All Comments on 'Rebirth Ch. 01'

Great first chapter, I can't wait to read more. This was very well written and quite engaging. Thank you for the great read and I hope to see more soon.

I am very Intrigued to see where this goes, Can't wait for the next chapter.

Excellent story cant wait for more

This is an awesome first chapter I hope you continue with this story.

...once the story started. There was a lot of front-loading the backstory. But I'm interested to see how the story plays out.

Can't wait to read the rest of the story! loved the attention you paid to the back story! Keep up the good work!

You have a wonderful way of describing certain things. However, I would like to know exactly what Mac and Aiden look like. Do they have brown or blonde hair or green or blue eyes, etc.?

great so far just some words misused or mispelt(spelled) so a redit miight help.

I like the way you tell your story. Not giving specific descriptions of the characters lets us see past those physical definitions and place our own imagination in their stead. Also, it makes me think that maybe Aiden or Mac aren't concerned by the physical looks of the other, and that makes me love the story even more.

Great first chapter and I look forward to more. It's been a while since I've read a story that describes the mythical so well. Phoenix are one of my fave parts of mythology!

"blown a casket".....really?? Bwahahaha!!!

(image of a coffin flying through the air...)

FYI, it's "blown a gasket."

Thanks for the laugh!!

good chapter.

Loved the originality of your story. It's well written overall and has great flow.

But I can't help not liking it. Something about it just rubs me the wrong way. Whether or not it's the dumpy female lead, or the fact that there is a REALLY handsome naked male awaiting her. All in all, with the grammatical errors, spelling mistakes and the imagery of it all, it leaves me cold. Sorry.

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