All Comments on 'Secrets and Betrayals Ch. 01'

I loved it and don't pay any attention to the individual below who obviously wanted a stroke stroy instead of a plot. Keep it going I want to see part 2. Thanks!

on an ongoing story since anything I say may be dealt with in future chapters. So only one question - if she told Rory 'no more' last Monday, why was she apparently preparing to see him on Thursday?

It goes without saying that you should not be too exercised by the comments of the anonymous, adolescent spray painter who presumably actually still believes 'don't give up your day job' to be a smart and original remark to make in this context!

I really do love your writing and I know you won't keep us too long before part 2 shows up. Thanks---

This is a good start on your story. If she knows he was screwing her sister then she MUST know he hadn't done so for 4 years. Is she using that as an excuse to fuck around?

She said she had already broke it off;

Somehow I get the idea she counted the times with her lover to match the number of times he had with her sister.

Not a wise move; she could have lost all. But, if that were so, he had to know about it [she had to tell him]or she would be having the affair for nothing. And that would be a cold calculating affair for revenge. A marriage buster in most cases.

If she broke it off with Rory what was she preparing for tonight?? Another lover?

He's AWFULLY fast with his forgiveness. Is it supposed to

be so because of his guilt from screwing her sister?

Never use sex for punishment or revenge!

It'll destroy rather than heal!!

Well, let's see what the author tells us about it all!!

This next chapter makes or breaks the marriage and the story.

I liked it so far. Please don't keep us waiting too long for the next installment

Good start. It's been over a year since your last submission. This start makes it appear it might have been worth the wait.

Don't keep us waiting too long for the next installment.

A few of the comments indicated the discrepancy in her saying she ended the affair on Monday and she was preparing to meet Rory on Thursday. I have a problem with that, and it is simply that everyone seems to ASSUME she was preparing to see hime. One scenerio is that she could have been preparing herself for Gary, her husband. That is if I ASSUME that the dress and other underwear was prepacked several days or weeks ago. Waiting on Chapter 2. Lets see how this pans out

Good story. It is starting off very nicely. One question,why did she have her stuff together to go out if she told him she wasn't going to see him again. I'm waiting for the answer. Keep writing the good stuff.

This comment will commence in a moment, but first:

Screw those trolls; crawl back under your rock and stroke yourself to oblivion. End of rant.

And now, for the comment.

This is a first rate story. Papatoad (and others)have made some excellent points which I hope you address in future installments. Though minor they are jarringly out of sync with other parts of the story. But, most important here is the way she reveals her knowledge of his past indescretions. You've provided an excellent twist with which to leave us all panting in shock,

Bravo. Very well done. Please don't keep us hanging too long.

I enjoyed the story very much but I do have one question. If she broke it off Monday why the sexy outfit for tonights meeting?

i have you bookmarked as one of my favorite authors. keep up the good work. like (almost) everyone else, i'll be waiting for chapter 2.

commented on, if she ended it Monday then why was she still going out to see him on Thursday?

If she is at the guy's house, why is she showering at home?

Why the telephone hang-ups in these days of ubiquitous cell phones, email, IMs, text messaging?

Guess we will find out later why she thinks he is still screwing her sister.

very good,very nice twist,looks interesting.dont wait to long......lol

great start. great twist.

Why does she think he is still screwing her sister if it has been 4 years?

Well told story - well written. I do have to agree with some of the comments below; there are some inconsistencies that really need explaining. Perhaps the author will clear them up in following chapter. In any event, a tense story well told.

I don't vote on stories as a protest to Trolls and Goblins. Great twist, that he had an affair first. That's why she showered at home, etc. She wanted him to catch her, at least part of her did. As they say, "Paybacks are a bitch!"

Keep writing.

Gary is a cad. Alicia deserves better and probably had it with the AF lieutenant. Perhaps this story needs to be continued with Gary going back to fucking Alicia's sister and possibly getting her pregnant? All the while that Alicia continues with the AF guy and getting pregnant by him.

People have pointed out the Monday-Thursday discrepancy. That must be resolved for the story to work.

Small detail question: When she was taking a bath & Gary came home early, where were the little kids? They have just conveniently disappeared. It is not crucial to the story at this point but it is one of those details an author shouldn't overlook.

