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Nicely played..

to con the con. TK U MLJ LV NV

I don't usually like your stories let me be more in depth on that because you deserve it. Your stories are well written with engaging dialogue while they are the usual far of outragous circumstances and weird barely human people they are fun to read. You have a good graps of flow and it read easily.

I don't like your stories because I don't share you joy of humiliation and degradation of men. Sorry just not my cup of tea. I knew a guy once who had sex with his adult nephews that was fine he was a great guy but his sex life just was not my cup of tea. That's why I don't like your stories often just the content not your ability to write.

This story was fabulous however. It was implied humiliation and degradation something that you feared to happen but just teased and tantalized it was great and you pulled it off very well. Now if you would only rewrite some of you other stories...Heart of God pops to mind. God that was bad.

She set him up and planned the whole damned thing.

I'm usually a BTB kind of guy but her whole approach at it was just evil, not just revenge but simply evil. She stole the money, pinned it on her husband and manipulated the system to make him serve time in prison equal to the time he had the affair. She was even going to spend the next week fucking him up the ass before setting him off to be some mafia henchmen's prison bitch. I know the dude had to pay for what he did but seriously the wife isn't squeaky clean in this either, where is her punishment?

So, the wife exacts revenge, framing him for fraud, to suffer for the same time-period he had an affair ? And would have let him rot in jail if he hadn't confessed in the nick of time ?

Creepy.. since he has figured it out....

You telegraphed the wife's role way too early so that, except for an explanation of the sentence, there was no real surprise.

Still, although you need to work on your twist... a good try.

I thought this was a pretty good story and very different from the usual offering. A little over the top in the revenge department but strong emotional content and true love wins out.

So the fucking prick knows what happens when he cheats on his wife. More importantly, he knows what can happen if he ever tries again. Asshole is lucky she was merciful on his ass.

and he is to stupid to know it and realize she is using the stolen money to keep him safe in prison and Jake is her lover. Wow, really a dumb story.

That would be instant divorce if that were me.

That woman is stone cold. Love? She doesn't even know the meaning of the word. She's a woman with toys and when they get uppity, she slaps them around. He's not an equal partner, he's a possession and she's treating him like one.

She has no respect at all. That's not a marriage at all. It's a mistress and her pet.

While framing him for fraud and destroying him mentally and physically for an affair then he is better off without her. That's not love, that's obsession.

Divorce him, sure. Keep the children and the house, fine. But to put him in prison and to rape him? That's psychotic.

For the record, minimum security prisons are not the hotbed of gay sex you believe them to be. Hell, I was in a medium security for 2 years and there wasn't any rapes...although one guy did like to pretend he was a girl and the rest of us just avoided his nasty ass. The point is: get your facts straight because with a 3 month sentence, he would likely only be in prison for a couple of weeks. A first time offender for a white collar crime is usually paroled 1/6 of their sentence.

I would have preferred hearing how he was sentenced to 25 years and all of her carefully made plans went up in smoke because he was sent to a maximum security penitentiary where he was forced into becoming a girlfriend and after pulling a couple of trains committed suicide. That would have been better.

That's not a wife. That's a homicidal sociopath.

1 star because I can't vote 0.

I like that tiny tinge of doubt at the end. She did didn't she? Well I think she did? She must have done. Well I think she did anyway ….. probably! Oh yes. Great.

Full marks for making me lol at 6:30am . It hurt so good. *****

Very good...A different approach, and that makes it even better...4*

He really should visit a mental health professional to discuss his repressed homosexuality.

Or someone just like her; always outside the box and always ready to cut her nose off to spite her face; all woman. The concept of parity had to come from a woman.

Very funny!

but a bit let down with the punch line.

You managed to write around your favorite action so kudos for that. But this is still a wife that has little love and no respect for her husband. She sets him up, steals millions of dollars because, of course, she's smarter than her husband and everyone else. If he was such a smart guy (after all you wrote that he was smarter than everyone at work) he must have realized she did this to him. She TELLS him she did it when she announces at the end she made his prison term the exact number of days he carried on an affair. What more does she need to tell him for him to understand she's behind all this? And the reality is he really had no fear of being raped in a minimum security facility for a white collar criminal. So her threats were pretty meaningless. He needs to figure out where the money went so that when he gets out he can find it and disappear. His wife is flat out crazy and his fear should be of her, not prison. This is like all your other stories. While she hasn't fisted him yet, he never really fights back. He just allows her to do everything and anything. You would think a man on trial would be more proactive with his own defense and planning. Not good. Just your same story, readjusted so people aren't quite so outraged at your treatment of men.

Clever. Husband was smart to refuse the ass raping she wanted to do. Wonder if he figured out and hence confessed his affair or whether he just felt guilty - I suspect the latter. Clever story; five stars from me.

5 stars. Enough said.

Welcome back, Ed.

