All Comments on 'Shy Little Sally Ch. 02'

Sexy, exciting, Mom and daughter. Love it. More More More, please

Great story baby! Keep the juices flowing! YA!

Wonderfully written and a story well told.

I've read a fair bit of your work and usually find it very arousing. But I have a few minor quibbles.

First of all, you need to be a bit more careful. In the first part of this story, Mom's age changes from one paragraph to another. is she 37 or 38? You make a few minor spelling errors as well.

I also agree that you do - at times - overuse certain expressions and styles. It can be avoided, but it isn't a major issue.

What I'd like to see you do is a novel, or longer tale - pr even perhaps, have the characters from one story meet up with some from another.

Should you ever want editing / spelling assistance, I can be reached at this site. Check out my own stories through BrettJ and contact me there is you'd ever like a bit of help, always willing.

Keep writing - the talent is there!

I love your writing, and am sad that you have not created anything in a very long time. I would love to see this and Lin's Long Tongue continue. Please write again!!