by magmaman
Too much of the teasing ruined what little of the passion you deigned to afford us at the end. If you took the time to explore a loving or even a vengeful sexual relationship between the two, it would have made for a far more erotic story. Once they finally did mate, there was just no real passion. All I could think about was how poorly she just treated him, and that made his willingness with her too unbelievable.
Nice start to the story, I would've like to have had him get it on with one of the other friends first before he ended up with his sis. Maybe even having the one girl that was fascinated with his cock giving him a blow in front of the others.
the subject has potential , (there's a milo manara story that's similar) but it's too artificial and made-up just for the hc cfnm stuff fans
With everything she put him through. All the humiliation, the torture. She ends up calling him to her room to have sex with her. And he goes with it?
Am I missing something here?
yet another writer posting unrealistic garbage wasting our time and the sites space. the only thing to do is DELETE DELETE DELETE.
you screwed the pooch on this one it would be better in the NONEROTIC AREA way to unrealistic just a total piece of crap as usual for this site. DELETE AND STOP WRITING YOU SUCK AT IT.
get rid of those losers: what have they ever posted. i thought it was a well-written short piece. the deletist crowd need to take a leap...
now he is screwing her it wont be long before he gets to screw her friends too...life for them both just got better with all the fun and games they will have.....