All Comments on 'She's Leaving Home'

I guess this story was intended to be tongue in cheek because there is no way that a thinking spouse would buy

these mind games.______________________________________

Margie goes out of town and fucks around on him (He does not know whether this encounter was the first one or the last one in a series). Why would she play this game? Perhaps she fucked her lover (who was not Boyd), got so drunk that she passed out and some of her co-workers set her up with Boyd. She then knew that someone knew enough about her and her lover that the word might get back to Jim. She quits her job (word would get around there so it was no longer a comfortable environment) and "confesses" to Jim.______________________________________________________

By taking her "punishment" she defuses any outrage by Jim and take the high moral ground so Jim would reconsider the divorce action. She brings Judy in the picture to force him to defend Margie and to deemphasize this one time mistake._________________________________________________

Here are questions Jim should be asking himself? Usually when one gets drunk there is some memory of what lead up to the encounter. Was Boyd or someone else flirting with her? Was she raped since she has no memory? Why did Boyd who is described as one of the most undesireable men at the meeting have the same memory loss? Perhaps Margie slipped Boyd a dose of the rape drug so he would not know how he got there. Margie never mentioned the kids and what her departure would do to them. Shouldn't she weigh what the divorce would do to them before she prematurely ends the marriage? Margie was extremely concerned about Boyd's family being affected by the divorce. Why was she not concerned about her own family?________________________

As it stands this story trivalizes Margie's infidelity and her mind games are clearly obvious. That leaves one question - Why did Jim buy it? Was he looking to be a happy cuckold?________________________________________________________

SleeplessinMD

I’m going to be laughing for days about this story. I’m not sure, I didn’t check, but did you fit every LW cliché into your story? Not missing any are you?

Cuckolds? What's a cuckold?

in the negative. poor story; boring, cliched, lame, non-erotic. wimpish, idiotic, trite, boring, and unbelievable This has nothing to do with the author, who is a well known and able writer here.

The story is just a piece of nonsense. At least NICI provoked 100 plus comments within a 2 day period, even if half of it rating her story less than 50, 'tis why the "hot" labeled was never earned, even as the story "skyrocketed" to Literortica's "top" within the first hour. POOR story telling, plus negative factors, garner a lot of reviews but they are mostly mediocre to average ratings.

Amazing! Not just the story but some of the comments. HDK you are soooo good at what you do. Chubby Checker couldn't twist as well as you. Any time I read a story that surprises me and is well written I give it the rating as high as I can. Thanks!

I even re-read it to be sure. Yep, I had it right the first time - Total Crap.

Half a story half assed told.

Chapter three of an eight chapter tale.

Don't give up the PAPERBACK WRITER gig.

And even good old Harry liked it! Hey, I'm just assuming the geeks couldn't hold their booze, that accounts for the not remembering......hey, when I was younger, I had those nights. One time, she's sorry, she admitted it and was willing to leave and give him everything. I think a good butt tanning (especially when she's not used to it) was in order. If she keeps her promise, no problem with the ending and he strikes me as a man that will be wary, but not overbearing.

From a Troll, but I must bow to Harry ;-)

not asking for much,hubby a little slow.

The two of them just got drunk and started getting down on it? Seemed to go against the personality of the woman you painted in this story as well as the nerd. The sister Judy was a real pip. I don't understand how she could have just said right then and there that she wanted to switch with her sister. Most importantly there just didn't seem to be any real twist in the end. I was looking for the punchline and the story just ended. Oh well...

HDK: The accolades from your writing peers says it all. We lowly readers can only bow our heads in reverence.

I guess I'm trying to outguess HDK these days. Some of his recent stories have included plot twists at the end that have taken a 90 degree turn from what the reader may have been anticipating.

I was assuming that was what HDK was doing in this story as well. The old reverse psychology trick. The wife and her sister bad-mouth the wife and denigrate her such that the husband ends up sticking up for her and defending her as a good wife and mother.

In the end I expected to learn that the wife was indeed a real slut and that this was all a ploy for her to get the husband to defend her, thereby allowing her to continue her cheating ways. I guess that her actions really were what they appeared to be, or were they?

Is this a case of 'I know that you know that I know that...'?

I picked up my mouse to begin reading another of your well plotted, extrawell thought out, highly emotional stories.

I was looking forward to a good, reasonable reconciliation with some twist explaining the woman's trangression, or a devious, devilish didactic on getting even. Something that would get my juices flowing and my ochre boiling.

Instead I get a tongue in cheek, (almost) beautifully written spoof on "our" writing. Jeez, a guy can't trust anyone anymore? So I had a good laugh instead.

