by rpsuch
I've been reading it since the first post, but now it seems like it's too drawn out...instead of a story it seems more like a jornal...but i still like it but would like to read that heat you started with...you still get a 5 though
Hopefully that knowledge will help her avoid the trouble she seems certain is lying in wait - otherwise I fear a self fulfilling prophecy.
J
I enjoyed your description of being so in love versus being absolutely stupid. Your use of the younger sister to reveal your characters to us and to themselves was very well done. Thanks!