Cute scene. I liked the punchline. Very well written.

I was expecting that Hillary took the money, but that never came out

First you make it clear he is smart and then show him to be the stupidest person on the planet. And of course the wife is perfect. But after reading this pathetic story we know that she is just a cold heartless Cunt. Maybe that's why he cheated on her.

Obviously the wife did it, it hàd to be someone smarter than him n she was

To frame him for fraud (which it is obvious she did!), plan to ass rape him to prepare him to be prison bitch, and I'm SURE there was more than money involved in getting his sentence reduced to the length of his affair, is truly evil!

More great "Ed" writing that induces fear and repulsion in anticipation of rather than in the actual playing-out of the act(s). 5*

You have created one of the most evil wives on this site. How can he get out of jail and want to live with the sick cunt ever again? There is no guarantee he won't be paying for his mistake the rest of his life, with her wanting to play Domme/sub games with him. This is what you do to the father of your children that you profess to love?

Her punishment is much worse than most of the BTB stories here, and she is definitely crazier than all of StangStar's nutty cheating wives put together.

Somebody should email this one to Hillary Clinton. Or better send it to Bill!

Of course this is a five.

Longhorn_07 has the "Fool Me Once" story where the husband sent his cheating wife and her lover to prison to be inocent and the husband and ally (his future second wife) stole the money. However this story is not the punctual mirror of Longhorn_07's story, because the cheating wife of Longhorn_07's story was punished for her second cheating. The husband did reconciliation after her first cheating, but the BTB was after her second cheating!

BTW good BTBastard story...............

No sex listed in the writers bio. Probably a man hating bull dyke lesbian. That would explain all the pathetic man bashing.

I hope there's a part 2?

wonderful original, kudos to you, thanks for sharing

Well that's a revenge story, but left unsaid is did she steal the money or not ?

It's incomplete and begs for an act two.

Thank you edrider73. Well written, with a good twist at the end.

I got about half way through, since gay stories don't interest me.

The hardest part about an edrider73 story is deciding if your gonna vote 1 star before or after you read it.

They do not have a minus 5. This story smells of day old shit.

What did she do with the money? I know that she used part of it to make the pay-off, but she was the one who siphoned off the money... through her husband's computer.

Another chapter, please!

For the read.

Its your story, you were telling it well .... and than you flushed it down the drain. You could redeem yourself with a part two. But don't wait too long. This tale will scroll off and be forgotten like a bad dream. Oh, and Sterling probably did well in the joint without her 'training'. He's a total pussy anyway.

She knew hubby was Cheating and for How Long. She got him sent to Jail for @mos. & 23Days. Exactly how long his infidelity lasted. what's so hard to figure out.

PayBack

You sprinkled the clues. She was smarter. Someone smarter had done it. But she was fighting on his behalf to get his time reduced...eventually to the two months and 23 days. And you end telling us that is the length of the affair. Very tidy.

If they stay together his scorecard is wiped clean, she can never say a word, hint or anything because after this he has more than paid for the affair. She on the other hand will now have to be the working not him. He will no longer be able to go many places or join civic clubs or travel outside the US (maybe not even fly). Also he is unemployable, who would hire a convicted embezzler to work on their computer systems. His earning ability is near zero.

But the big question what is she doing with all the money? The millions that are still missing (FBI is not going look into anything under a half mil)

Now there is trust issues both ways, how can he ever trust her not to set him up again. Also I want DNA tests on the kids.

She'll be fucking Jake for that duration while Sterling is in prison. A fitting revenge!

You never really told who embezzled the money. I'm sure it was Hillary. (bad name for a character LOL) And like one posted, she will be fucking Jake for sure while hubby's in the joint, but probably she has already. I agree that there should be a sequel to answer some of the questions, and it should be posted soon. 4 *'s

That it wasn't an actual coding bug, but the thieving bitch is the person who stole the millions. Cute revenge, but she lost any credibility by lowering herself to thieving like a cheap whore and destroying the lives and reputations of others in the company. There is always fallout.

in circles

Although our hero balked at being pegged by his wife Hillary, and apparently prisoners were paid off not to butt fuck him, he really comes across as pathetic and stupid for a supposedly smart guy. How can he not see that he was set up? But his life is over, no matter if his sentence is 2 months or 25 years. As others pointed out, a felony changes everything. Getting him exonerated is not easy and he still has the stigma of a previous charge/conviction.

...But I think I found a story of yours I actually like. God it almost hurts to type that but if I could see doing that to cheating bitch of a wife, the reverse is also acceptable and this (unlike so many of your other stories) is actually reasonable in its revenge.

Although I would have preferred to have seen him found guilty and that instead of silly short sentence, his appeal - of which when held his wife would have been certain he would be exonerated - was to be held in 2 months and 23 days after his conviction.

None the less...I liked it.

I would still take the divorce.

