All Comments on 'Sexually Yours Ch. 01'

Don't use italics, please. Write directly about things happening in real time. Keep writing.

I really enjoyed this! I can't wait for more! wonderful work!

Breathe this is fantastic, I loved all of the story and I can't wait for the next chapter

... write more. *wink*

I loved the possiblity of this piece. It is very real and I would enjoy seeing more of your stuff.

Ref the italics: You needed to show the difference between real life and imagining, which you did here using italics. Some commenters will berate you, others won't. What works for one person can just as easily fail for another. Experiment and enjoy yourself. Good luck in all you submit.

GA.

Brillant story Breathe and so well written, you managed to make feel more like a voyer watching what was going on rather then just reading it.....waiting for next chapter

Holy Moses Breathe

That was absolutly fantastic, I really need to have a cold shower now.....Please keep the story comming

Ok breathe you asked me to be totally honest here. So it was a relief to me that it was so damn good there was no reason to sugar coat anything, highlight good points, hide bits i didn't like or anything like that-this is a fantastic, erection inspiring, wankworthy story thats was sheer pleasure to ummm-read. There was really only one thing I didn't like and this is really me being picky. I hate seeing an aussie use the american term "ass" I'd much prefer your to use "arse" like we would if we were talking. Still it is am american site with a predominatly american audience so I'm probably wrong. Thats my only critisism, and a pretty small one! Let me know when the next chapters up. Well done!

Breathe

What can I say? Excellent!!!!! A lady who goes for the erotic jugular and gets a bullseye every time.

the rating of chapter 3 so started at the beginning with this...loved it...cant'wait to read on. keep up the great work respectfully fan in Texas naynay

Breathe you paint a very erotic picture with your words, I'm on my way to chapter 2 right now. Thank you for the goose bumps..

Really nicely written and pretty hot! Whew! Off to read Ch 2...