But I am favorably impressed with this tale. I hope the subsequent chapter or chapters is as good.

playingcardcompany

It made me angry and then a little guilty as I learned the entire truth. Nothing is as it seems. Thanks for the nice ending!

Nodding she replied, "I told him it was over, when I saw him last Monday night. I promise you, never again."

"Then I want you to come back to me and our family. We'll find the right people to help us heal from this sickness." His tears were flowing down his face, matching hers.

She nodded again, "As I come back to you I want you to promise me one thing."

Gary nodded, thinking 'Ok, she'll want me to keep away from her now ex-lover.'

She looked him in the eyes, the pain and fear of the afternoon etched in her face. "Promise me if I take you back, you will quit screwing my sister, and that you'll never do it again...please!"

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Gosh, look at all those endless streams of tears from the faces of both man and wife! It hurts much that tears just rush forth endlessly,,, that she'd do that to him,,, but he's willing to fergive!,,, oopps, oh, gosh, it turns out he's been fucking her sister,,,

oh gosh, how original and clever! took my breath away! lol!

HOW DID SHE FIND OUT THAT HE WAS FUCKING HER SISTER. WHY DID SHE WAIT FOUR YEARS FOR PAYBACK. DID SHE JUST FIND OUT RECENTLY. WHY DOES SHE THINK THAT HE IT STILL FUCKING HER SISTER.IF SHE BROKE IT OF ON MONDAY WHAT THE HELL WAS SHE GETTING READY FOR ON THURSDAY. I KNOW THE HUSBAND CHEATED FIRST, BUT HE FORGAVE HER A LITTLE TO FAST OR SO I THINK. TO ME THE STORY HAD AN ENDING, BUT U ARE THE AUTHOR SO IT MAKES ME WONDER WHAT KIND OF TWIST U HAVE IN MINE. IS SHE GOING TO KEEP FUCKING AROUND.WHAT WILL HE DO IF SHE DOES.WILL HE DIVORCE HER OR WHAT.WILL HE GO OUT AND FUCK AROUND AGAIN. IF HE DOES WHAT WILL SHE DO.WILL SHE DIVORCE HIM.ONE MORE THING,WHAT HAPPENED TO THE KIDS. HOPE U DON'T MAKE THIS INTO SOME CUCKOLD STORY.GREAT STORY SO FAR.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

You killed the story by making him have had an affair with her sister. I stopped reading right there. I no longer care what happens in the story. What a shame! It could have been adecent story.

Had a good story going until he reveiled that he had cheated with his sister-in-law. Now both of them are cheaters. So who would you want to support and care for? For me the answer is ,neither one. There are also some timeline problems, but they are small. I do like writing dragons style, I just have a different taste in stories of this type. I will bow out of reading the next chapters so I will not be tempted to low score the story.

she took something he did many yeras ago and is using that now...ok she needs tosue rory and i would complain to the air force and have him sent to alaska for the next ten years ...he obviously needs to cool down... his wife needs to show him she loves him by putting a gun to rorys head and pulling the trigger...id take the two kids and move out...so many things need to be done except take her back with no punishment... rory needs to know there is consequences also... even if its just a severe beating about the head and shoulders with an iron pipe...i was raised religious but mine always said an eye for an eye...what she done was worse than what he did ...maybe he needs to sue rory to get his money back he spent on his wife when he wasnt getting any benefit ...plus she does need to be checked out medically as who knows what an air force asshole would fuck ...most are so desperate they would fuck skags given the chance...she needs to be checked and rory needs to pay fro it and any medical expenses ..sock it the both of them

Well written author except for several inconsistancies - most of which have already been noted.

Constructively for your consideration - why has his tone changed? Is it the old two wrongs=rite? Why is she so upset - she wanted him to find out(phone calls, showers, abstinance) The sneak stuff layed out 3 days after she was done? Oh, she was going to show him how she fooled him in revenge for 4(?)years ago? And now says no more with sister and I may keep you around - WHAT? She isn't angelic by photo's light and she's calling the shots? He called his affair off long ago and she is ready to go out again with someone new?

The credibility slip begins with his suddenly remembered 5 time fling and now he's concerned not with her long 3 month affair but whether she will stay with him - he loves her and forgives her already? Geez - they haven't really even talked - maybe she's been screwwing around for 4 1/2 years since her sister told her. Gee, a 4 1/2 year revenge and he just caught on?

