by Hatsuda
H, I admire how well you are meticulously crafting a blend of business psychology and eroticism. As you continue developing your two main characters and their characters.
After all that, crossing several boundaries, you have him dismiss her just like that, in a few short paragraphs. It doesn't ring with the flow of the story and the character of the male protagonist. I think they needed a conversation about what they'd just done, their deep and not so deep inner feelings having just shown themselves to the both of them.