Although I wanted to hear how neither the wife nor the nerd had a memory of doing the deed. Jeez, how disappointing that would be. You and I would have to just lie right back down with the pretty lady and remind ourselves of what we had done. Right?

What the hell did this old jerk say it was "almost" well written? Well, there has been a really wierd mispelling popping up in stories on the web. And they are almost universal! When a writer wants to talk about someone looking at something, staring in other words, he chages it to star gazing. You had him STARRING. Maybe if I write it here this peeve of mine will reach a couple other writers. Most of us are avid readers of the Knight.

And even "Harry" gave you a thumbs up!!!!

Doug

the 'anon' titled 'The only problem with writers like you' seems to have a small problem. i bets his lips fell off the last time he smiled. lighten up, your a stroke waiting to happen.

nice spoof with a big picture message.

don

"Well, is that so wrong? I meant it all, too. I don't care how you try to convince me otherwise, Margie. You've been a wonderful wife, way better than I could have dared hope those many years ago when I asked you to marry me. You've only messed up the one time. It was only once wasn't it?" I asked, practically begging Angie to tell me it only happened once.

you put angie in place of Margie but i have read your story and i loved it i hope to read more .

Atlanta,Ga

Ain't no way I can vote anything else if Harry liked it. HDK, I just love the way you weave these things. The humor and the everlasting question: who was really in control. IN real life it is never clear, and in your stories it is really never clear.

I guess I no one can figure out who won, then no one lost right? :>)

Keep it up.

... I'd say this story was inspired by the criticisms of so many of the Loving Wives stories - in particular, the criticism I see quite often in the reconciliation stories, "once a cheater, always a cheater", which was included in this story itself. HDK always seems to take these tired old storylines and turn them upsidedown, shaking them until gold coins fall out of the pockets.

As usual, I love the bit of humor that is always a part of your best stories.

Boyd

<p>Sometimes reverse psychology works on a man, doesn't it? LOL </p>

Very nice little story, HDK. Keep 'em coming, pardner.

Left me with a smile for all the stereotypical blanking. A therapist’s dream couple of rational at it's funniest.

Thanks for the entertainment.

PT

you know you will have readers scratching their heads w/ this one. you just turned everything standard upside down. but again, it is YOUR story and i do like it, but some some readers(hardcore revenge types) will not.

HDK, I actually liked the story very much.

In the recesses of my mind however something just doesn't add up. She can't recall how she ended up fucked and in bed with a naked man she doesn't care about. He can't remember how he ended up fucking a naked woman in his bed and per the story was beside himself because it happened. Now if these are both true, why did it happen?

Was there a set up? You mentioned the stiff competition in the drug business; did the competitors do this? There has to be something behind this behavior which was obviously out of character for both of these people.

With that being said I think the story could go on. But also some have said she betrayed him by just going and partying when she knows she cannot handle her booze. She should never have put herself in that position in the first place.

Forgive her? Yes of course, but for me it might have taken spankings on numerous sexual interludes. But, I am a bit kinky when it comes to that so I would have played that card as long as she let me get away with it.

Thanks for a great story HDK.

Your efforts are appreciated.

Charleybear

is that you have a screwed up idea if reality and impose it on the readers , thus making it a part of the standard for how to act in a marriage, or in this case when one is unfaithful.

First of all ...are we to understand that this creep co worker is completely blameless...not likely. He had to have started , or at least kept the ball rolling till the two of them enden up fucking.

Now number one. Why is this creeps marriage so fukin important and why should the husband accept it that way. He should go and beat the living shit out of him and make sure his wife knows what a creep he is.

A husband that does less isn't much of a man, which 'writers' like you are constantly trying to prove. You really have a fucked up idea of what is real.

Next let's look at the company..They are not blameless. they are the ones that sent two retarded scientist to a meeting together, without chaperones. The company should be sued for the fuck up. They bear a responsibility.

Next the wife in this case is really retarded (like the writer) and he had a chance for a younger woman with bigger tits who evidently wanted to fuck him badly. So there you have it "writer" What you gonna do about it???

Great story, HDK. The hyperboles make me belly laugh more than once. The role reversal was superb. Excellent authoring.

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By the way, who's Angie? Gotta be a character name blunder. Even so, the tale deserves a top mark for its originality, delivery and panache. Thanks for an enjoyable tale.

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P.S. Dear Anonymous,

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Thinking that thebullet is some ignorant hick would be quite a blunder because the man is an accomplished author whose story "Death by Fucking" won several Golden Clitoride awards in 2004. I can never decide whether I like Al Steiner's "A Perfect World" or "Death by Fucking" better. The good part is that I don't have to pick and choose. I can read 'em both. ;)

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Now if you want to believe that Andrew is an idiot, well, I can't stop you but you would be wrong. When Andrew calls someone to task in the area of erotic writing, I reckon he knows what he's talking about it since his peers voted his stories Best of the Best not too long ago. And the humble pie is being served down the hall and to your left.

