All Comments on 'Rose'

Nice use of language: in fact, in part one some lines are almost poetic. You get a little sloppy as you progress. At times you have confused names. Also, a couple of glitches," "It was him moving about that woke her up," and "She was hoped Agnes wouldn't.," and, "Agnes wondered if she hadn't told Janet about their little rendezvous last night" (you do not want the negative). As for the plot: you are obviously moving towards a seismic convulsion in the lives of these outwardly placid middle-class people. Can't wait.

The idea of the story is great but it need to be developed further. It reads as though you did not take time to edit it so that it the reader would enjoy it. Instead it reads as though you wrote it for yourself and I found that I lost interest in the story after the first page.