Lastly, as someone said, where's the person to cheer for - to feel sorry for except for the kids (father?) - to want justice for?

So, the whole is pretty deep 7 years into a dispicable marital mess. Yet, as a betting man I betcha the majic wand will mend all the travail into a ? I mean who can trust whom - respect and honor whom??? Auckie very complicating twist author!

Reasonable reality = close to perfect story / contrived = can still be interesting but not truly entertaining as it lacks credibility. Marital consequence isn't an easy write as too many of us have been there - a tough and emotional crowd eh Author - but keep the faith as many of us couldn't carry your keyboard - with Regard

You have tied for the worst story this week in the sexxy vixen award category by the committee of writers. Our only thought was how could it be worse and it could not.

There are many inconsistencies in your story, that really hurt the quality. First: She's at home taking a bubble bath in the middle of the day. Where are their 2 young children? The kids don't go to school, and she doesn't work so what happened? Second: She was fully prepared to go out and cheat on him that night. The excuse that she called it off the week before just doesn't make sense, because it doesn't fit the facts. Third: Why should she want revenge for something that happened 4 years ago! The time to confront it was back then. If she only found out about it now, then she should confront the two of them. Adultery occuring inside one's own family is more than enough reason to break off any relationship with the guilty family member, and wish them to burn forever in H-ll. If her reason for the affair was revenge, then he has to know why she is doing it, and he has to suffer the guilt. Why did he have the affair with the sister. Pure lust is NOT a good enough reason. He loved his pretty wife, and it should take a large effort to get him to cheat. Especially since she was probably pregnant at the time. Personally I agree that you ruined the story with him having a prior affair. His reaction made so sense once he confronted her. Until she mentioned it, why would he think she was doing it for revenge? He should still be angry.

Regardless of whether they stay together, or get divorced her relationship with her sister should be over. i.e. no cumminication by written or spoken word, and no contact in person. If her sister gets married, she should send a female chastity belt, and an STD kit to her fiance/husband - along with the story that she has sex with married men. There is no reason for this couple to stay together. She abandons the kids to have the affair. Niether of them are faithful to each other. The trust is gone, and they don't talk to each other. End the marriage, put the kids in therapy, and put Rory in military jail for a few years, before he is let out with a dishonorable discharge. I don't know if anyone except the kids deserve a decent life the way you set it up.

FYI - I thought I'd post a little info about article 134, which covers adultery. Basically it says that if a serviceman has sex with someone, and one of them is married to another there is a risk of this punishment. The question revolves around the image projected by the military personnel, and their rank. Rory is an officer, and should be an example to enlisted personnel. He publically bragged about having sex with a married woman, which of course harms the image of the military. A written complaint, copies of the photographs, and maybe testimony from other people that heard the bragging are all that is needed to convict him of this charge. He would probably get the maximum penalty which is dishonorable discharge, complete loss of any military benefits, and confinement for 1 year. The husband could insist that the wife testify against her lover as a condition of them trying to save the marriage. Of course if the marriage is over, what is stopping him from getting back at Rory? If Rory ends up with anything less than the full punishment, I will be highly disappointed.

As usual, most of the low scores are from Anonymous readers who have probably never written anything more complex than a grocery list. Sure there are a few problems with the story which were previously noted, but all in all, it is still a very good story. I look forward to a followup which will hopefully resolve some loose ends and may make the snippy, low scorers change their minds.

I agree with the last comment. This one has me intrigued, Writingdragon. When will the next chapter be up?

great story waiting for more please

Very well written. I agree with some of the earlier commnents on the obvious loose ends (Monday/Thursday and length of time between the husband's affair and this one), but, I'm going to assume that they will be dealt with in the coming installments. By the title, I wonder if there are other secrets and betrayals to come?

As a comment, her behavior when he came back and her comment about his affair don't seem to match up with her behavior before he went to the bar. My take on the story was that you didn't set this up as a revenge affair, otherwise she would have probably thrown it in his face when she first came down.

A possibility is that it is going to come out that she started out to have a revenge affair, but that something happened along the way. Her comment "It wasn't supposed to be this way" is very intriguing.

Anyway, her comment about the affair when he comes back doesn't seem to fit the earlier behavior. Or did she speak to the sister while he was out?