I took almost 20,000 words to get to the same place HDK got in a few short paragraphs... and he made me actually laugh so hard others in the lab told me sush!

NOT FAIR! I caim a foul... I'm not sure my basis, but I'm sure there was something wrong here.

While wifey's description of the night may have been absolutely accurate, plainly wifey and her sister played hubby like concertmasters.

Thanks for your 'different' series. They're great.

Phil

one more great story from a master. Of course it was plain as day but still a damn fun and good read

Keep 'em coming

the H20wader

Well HDK I'm truly sorry that I can't give you a HIGHIER rating than a 5!!! I think I might have also forgiven her. Just because when she came home she sat him done and told him EVERYTHING that she remembered. AND she took FULL responsibility for what she had done!!! BUT I do think I would have liked to have seen the OTHER guy be FORCED to tell his wife everything and let the chips fall where they may!!

She could have tried to hide it, but she love her husband to much to disrespect him like that. YES I know that some are going to say that when she cheated she was disrespectful to him. To that I say yes you are right, BUT she showed him the respect that was due him by telling him EVERYTHING and letting him know that she was willing to devorce him as her punishment!!! And NO I'M NOT A WIMP, but I can see and understand different situations!!

Keep writing good stories like this HDK......

Paul

Something is rotten in Helsinki. Either you just played us, or wifey just played hubby. A "75" for something new, though.

Tend to agree with your philosophy of punishment here. VG and a gold *.

a woman who knows she cant handle alcohol drinks to excess, where was her brain, her ability to say no that is enough, she did this on purpose. She wakes up in bed with a man covered in his cum, really and she cant remember getting there, whether she said no or not, hmmm, sounds like a case of rape to me. She helps cover for the man she had in her bed, so he can go home to his wife and hide his indescretion? With brains like this we have a scientist, no we have an office pool typist of twenty years. Then she comes home announces she wants a divorce and walks out. Then hubby welcomes her home remembered the past not the present? Where are the AIDS and STD test? Bare sex, yeah, i want the best sex with you baby right after you party hardy, I want to die with you with the same disease you got cheating. A wife doesnt get drunk and party without her husband. That is total disrespect and betraying. No hubby is stupid, maybe take her back, but it will be a long wait for the final STD testing in six months to a year.

wow this was really different.... and it was a reconcilation that makes sense. Is that allow here at Lit? I didnt think it was. There are many stories from this author I love.... they are amongst the BEST I have ever read in LW ..................................

<b> MICHELLE </b> (both parts) <b> Fool on the Hill Yesterday eight days a week </b> and </b> Goofy and my wife</b> are great stories. I have said so STRONGLY... and all of them featured reconcilation. This one is JUST as good as those.

great tongue-in-cheeker. as always your great wit shines through. always look forward to your stories

poorrichard

Its pretty clear that this guy The Bullet is well kind of an idiot. I have blasted Harry here many times for being vulgar and crass but sometimes Harry is right on the mark. Look at HDK's last story. At least 5 others agreed with him.

I don't know where HDK gets these stories from, but this one put a huge smile on my face. Absolutely loved Judy's role. The ending made sense. Great story!

Loved the story. People are wimps when they let someone else force them into a position they are uncomfortable with. He would have been a wimp if they hadn't gotten back togather! ----And the actual story composition, english, etc. was up to your usual standards. Good job HDK.

Someone ought to give that sister an Oscar! This story was a nice little way to start the day. Thanks.

What a great spin in a different direction. I laughed my ass off. I don't know what inspired this one but please let me know, I want a bottle of it. Thank you for your great style and sense of humour!

I loved it! So very tongue in cheek that most of the morons mentioned earlier will never get it. Great example of having fun writing!

Rob Conners

different but very enjoyable!

Dear Harddaysknight -

This sucked. You can do much better.

Bill

Harry's going to call you a weak-assed wimp for taking back the cheating slut. Harry and Kolgore will write long explanations disecting each line and phrase of your story proving that you probably didn't even write it.

Of course a normal human being can see this story for what it is: a semi-humorous vignette into the life of a loving couple that has a once-in-a-lifetime problem.

As usual, good. And even better: different.

Super little tale. The punishment did fit the "crime", lol. Up to HDK's usual high standards.

The punishment fit the crime. No need for decapitation as she was unconscious.

High Regards: Bill