All Comments on 'Revelations Ch. 03'

So was she on drugs years later when she masturbates Skype or when she is so proud of helping the old man. Doesn’t work and weakens what was a good story.

Deviates from original plot in ways that are inexcusable, and the date rape drug angle is preposterous, as others have pointed out.

That’s certainly a strange turn of events. The recent comments have pretty much summed up what I think of the story too, but I do have one thing to add. It seems James is turning into a giant prick. “Dad was just pissed at us for not looking at the pictures”?! Jeez, what a self-centered asshole. This is so far removed from the original story I don’t think I’ll bother with any more of it.

You turned her into the victim. What about the years of emails between the two? You turned a wife who went willingly into an adulterous affair into the innocent party and the victim into the evil doer.

Just wrong. Just plain old wrong.

Are we really going to get the ‘She was drugged’ cliche PLEEEEEEEESSSSSSEE give us a break.

Everything’s riding on part three!!!!!!!

My bad I meant part four lol

I'm not going to read any more of this story. It's getting way way too bazaar. I like a lot of what you write. Not this tripe.

You're going on the drugged trope, seriously it's crap

Disappointing direction of travel. This was stepping up to being a really good and different tale. Sad to say the drugged her is a waste of an excellent story line so far

I have to agree with several of the other commentators, I can see where you're going but the previous dialogue and "evidence" presented during the previous story arc doesn't support it. There's no way Vanessa had a long term affair with multiple sexual encounters and was under the influence of drugs each time. I enjoyed the diversion where Victor hacked her emails. It was a great plot line but it added more depth to her betrayal as she was continuing to communicate with him while he was sharing sexual exploits and pictures about others. Again, the point is those ongoing communications and implied liaisons make drugs a mute point. On to the next chapter, I suppose, but slightly disappointed in this series when compared to some of your other work. 4*

So sad that some of your readers/commenters are such dip-shux that they comment on that what you have not written. That they don't like where they think you are going so they admonish you for what is not written and may never get written. So I ask, why do they read what you authors write when they know in their mind what you are going to write. Why do they go to the trouble to read?

There were plenty of flowery words and emotional language. The $1 million payment. The friendly emails for several years afterwards. None of that suggests the Monster used extensive drugs, extortion, or physical or emotional exertion to force the affair. So all this other stuff being brought up by carhovi does not follow through on that.

Now, if there was no letter and/or $1 million payment, I can see carhovi’s storyline.

A different story than alex_lover told. First, the boss was in his late 50s or maybe early 60s when banging Vanessa so old but not 80 years old. Next, Victor said his own cock was 61/2 inches but thin; he said when he saw the DVDs that the boss was same length but "much thicker." So not porn star size. Third and most important, date rape drugs wipe out memories, Vanessa was completely coherent about her affair with Harry. And drugs like Ecstasy have definite effects such as euphoria, lowered inhibitions, strong feelings of wanting to please others, but they don't turn people into ravening lunatics. So mild aphrodisiacs but people are coherent and in enough control unless they don't want to be (i.e. Vanessa wanted to fuck Harry and was proud she had "saved Harry and the company." One drug is a mind numbingly strong aphrodisiac and that is crystal meth; people have virtually no inhibitions and can have sex for days without stopping if continuing t ingest it; of course, men have a problem getting a firm erection while on crystal meth and crystal meth destroys people physically and mentally faster than any other drug including heroin.

There are lots of other enormous differences which in effect rewrite alex_lover's original story to the point that this is no longer a sequel but rather a new story. Just sayin'

This looks to be heading down the reconciliation path, which is great, if done skillfully/plausibly. But it also appears to be headed down the path to a major retcon in order to justify the reconciliation. The justification that the wife may have been drugged throughout the entire affair is simply not plausible. I'll finish reading, but honestly alex_lover's story was already complete as written and this addendum subtracts from rather than adding to it.

The original story very plainly made her out to be a whore. Not sure why the new writer is changing her story to be date rape drugs. It's like a different story. Think I'll just stop reading here.

The original story was much better written, though I think the original author lost it in the third chapter when Victor finds the emails that howbher being in "love" with her old boss. That seemed like bullshit and just a plot device to move Victor off center and get going. Like that should have ever been needed. And while the wife was a slut for her boss, the idea that she really loved her boss was just dumb. She might have developed affection for him, but he was 20 years older. Nah the original author took a story that started well and slowly degenerated over the the three chapters. So when this author picks up the story, it winds up being a dumpster fire. The MC leaving is of course the appropriate response. But why not divorce? Why all the silly destroying everything. He leaps to she has been fucking behind his back forever. Huh? Yeah there is nontrust and her concepts about fidelity are horseshit but thinking his kids are against him and not his is just dumb and overly dramatic. In the original story, Victor was thoughtful though enraged and hurt and betrayed. But he was not irrational. Here in these chapters, Victor just loses it completely. Fine there are some BTB aspects and I can see why he would send the DVD to his grown kids. But really, that they are not his kids? And why does Harry the old fart, suddenly have a monster cock and an implant with unbelievable stamina? What? That wasn't in the original. He was thicker than Victor but thr same length at 6.5 inches. Surprising vigor for his age and certainly on Viagra. But really? Of course seeing all their many video editing traits would always destroy any marriage. Period. The original author didn't need the revelations in the third chapter to end the story. But here ghr revelations are she is drugged all the time? Hehe wouldn't she fail the company drug test? Anyways this turns out to be a huge mess built on a story that deteriorated in the original arc as the story unfolded.

After reading the original Alex_ something I am in total appreciation of this continuance. Not because of the wives breakdown, although I have no sympathy, but just some action taken against a delusional spouse. A person not paying attention to the details, Christ Stevie Wonder could see that her actions weren't medicinally motivated. I am not going to read the next part.

Consequences and truth. Do the two kids have to suffer also? Victor is like Tom Sawyer watching his own funeral? Apparently Paula, the Psychologist, did not get through to Victor. (You get what you pay for?)