I'm looking forward to the next installment to find out where this is going. Hope it comes soon.

theres a lot of directions on offer with this one, and i agree that really you're entering a grey area with the good guy bad girl bit. That and the air force thing, the guy would be crucified for bragging if someone passed it on. It needs a bit more meat to it, ie plot. all we have is that both of them cheated at some point. no real details and no real direction. needs somtweaking and less f* about on the storyline

I liked the story, but the content is sickening. This is but one fine example of how fucked up our society really is. She was fucking the AF Lieutenant and satisfying the urges in her loins. He was fucking her sister and they decided to break it off because they did not want to "hurt" anyone. Such bullshit! Did God not make everything and everyone in 6 days, stopped on the 7th to rest and "looked back" and called what He made as "good", including the ability of a man and a woman to fuck any and all whenever they wanted to? There were no babies made in these affairs, so what is the difference in what they were doing and just visiting orally over some cup of coffee?

It's a good, gripping story despite the small (apparent) inconsistencies some others have pointed out.

Given that it was called Ch. 1, you must have planned more of it. I hope you will post the rest!

ohio

That is waiting for the next chapter or chapters, it will take a while before they are submitted. I contacted the author and he said that he and his family are going through a rough time at the moment. He said that as soon as real life allows it he will submit the rest of the story.

This is a good story I wished tho that he updated it I want to see what happens next.

You can't spell SLUT without UT!

Everyone knows men are entitled to cheat while women MUST remain faithfull! It's in the Bible, or the constitution, or something..... Right?

Two amoral people who's lifes together are doomed if they think that two wrongs can make things equal.anon jerry

Heh - all you do comes back to haunt you one way or another -

Excellent ending -

Well written - thanks

that was a good one

Time for both to ride off into the sunset.

She is a cheater, pure and simple. So is he. As commented earlier, both need to go their separate ways. Two wrongs don't make a right.

up we go into the wild blue yonder. TK U MLJ LV NV

Prior story set up a different relationship. Again, LW story with no communication in the relationship. Is that the only way a LW story can be created?

Had to comment to downgrade my previous score.

They shouldn't stay married, if she told him it was already over with rory, who else is she fucking?

Thanks for sharing this very entertaining story.

Well well well what do we have here? A pair of cheating spouses. Great example of a loving marriage. Chapter 2 coming. Curious as to what happens...

But I just thought I would get all prepared to go out tonight!!! Hmmm.

by making him one. He has a one nighter, she fucks some guy for months. Just your typical writer justifing one with the other. 3*

He said it lasted nine weeks not a one nighter - and it was her sister - they are both cheats and both deserve each pother -

Maybe just maybe the shared pain would help heal both - of course she felt unwanted - he was fucking her little sister not her - as she saw it -

Ever read the inane incomprehensible drivel he tries to to write? Holy fuck.... The kid is a spaz, an insecure mommy's boy like the rest of the dickless wonder wimps commenting ad nauseum in LW.

this is a 5*****

Wonderful! The can share a sty and roll in the mud together for the rest of their filthy lives!

An interesting turn of events. Thanks.

As a literary tool, these revelations can be useful and when they work, they work well. Whether they work in this case I think remains to be seen since it was 4 years between his and her affairs. Seems a bit long to me. If there was to be a distancing between them that culminated in a "revenge affair" (due, in theory, because of her investigation of him and her contemplating what course to take) I would think it would have been much sooner after the fact, or possibly during. Add to that that it's very hard to "accidentally" stumble on something to prove an affair after it's ended (let alone 4 years later) I'm afraid it doesn't bode well for this midstream revelation. If it was a revenge affair, as is being intimated, I'm also not convinced that Alicia would have been quite so shocked or broken up about his discovery. Haven't read the second chapter, so this commentary may be premature, but so far this is well told. Perhaps a little short. Though it's telling the story events concisely, I don't feel anything for any of the characters. No attachment has been forged so any feeling I have is due to the actual adultery and betrayal (his and hers), but I haven't been drawn into these characters' lives enough for the personal connection to enhance the story.

Don't know why I didn't read this before. Only points I would make is that we all should remember dialog is that dialog is intended for the listener, not the reader. So whatever on character says to the other, has been spun for the ears and mindset of the listener. So the affair with the sister is four years old, but yeah, it could have been stewing in the wife's head for four years, or come out two months ago when the two sisters got drunk together.