.....by several times. The time, money and effort it took to orchestrate something so improbable takes most of the fun for me, out of this story.

It almost looks to me that she and Jake, or some other schtup will be going at it constantly for the 2 months and 23 days he's incarcerated. Protected or not, he's at high risk and she's probably the thief, as well.

When you've got a sentence that short you're not even put into the prison system... you'll do your time locally... and very little rape takes place in county jails... and anyway he would have been sent to a white collar facility...

What was that story all as bout?

She was very clever. So clever and so subtle that her revenge plan escaped me entirely. She forgave him? Or wanted him to get ass-raped? How did she get the sentence reduced? She really took the money? Or didn't take it? and on and on...

I will say the grammar and punctuation was goodly. So 2* for that.

Oh well, I'll just say... I'm confused.

So the revenge fit the crime. She wanted more at first when she wanted to warm his ass up for prison (I still got it. lol). Nevertheless the time fits the length of the affair. Morale of the story: Don't cheat on someone way more intelligent than you are.

To be on the safe side, just don't cheat. Period.

- A supposed to be clever ending was far too abrupt leaving many unanswered questions!

- If all of his problems were orchestrated by his wife (A real cold fish!) as a means of revenge,she'll be in some deep shit if/when her fucking around with company finances is discovered by the FBI. (They are not the dummies portrayed in movies and TV shows,and she is not smarter than everyone else, just the dopes working for the company she duped.

- When dipshit gets out following his affair-length sentence,he should hire a shady character to put a bullet between the cold-fish wife's eyes!

Please God, don't ever let me meet any woman that Ed knows!

re:

47 years an atheist, I now pray every night.

Please God, don't ever let me meet any woman that Ed knows!

Amen brother!

She set him up, now he will never be able to get a job in his career field. He needs to divorce the bitch when he gets out of prison and just file and move on without her.

he cheated for 2 months and 23 days, and now she will for 2 months and 23days. It's a sad tale, but justified. I didn't like the fact that his cheating was left out of the first part of the story, but some authors do that. It fit the story just too well.

1* you fake this to the point she provided the data that made it seem he took the money as punishment for him

5 to offset the 1 vote

Vote 1* for every story rated by THE FAT WHORE (that's what her clients call her) aka BONNIE/VASTIE aka ANON!

but since vastiesmith made her insulting comments I'll have to offset this with a ONE star vote in honor of that whore of Lit bonny/vasty. It's going to cost you authors a lot of one star votes to keep that cunt happy.

Hate the stupid story...

One *

Part-2

The husband realised (part-I end before confession) its his Fucking wife that set him up and transfer the money using hid ID n computer..n that his employer sldo in collusion. Seek a revenge n exposed her n his employer.He Aldo realised that his wife was getting too friendly with his boss every time she visit...so he had her investigate n foumd she had been cheating on him..so he did the same...

They missed lead the FBI so they got into trouble with them in the end the company go bankrupt...also expose the Jake role n the corruption in Prison system...

He break the arms n legs of Jake n bust his balls too.

That's a good story line...just need to work on the twist n turn n the details...

very enjoyable reading.

But now you need to write Part 2, as the story is only half told. The wife has promised all will be restored after his release from prison. It is time to show us how that will accomplished. How will he be able to trust her again once all is revealed. How old are

the children and how have they been affected by this revenge? Will they ever be able to respect him again, now that he has been convicted by the court, as well as by their mother. There are still too many unanswered questions to stop here, so please continue.

Can you say TRASH?

Convoluted, too "smart" for us common folk. And not really that good of a story.

This story is so convoluted that it just plain doesn't make sense.

So he is serving time for a crime his wife committed. But the first three months of a prisoner's sentence are the worst. He will, in all likelihood, be sodomized repeatedly in prison. She will get her revenge. And he will never, never, never be a man again. By the way, in every prison I have visited to see a friend or family member, visitation is one day, Saturday or Sunday, every other weekend. And new prisoners are not allowed visitors for the first three weeks. So, he probably got 3 or maybe 4 visits from his wife and children during his stay, if he was physically able to report for Visitation Day.

When He gets out of jail divorce her and move on , no job, no assets no loving wife who framed him for life . The sentence of 2 months and 23 days is only jail time. but the effect on his entire future is unrepairable. she does not deserve to be happy with her plans.

She set him up way before they got married. What an idiot. Oh! He said he was one. He fell for her BS, hook, line and sinker. He needs to start the divorce process in prison and when he gets out, go some place far, far away.

You don't think he wouldn't figure out she did it and how she did it? Then he would find a way to take all the assets and divorce her? The issue with most of your stories is that they are unfinished. You never seem to get around to the husbands response.

and riled up the closet cuckies to boot!

5*

If it was me, when i got out of jail, i would tell her i was going to the store, and that would be the last anyone heard from me. I would be gone, gone.

