All Comments on 'Sex Club for Nerds and Geeks Ch. 09'

The storytelling and plot are pretty damn good but you are doing it again. It often sounds like he is doing a female version of himself. Come up with some descriptive adjectives to highlight the speakers and interject them from time to time as a highlight. It doesn't have to be all 'he said' 'she said' but there must be a clear division between the characters, speaking or otherwise.

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I really enjoy the writing and the concept. The concept is fantastic. But each girls situation seems the same. Nobody says no, they all love it. They are all wild in bed. That is all great to read until it keeps happening.

So I love the story, but it is getting too long, at least in the middle.