The second is that his having cheated with her sister, was the rational for him forgiving her. A situation where the one who sins first is reviled, burned and stoned, and the one who sins thereafter is forgiven for committing the very same sin.

Ahh how we rationalize things.

Now I'll read part two

Chilley

People who like this type of story are either a low down cheating slut, or a cream pie eating cocksucker. The writer is a cuck or a bitch...just another cuck

"There was no anger, no desire for revenge, or even justice. Just a deep sense of loss, coupled with the most intense emotional pain...."

This is what it's like. The feeling of loss, unless you catch them in the act, is overwhelming. Thoughts of revenge are put on the backburner, it takes awhile for them to manifest themselves.

When I realized my own wife was having an affair with an old boyfriend, I had pictures taken. Not by a PI, but by a coworker she wouldn't recognize. The pictures were about the same as described in this story, kissing, groping, petting in public, everything but the actual act. We'd been married for 8 years and had agreed she would go off the pill, Jodi was suddenly wanting a baby badly, something that was new.

I left. Left my wife, my house, my town and my State. Unfortunately, I was unable to leave my heartache and pain behind. It stays with you, like a dog gnawing on a bone, it just won't leave you, 24/7. At the most inappropriate times, I would find myself thinking about our 'wonderful' life and would grieve its loss. How could she go back to Tom, with the way he had treated her and cheated on her, using her for pussy only? It was something I couldn't understand and really didn't want to face her in order to find out. I was afraid it was something primal and simple, namely, the size of his cock. You see, Jodi had mentioned when we were having sex, more than once, how big Tom's cock was. I'm a little above average at 7 1/2" and very (6.5") thick.

Although I'd driven two States away and told no one where I was, somehow Jodi found me after about 5 months. I had a new job, driving dump truck and it paid very well. Well, at least much more than the warehouse job I'd had before. She was sitting on my porch when I drove home. I didn't recognize her or the car sitting there, until I walked to my door where she waited. The instant I recognized her, I turned, walked back to my truck and drove off before she could catch me. On the off chance she didn't know where I worked, I stayed with a buddy for a week with my pickup parked around back of his garage, while I continued to work. Friends kept me apprised of where she was and if she continued to stalk my rental.

You see, it killed me to see her face. The only face I'd ever truly loved and felt I'd love no other. She caught me when I went to the local store in order to buy groceries and cornered me in the dairy isle. It was terrible, but I ignored her and I believe people must have wondered about the crazy lady crying and pulling at my jacket. But I refused to stop and listen to her, or talk to her , or especially even look at her. I'd loved that face for over a decade, had kissed every inch of it and had it memorized. Her tears were as painful as the knife through my heart. I was able to drive away without running over her but it wasn't easy.

She finally made herself home in my home. I guess she showed my landlord her drivers license and he unknowingly gave her a key. She moved in and made herself at home. Knowing after three weeks it had to be finally faced, I figured out how I was going to approach it. I went home. She was waiting, sitting and watching TV when I walked in. She jumped up and wanted to hug me, crying and apologizing. I simply ignored her and acted as if she wasn't even there. It was evening so I fixed myself some dinner, but none for her. Then I retired to the living room where I watched television. When she attempted so sit next to me, I got up and moved to my chair. When she sat on the arm of that, I got up, went to the bathroom and then went to bed, propping a chair under the doorknob. She tried to get in a few times but the chair held.

The next morning I had finished eating breakfast and was preparing my lunch when she walked in. She got my attention fast when she turned sideways wearing a tight nighty and showed me the baby bump. Then she announced she was going to be a momma and I broke my vow of silence.

"I'm sure Tom will be happy to find out he's going to be a father. Now get the fuck out of here and give him the good news." I delivered that as I was walking out the door. I could hear what I could only assume to be cries of anguish.

Jodi is a redhead with almost milky white skin. I'm blond haired and blue eyed with also very light skin. Tom? He's swarthy, not latino but Italian. With that big cock she'd told me about, I reckoned he'd planted his seed night and deep in her fertile soil. I guess she hadn't really thought, I'd been gone for over 5 months, hadn't had sex with her for the previous month and she looked to be about 4 months pregnant. Not mine, whore.

Unbelievably, she was there when I got home. Throughout the day, my mood had finally lifted, fully prepared for her to be gone from my life. Imagine my shock when she wasn't and was waiting with dinner ready. After showering and still not speaking to her, I changed my clothes and left for the local Denny's. I love their Grand Slam....

