All Comments on 'Refined Adjustments Ch. 06a'

You have us on the ropes don't wait another 8 months for an update

This story has a lot of potential but the last two chapters have been lacking. There has been a lack of continuity in certain parts of the story. Dream sequences that were written like reality mention of a father out of nowhere. And it doesn't seem like you proofread or edit after you finish writing because there are quite a few easily noticeable grammatical errors. Like I said this story has a lot of potential but you need up the level of your writing. I suggest that you visit the editors forum and find yourself an editor.

Ever since the first chapter I was still clueless about their ages. So that didn't really help me connect with the story that much. Also, I feel like the story is really lacking in terms of character growth and background. I mean it's really good but, there's so much missing. Please don't take offence to this, lol i'm just a fellow reader/observer. :)

NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE SAY THE AGES ;)

Why she acting so nonchalant about a possible accidental pregnancy like "if it happens it happens" does she not know about the morning after pill

Please I hope your gonna make a new chapter soon. I love this story.

I hope this doesnt end, ever!