have to say this series is one of thebest by far. Thanks for all your hard work in creating such a great read!
Mister BB,
You said this story was long, lol. As far as I'm concerned it could have gone on as long as u wanted it to.
This is my second time reading it thru and I don't usually leave comments, but this is an amazingly good story even without the sex. Thank you very much and I think your a very talented writer. I'm kinda at a loss for words, simply engrossing in a wonderfully heart felt way!
GRIZZ
I liked the interesting storyline and family being spread all over and Old English of how it reminded me of they all back in the day had sexual pleasures with family members. Hoping you will get all the brothers and sisters united with each other and they will be a big happy family. This was a very emotional story made me cry, but then all sexually exited. It was a roller coaster ride please continue with this story.
I just thought of something. This is by far one of the best stories on here but I got a question. The two brothers did you name them after Ricky Bobby off of Talladega Nights? If do that flippin awesome!!!!
Sorry, I've never seen the film in question, not my kind of movie
I can't tell you the reasons of thanking you
But you changed my perspective regarding some things .
One doesn't expect such brilliant carracters and such a ellaberate story line on this site, read lots worse that I had to pay for.
I have enjoyed this story from day dot!
This is my favourite chapter with the emotional rollercoaster it takes you along with all the feelings especially with those amazing sex scenes which come out more romantic than others on this site which is great!
I enjoy rereading this story as it isn’t just about taboo or sex but it’s about different journeys of family, self-discovery, love, death and laughter..
I especially enjoy this chapter because it explains the whole story but you gain more knowledge into the characters.
It also helps that the author explains and adds details for their feelings before, during and after their sex scenes.
Brilliant story ! Brilliant author!
Okay, I realize that this is YOUR world and that you have poetic license to manipulate it as you see fit. That being said, it's highly improbable if not totally impossible for "a leopard to change its spots." You did, however, include the key element that would be the catalyst for this change which is hitting rock bottom. But again, I believe that Bobby and Ricky were not just brainwashed, but completely and totally indoctrinated by their father from what you previously wrote. They would have needed to be completely broken down to the level of totally homeless and eating from dumpsters before being open to rehabilitation.
I speak from a position of experience. In my own case, I was beaten regularly by my own father. And like Nicky, I was smart enough to realize at an EARLY age that his behavior was not the normal for the rest of the world. I recognized that my friends and playmates were happy and they had parents who were strict, but didn't beat them like my father beat me. Unless an epiphany happens like it did within me, then the abused grow up to be abusers themselves. In your case, Bobby and Ricky were well beyond the age where such an epiphany can occur. They had been specifically groomed to follow in daddy's footsteps.
Don't get me wrong, I'm very glad that you decided to turn their lives around. I also recognize that you're working inside of a certain time frame for tying plot lines and stories together. But I still have to give this one a smaller score. It may have been better to just let sleeping dogs lie. 3/5
Dear god, Robert Davies Sr. was trully a scum of a lifetime. Trying to r*pe his own daughter? I nearly vomited when I read this.
Great development. I am anxious to see what happens next.
I really like that you've taken us back to the 'lost' brothers to see what became of them. I can't speak to the 'realism' of their situation but I'm enjoying the shit out of it and looking forward to what comes next. Adding this to my Fav list. 5/5* Fav
I wasn't sure if I was gonna like the 180 degree turn in this story as it were. But damn it, you got me again lol. Once again I can't keep my eyes dry. This is still so engaging and I'm liking how these 2 brothers realized how bad their behaviors were and that they felt remorse.