Her eyes were red and it was simple to see she had been crying. The kitchen and actually the entire house was cleaned spick and span. I ignored her and watched my television shows for the night, with her being smart enough to not try and sit next to me. That evening repeated itself for the next few weeks, with me finally eating what she fixed, hell, I'd bought the food she found in my cupboard, refrigerator and freezer. It didn't take long for her to understand she wasn't welcome nor would she be welcomed into my bed. The only times I broke my vow of silence was when she mentioned anything about the future. I would simply look at her, point at her gut and tell her the future she had was with Tom and his baby, not me. That would earn me tears and she would fly to the one bathroom in my rental, which sucked if it was time for bed.

The cunt actually stayed until she gave birth. No prenatal visits, she went into labor and asked me to drive her to the local hospital. Instead, I (cold, yes) called 911 and told them a woman had stopped by that was giving birth and asked for an ambulance. When they arrived, I'd been watching TV, I went out with my keys in hand and pointed the way to the ambulance guys and went to dinner, asking them to lock up when they left. When I got home they had indeed locked up and I had a nice quiet evening to myself. My cell phone rang a few times but it was Jodi's number so I didn't pick up and erased the messages without listening.

The next few days were quiet until I came home the 3rd day from work. Jodi's parents were at my house and holy shit were they pissed! Her dad even took a swing at me and thankfully I was able to dodge backward. After he settled down, I invited them in, I had always liked them. They sat at the table quietly while I made coffee. Then her dad laid into me again the instant I sat. Neither could understand why I left Jodi so suddenly. How could I leave a pregnant wife? What sort of thoughtless animal was I and after they thought so much of me. Finally, I had enough of sitting and silently taking their abuse. I got up and asked them to wait.

When I returned to the kitchen table I had a folder with me. I started pulling out individual photos and handed them out. Just one, let them look and then move to the next. Their faces were sick, even angry they understood. When her dad told me no more, he didn't want to see anymore, I exploded and told him I'd taken his mindless abuse, he would study every picture I handed him or they'd take him from my house feet first. I was enraged enough to do it.

I made them sit there and look at each one. As I handed them out, I gave them details about each picture. Then I dropped the bombshell in their laps when I asked how far along she'd been when I left and they answered she'd probably gotten pregnant about the time I left. So then I had to tell them we hadn't had sex for almost 11 months. At that point, I got right in her dads face and he knew I was about to explode. I told him to get the fuck out, take their daughter and grandson (she's had a boy) back to Tom, since he was probably going to be their son in law. He'd been screwing MY WIFE for months before I found out and left. I did have the satisfaction of their admitting the baby was very dark. I pointed at my hair and skin and asked them if they were both fucking retards. Her dad took umbrage at that and when he jumped up, I was right with him and put him back into his chair with a left cross. As I mentioned, I was livid.

I didn't see Jodi again until about 2 years later when I was back to my hometown visiting my folks. She was in a park not far from where my parents lived, with a little boy. We were divorced by then, I had the papers waiting for her when her parents drove her home to their house. She signed them and that was that.

A few days later while out on a walk, I ran into her again, this time with her boy. She was somewhat frightened, but bravely walked up and introduced her boy, who she had named after me. Jodi saw my anger when she introduced him as 'Geoff' but didn't give an inch. She lifted him up and I calmed down and told him hello. Then I introduced her to my wife, Ionella. She was the sister of a coworker and we'd really hit it off. I was 32 and considered myself too old for a 23 year old but she wore me down and lo and behold, Nellie turned out to be a real live virgin, unlike the used way Jodi came to our marriage.

Nellie made me sit and talk pleasantly and rationally to Jodi. She knew the whole thing and also admitted later, it was a way to finally put it in the past. Nellie asked Jodi how Tom was and where they lived. It shocked me to find out she'd broke it off with Tom the day I left town and not only hadn't seen him since, he didn't know he was a father. I guess I was a little malicious when I offered to contact him and give him the good news, but Nellie made sure I knew she wasn't happy. This time, I gave Jodi a chance to confess her 'sins' and she told me her friends were sure she'd been slipped a date rape drug when she had unfortunately agreed to meet him for dinner. The next thing she knew, she was at his house and he was banging the hell out of her and taking pictures. When she was coherent enough to go home, he made sure she agreed to make herself available whenever he wanted to fuck.

