All Comments on 'Scrabble'

by Louise Brown

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roopmatiroopmatiabout 18 years ago
Woo What a story

I like the flow and the language of the story. Kept the characters alive all along and did justice to them. It was a difficult task.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
fantastic!

Great story.....loved the language and sexual detail. Excellent writting!

Will read the rest of your stories.

p.s. Love your bio picture.....very thoughtful and sensual. Every thing down to the nylon clad legs and pose. Makes me want to crawl up from below and have a taste. hmmmm!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Good work Louise

I'm trickling precum

KingCuddleKingCuddleover 11 years ago
Same note. Dialog, please.

You're giving more of the "thoughts and feelings"...interior monologs...in this.

But then, you go back to all the gymnastics overly explained.

When we get to "hear" what people say, we get the fun of interpreting what's going to happen next. (Instead of just waiting for you to tell us?)

There is NO possibility the guys would say nothing when you/she begin with Katie during the Scrabble. Check out "Browns Shoe Store" by Slickman.

LOVE your/her attitude and openness. Depressed that Matt is too perfect! :+)))))

Re: Scrabble. You omitted the numbers aspect of Scrabble.

On that, I play Words With Friends on FaceBook with FOUR people who

would beat you. Maybe frequently?

It's not as if the draws in the trays are irrelevant?

Enjoyed the story...a lot.

All joy,

KingCuddle

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