All Comments on 'Seeking Twilight Ch. 03'

I'm very curious to find out how this one ends. Something you should watch is the quotations around dialogue, there was a couple times where you missed them. About the only thing I don't like about your story is that you introduce too many characters. Is that Po... guy important to the plot? If not, we probably didn't need to know his first and last name. But other than those few things, I think you have a great premise here, and I can't wait for the next chapter :)