Jodi wasn't lying. If nothing else, outside of her cheating, she never lied, no matter how difficult. So I told her I forgave her for what she did, but I wasn't able to forgive her for not believing in me. I let her know that all she would have had to do was come to me and let me in on what happened and as the husband, I'd have taken care of her. She was distraught when I explained, understanding she'd made her biggest gaff when she didn't trust in me. She also wished us a wonderful marriage and said she could quit waiting on me, she'd not been with a man, or even out with a man, since she broke it off with Tom. God, I couldn't help it and got myself in even more trouble when I mentioned that the last man she'd had sex with wasn't me, it was Tom. My wife was PISSED!

Life is good now. I heard Jodi still lives with her folks, not doing anything but raising her kid and working. Her friends say she won't go out because that's the penance she must pay for what she did to us. That kind of makes me sad, but I have no way to take any of her weight on my shoulders. I was working hard, trying to provide a life for her and our family to be and live happily ever after with her.

What was difficult for me though, was when Nellie and I drove past Jodi and my old place and found it abandoned. The white picket fence we'd built and painted together had falled over, the front door hung askew and I could even see a painting on the wall I'd put up myself.

Life goes on.

Good story but could use more detail and fleshing out.

Good offering though.

do people use comments sections to write their drama instead of submitting it as a story? This isn't the first time I've seen this.

What. In the FUCK?

The wife stated that she broke off the affair last Monday so why was her red dress out on their bed?

Used in a few other stories and it never sits right. The hidden affair that doesn't come up until the very end. You mean to tell me that Gary didn't immediately think back to his own affair when confronted with his wife's indiscretions? Not likely.

This story is just another cuck loving story.. The guy says "wife" .. She cheats on him for cheating on her? So fucking lame.. This writer sucks.. Just another cuck

Total crap excuse, a total crap response from husband, and total crap to the ending of this last half crappy story.

She said she ended it the previous Monday. Now on Thursday he saw her sexy clothes on the bed, ready to be bagged and hidden in her car. So, if she told Rory Monday, where was she going Thursday????

I hope you can save it in Chapter two, cause you lost it here.

Sure thats why she was getting to go out again that night right?

I hate authors who cant even keep their own stories straight

Also if you want to RAAC a whore and a cuck just do it, dont shore horn in an affair he had years ago as a justification

Why does this couple want to be married anyway. this is just a sick sad story

Your story doesn't add up. Wifey's ready for a night out on the town, but her affair is "over?" Weird.

she was dolling up to go out... so how come 'last monday' she stopped the affair???? author dear please spend some time going over what u have regurgitated...

‘Nodding she replied, "I told him it was over, when I saw him last Monday night. I promise you, never again."

Made no sense…if it was over why was she dressing to go out today? The writer needs to re read his writings…and possibly stop putting gonadless MCs in there

She looked him in the eyes, the pain and fear of the afternoon etched in her face. "Promise me if I take you back, you will quit screwing my sister, and that you'll never do it again...please!"

Sorry …u lost me there…who was taking whom

Back? This author really writes like he was high on weed when wroting

There are some inconsistencies, as others have pointed out, but the plot moves well and the prose flows well, too.

1 star - no comment

Lame

Stuff the mistakes in writing, it was a good story. I would rather have a badly written good story, than a well written bad story.

The wife firmly mistreated the husband to the point of total humiliation. Then, out of the blue, sees some non-incriminating photos, ang turns into a crying and submissive wife. Absolute nonsense. Fiction requires a minimum of touch with reality, and some sense. 0.

It died right here!!

It took several weeks for Gary to convince Alicia to go out with him...just once.

She wasn’t worth it right from the start. If she didn’t want him when they first met. Then he was waisting his time. Women know in the first few minutes if they want a guy.

Throwing the twist in that he screwed her sister several years ago seemed out of place to me. Just my opinion.

One thing that tarnished this story for me was her lie at the end. That she'd broken it off with him on Monday. He found her hidden outfit and saw her sexy outfit laid out on the bed. She was going to meet Rory that night. Letting her get away with that lie doesn't bode well for their marriage regardless of whether or not they're "even"

Good beginning!

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Good part 1 let's see how it develops. BardnotBard

Payback's hell ! Thanx !