All Comments on 'Sensual Persuasion Ch. 01'

Story is pretty good actually. I'm interested in seeing what happens next.

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One think though: it's not obvious when the point-of-view switches from Cameron to Luke... maybe you can use symbols to indicate a new section (like a row of asterisks or something). The sudden change kind of threw me because there was no indication that it happened.

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Other than that, thanks for sharing your talent!

Heh... and now I know why it's good to PROOF before hitting "submit".