This was a two shit story......?crap

then the extremely smartey stands tall. TK U MLJ LV NV

usual shit from another WIMPY FAG "author".

This was over the top for her. He needs to divorce her once he gets out. She also needs to be punished for going overboard in the revenge. Maybe after the divorce and with time they could find it in them to try again with a new beginning. If not another scenario is her gets even by turning her in once he figures out what she did. She is a scary person no guy needs that. Put in another chapter for his revenge on her.

Another story of yours that prompts a lot of emotional responses from the readers; by definition, effective writing. For the hubby's sake, hope he gets smarter when it's time to bail...

Saw the ending coming, but it was still good. Ha, I guess his last minute confession saved his ass, literally...

but the ending was telegraphed like Western Union

Well, well, well. What do we have here? 3 holes in the ground.

Part double.

Turns out that he was in a car accident and was in a coma. A lucid clairvoyant coma...yeah. He never cheated, but she is actually cheating on Sterling with Jake. How did he know? Just wave the magic wand that made him a dumbass in part uno. He finds the code that is stealing money and where it's going to. Because of his connections, he gets info in who opened the account, and his wife goes to jail long time since they can't recover the money for a reduced sentence. She swears it was there. "She" had bought poppy fields in Afghanistan so gets fucked by anti terrorism and drug laws. He gets job back plus divorces her. After she serves her 35, he returns the money to the company anonymously. She finds out in a public library, then starts laughing funny and goes insane and twists her neck off and dies. He takes a shit on her chest. He buys property next to a highway and has the picture put up on a billboard. The end.

this is the only time worthless cucks and BTB fans come together.

When a woman seeks revenge, oddly the pretentious white knights aren't pissing in the wind about barbarism.

their double standard, they'll never admit it, at the very least shows everyone that BTB and slow RAACs are good stories.

Actually Hillary had found out Sterling's affair. In revenge, she wrote the code to steal the money, and framed Sterling up. She even had her affair with Jake, arranged Sterling's cellmate and his period of imprisonment.

That's why she was able to suddenly raise a large sum to buy Sterling's lucky ass from anal assault.

What sadistic bitch! !

Usually with BTB they don't want to keep the spouse. She has it set up so that she'll get back a man very much like the one that she punished. He'll just be more beta, and he will be afraid of her. Until the day he dies. However, I'm sure she's taken this into account and is willing to accept a more submissive husband. We usually see this the other way around in BTB.

If you can so easily train yourself not to mind rape, maybe such training should be offered to women and sexual assault would go down. Rape is about power, and a victim who doesn't mind wouldn't be satisfying so why attack them? BTW, this paragraph is sarcasm.

Certainly a 5 in my book. I loved her and hated her at the same time. I could see this work nicely if he was a latent bisexual, but as it is, it was the scare of a lifetime. Overboard, I don't think so, at least from her point of view.

One thing that stood out, was the belief that she was so much smarter than he was, that should have stuck out like a sore thumb. It should also be noted that he will forever remember how she manipulated him. That will not soon be forgotten, or how far she will go to get her results. That tells another story, doesn't it? Do a DNA check on the kids?

I didn’t care much for it. It was purposely convoluted and in my opinion that didn’t serve to make the story any better. It just made it more tedious. And yes, I “got” it, I just didn’t like it.

The guy was a pussy. No way did he hook up with Kali or anyone else.

So that’s what love is like, huh? He should do his time and then run and never look back.

Since he's supposedly brilliant he KNOWS she set him up. While he was in jail did she ever see the bullet that hit her between the eyes while he had a perfect alibi? A brilliant man not only figures out what she did and where the money is, but how to get the money and get rid of her. Another badly thought out, unfinished pile of garbage.

Negative stars

hopping it would turn out to be a good story, BUT that didn't happen did it?

Absolutely beautiful. The perfect twist. I wonder if there is even a danger - was this thug just a ploy to scare the bejesus out of him? I'm sure the bailiff guy would be happy to play along for a little extra dough.

She probably knew from the start that he wouldn't let her do the 'anal prep' - the mental anguish would be worse than the actual deed.

I love it!

I figured she set him up only didn't figure out what was supposed to happen to him in prison

And length of time twist was brilliant

She loved him all right, enough to frame him and get him sent to jail. At least he has the time to plan the rest of his life, when he gets out. Since he can't ever trust her again ...

Framing him and sending him to jail , informing a sadist he was coming to rape him, for a short term affair. To be fair , I've read worse btb stories told from the male point of revenge, but why would he want to go back to that. I meam, he came clean. Will she ?

I can say it. Stupid as hell

Was she smarter than him though? she gave up a job that paid far more than his, Seems to me if they had DINKed it for 3 or 4 years they would have had far more money to invest and turn into "more than enough for several life times" and they both could have retired and stayed home with the kids