All Comments on 'Should Fantasy Become Reality?'

Sounds like Jim didn't take kindly to Frank fingering his wife.

Wonder how many more women Frank calls a slut?? Without looking over his shoulder??

Although it got quite serious it was a fun story!!

Good story. Interesting. What is nice about this---nice? my God, such a word about this subject----you don't know what is coming (an o, not a u) next. That makes it an interesting story.

Good story, not at all what I had expected.

Keep writing!

A good tale of one-up-manship. Sounds like Frank could take a lesson from the coyotes and glance over his shoulder once in a while to see what might be behind him. If he would have been taking care of business at home, his wife wouldn't be smiling at the memory of another mans fingers and kisses. I'm now wondering if he will ask his wife to supply any watersports in the future. Ha Ha

Yes, the story still needs editing. Keep looking, there are a lot of good editors out there.

Keep writing, DG.

left me with a big smile.

I definitely think you need an editor, but I like your stories.

This was one of my fisrt stories. I really liked it. Most comments said I need it edited, so I had it edited. May not be perfect but is a better read. Give it a chance.

Thank you DG Hear

I liked it, Husband was no wimp. That's the way it should be. I hate wimp endings where the husband just jacks off to his wife cheating.

Chicago

I went back to read some of your other stories and came across this one. It was good. Hey readers! give this one a try. You just might like it.A friend

I don't like Lit's rating mechanism. This wasn't a perfect story but it surely was a very good one. Not a 5, better than a 4, say 9 out of 10. Good quick reaction by hubby, no doubt about his leaning one way or the other. Good job.

Liked your story, but your dialoge needs help from an editor. (like missing quote marks)

JimDinMN

I generally like your stories and have had many a cum while reADEING THEM AND THIS ONE SUCK'S not even good but I will read your next one!

I just read this since you are one of my favorite authors. A good story, not great, but it reveals how much you have improved over the years. I also just read "Chocolate Covered Cherries" and it almost hard to believe that you are the same author. Goes to show that practice does make perfect.

Thanks for continuing to write.

The whole discovery scene was a bit surreal. I can't imagine anyone actually doing that after walking in on their wife in the throws of passion with another man. I got to hand it to you as being quite inventive. Thanks for the offering.

Early or not -

It read well and flowed just fine - the subsequent editing may be part of that but this version is just fine thank you -

it was a good story. why is it that it takes a dramatization in events to show that true love(going to the grave love), is for always.

to spice up you love life.....the trouble starts when fantasy becomes reality...then the shit hits the fan...a nice little tale....

The plot line was a little unusual and not terribly evocative (or erotic, for that matter). However, I sensed that the writing was a little tentative -- restrained, almost. Especially so in character development as they minimally explored the freedom offered by an "empty nest." That being said: I liked how they confined their exploration to mutual fantasy. "Jim" was realistically portrayed when he immediately perceived "Frank's" assault and acted quickly, decisively AND very creatively! You spared the reader from paragraphs of tortured ruminations of an adult male being frozen in place, catatonic, watching his loving wife getting raped unexpectedly, and at the same time getting an steel-hard erection more painful that an adult circumcision without anesthesia. Followed by lines and lines of drivel that convey the nuanced application of the best of depth psychology. Why? How? "I shouldn't be______" "What does this mean?" "Whooops! She's enjoying it!!" Etc. Etc. Thank you.

Oh, I almost forgot. The mind-body freeze-out was solidified by noticing that the antagonist's iron bar 'member', which juts out at a full 90 degrees, with its massive mushroom head, is of a length sufficient to measure floor tile.

A story from early in your career, and still a very good one. Good job on old Frank.

Interesting weaving of the plot. Frank got what he deserved and I guess everyone else also even if it is under the cover of revenge.

4*

BJ

Great Story, Great Writing. I love a happy ending. This story was Great because of the Naughtiness between the wife and her friend's cocky husband. Which was bad, but not so bad that divorce was a result. It was bad enough that the cocky husband got some pain. This idea was an excellent way to approach this idea. Parties are always ripe for naughtiness. LOL Thanks for the hard work, my friend. This is an excellent read. Thank You 5 stars

Frank is very lucky Jim restrained himself when he was confronted. Not every man is so merciful. Speaking from experience, many men are fully ready 24/7 to put Major Pain on an asshole assaulting their treasured wife. I'm talking losing all your teeth, broken jaw pain, serious damage, Serious Damage. Not one or two punches in the face but really really putting the pain to a man like Frank that would change his life forever. Jus Sayin'

Entertaining story. Good to see Jim and Mel have a good loving and sexual relationship. Nice to see a story where fantasies stay a fantasy and they were true to each other, ignoring his fingerbanging Mary and allowing Mel to use Frank's face after passing on him. Jim allowed her to get some control back on Frank by having her degrade him and then use his face, as he threatened to use her, and he made damn sure that Frank did not enjoy it. That being said irl, probably a lot more physical damage using that pool stick. Feel sorry for Mary. She had a sh$t husband, who isn't decent in the sack. And he has pulled sh$t before. 5 stars for the unique revenge elements.