All Comments on 'Showing Off Ch. 01'

very good story, loved the action in it....however, you need to find someone to proof read your stories, it was kind of hard to keep up with.

brilliant story!! love all the sexy daughters in stockings stories, when is the next one!!

was unfortunately flawed with many mistakes and made me keep stopping, so it spoiled the momentum. It could have been a great story, you had the plot but didn't execute it well enough. Try reading your story over 3 times before submitting so that you can pick up on the tiny mistakes. Or have someone help with the editing. Without the obvious mistakes it would have been so much better.

Sure there were mistakes, but I for one would love to reaed what happens next!

Loved the story, and hope you write the the next chapter!

I don't usually go for father/daughter stories, but somehow this was different. It had me hard the whole way through. Chapter 2 will be an absolute MUST for me to read.

just dying to get to the second instalment!

It is not that the story is well told,but it does inspire thoughts around the centre.