by GWBosh
Hope you continue with this story soon - I can hardly wait for the next chapter!
I really enjoyed that, thanks. I hope that you will write another chapter.
then another!
The slow then fast then slow is great. Emphasizes the changes and progress. The reader notices things, they don't need to be pointed out.
I presume the daughter will enter this part of the story, personally I would keep the focus on mom.
Good work
Very interesting storyline but there are at least 2 more chapters.
Hopefully you return to complete this adventure.