All Comments on 'Revelation Blues Pt. 04'

Xzy89c1about 1 year ago

Your explanations are long winded too

75% of the words could be reduced with little impact.........I AGREE!!!

"Scott spent a lot of time reflecting upon whether Mary was goodhearted and void of malice and how much allowance he should make for her human imperfection". Really? She was a serial cheater. liar and was going to get a new car and leave him .... The story is good, just way too many words

Good story. Enjoyed reading BUT can't figure out how an authors character can be so stupid? Naive? So close to a CUCK story that I wanted to hurl, spew bile. Felt sorry for your character. Personally, I have never met anyone so fucking clueless. 5 STARS!

What a great BTB story and all who helped her cheat. Scott was one crafty adversary, he was calculating and took his time to exact his revenge. Then while successfully protecting his millions he led Mary to believe that he was destitute all the while kept executing his devious plan. As they say revenge is best when served cold and that is exactly what he did and that is karma. Great storyline and great character development. 5++stars

Tediously long and wordy.

Chill, you must love to hear yourself write sic. Too long and boring. A solid 1*.

Is it possible for a story to be at once both well written and verbose? If so, this is it.

LWlurker

Sometimes less is more, I think you had a potentially good story and ruined it with too much writing. So many paragraphs that didn't actually contribute much. But hey, it's your story and good on you for giving it a crack

In your next story, try and condense some of the material. I do like the back filling of background, however as he "researched her affairs" a little less of the tedium might have made the story a bit more concise.... Overall my rating conveys my feeling . 5/5

Why write 10 words when you can write a thousand Jesus that felt like a lifetime.good story well written it just went on and on and on

2 stars - Sorry I could not read very many pages of this monotonous story. After the first page, I chose to read the first few and the last paragraphs of each chapter. So technically this story could have been completed in just six or 7 pages in ONE chapter, rather than 6 pages in each of these 4 chapters.

I have never been able to imagine a complete image of the table that Scott formed when he investigated the time frame and specific details of her wife's novel. Such a volume of time with such detailed detail seems unrealizable for imaginative perception.

Good story,,, well written and told. M/C was a great character and wife (Mary) was a worthless waste of space. The ending was thoughtful and I love the results. Most times people need to wallow in their own shitty life. The husband also has some crazy analytical skills to get the timeline. Also Mary was such a dope she was easily let to destruction.

very long but interesting. a bit callus about his Son's well being, but all ended well.

Liked this more during a second read.

5 stars.

A bit like "Anna Karenina".