All Comments on 'Rescuing Heather'

... would have been improved by a spot of Proof Reading and/or Editing and removing some of the errors and smoothing some of the text. Got a bit stilted at times.

Very nice job, Steven. I love this piece — an enjoyable read.

I hope it's near your property. xoxox

You've got a good story started, but your characters need to be developed more. What do they look like? How old are they? Why was she out in the storm? Why is he single? There also needs to be some build up to the sex. They need to talk and flirt she doesn't need to be so forward and forceful. If you fill in those holes, I think you'll have a more full bodied story.

Very sweet