All Comments on 'Revisiting Classmates Ch. 01'

...a LitE author uses the lame literary device of making the reader a character in the story.

It immediately makes the story totally unbelievable to around half of your potential readership.

I only read the first two lines of page one of the story before giving up on it and coming here to post this.

Someone asks me if I am this Kelly person. Really? I happen to be a large man with a huge, bushy beard, so the likelihood of someone asking me if I am Kelly is almost nil, and so is the likelihood I will enjoy the rest of a story based on this lame literary device.

-Rei