All Comments on 'Slut Mommie Ch. 20'

it would be great for slut mommie and kristy to have a relationship where kristy controls her mom and makes her do things in public and gina catches them andwatches and wants kristy and kate to join her and Elaine with tommy watching

Now you need to get Tommy and Kristy together. Then add Gina into the mix with Kristy and Tommy please...

BEST series on this site!!! screw those people who pick apart punctuation and grammar.. such a sexy series! so detailed and explicit! Ive been with sister, mom, dad and my son.. wow! this is hot!

You had me all the way, excellent. Seemed like my family, very exciting. You made me cum many many times. I realize this series is from a few years ago. Please update, pretty please. xoxoxox Annette :-O..pPpPpPp

I can't imagine a hotter story! I Hope every day that this story grows and that it just gets more sexually charged with every encounter! Thank you! and as always, I hope to read more soon!

Cheers!

New chapters pls. You are the best author ever.

We DEFINITELY need to bring the son into the mix...

WHY DID YOU STOP???? PLEASE GIVE US SOME MORE. THIS IS THE BEST SERIES ON THE SITE.

Thank you for all of the enjoyment in reading Slut Mommie!

This is one of the hottest stories on this or any other story site. I can "see" another chapter or two with at least one more "family photo session". Perhaps it is time for either Kristy and/or John to become the photographer with Kate and Tommy as the subjects. Increasingly erotic poses needed! Perhaps with just Kate and Tommy but maybe Kristy or John somehow join the action. I wouldn't be a bit surprised if Gina didn't become involved in a photo session at some point, possibly with just Tommy and Kate and maybe Elaine.

Would love to read about the follow-on party at Jeannine's that's suggested in Chapter 20.

In any case, I think there are lots of new and old-time readers of this story that would be excited to read about any future developments.

Thanks again for your creative efforts!

It's a shame but it looks like Fantasy has departed Literotica and the story has ended. As Part 20 played out the opportunity for an ever increasing number of players became a possibility. Tommy with his Mom and Sister; Dad with Gina, her girlfriends and her Mom, Jeannine; Raven and Betty, with her fuck machines installed in one of the bedrooms. Removing the bedroom and bathroom doors in their home, total nudity in the house and at the new backyard pool. The asshole play has been very erotic, and Kate could lovingly describe licking and sucking her husband's cum from Kristy's or Gina's just fucked asshole. My wife and I would like to be their very close next door neighbors; so John and Sarah could be added to the mix. :-) ====> O

To those of you who criticize my emphasis on the mechanics of the writing process, I say, as you are entitled to your opinion so am I!!!! Some authors welcome constructive criticism, others do not. If an author allows for comments, is it reasonable to assume that he/she wishes only to hear how great he/she is???? In praising virtually unreadable prose, you are reinforcing the writer’s

decision to fail to tidy up the story. So be it. I seek to remind the storyteller that; however good the plot line, characterization, and overall erotic content might be; the way a story is written counts for something. Five stars tell an author to continue in the present mode and that no improvement is needed. I find this disingenuous and will not abet such deception. You do what you want, I certainly will, negative opinions be damned!!!!

I read all 20 chapters and found there to be many good things, bad things, and ugly things about them.

THE GOOD

The scenarios were highly imaginative, creative, descriptive, and, of course very erotic. The characters were , on the whole, likeable, sufficiently complex and yet very human in their responses to their environment and their life circumstances. The internal moral/ethical battles played over by Kate are beleivable enough, albeit, a bit overdone.

THE BAD

While probably representative of people in general, the characters tend to be more caricatures than real. Kate goes through life with no panties, short skirts, too-small tops, too-short skirts, and them womders why she ends up naked and orgasming in many of ther places she goes. John walks around with his head in the up-and-locked postion most of the time, oblivious always, drunk sometimes, working too much, and neglecting the hot piece of ass he married. Tommy is a walking/talking hard-on with his dick wagging, stuffed up some pussy or ass or down some slut’s throat. I am amazed at the girls he has to choose from; Mom, girlfriend, girlfriend’s friend, and probably his sister, if future chapters are forthcoming. Krisy goes through life eating Mom, sucking and fucking Dad, and drooling over brother’ss big cock. The other females seem to be cunts and mouths open and panting to be filled, fucked, abused, and flooded with hot cum, male and female both.

THE UGLY

Error abound thoughout this series. The writer’s style is marked by a lack of sophistication, depth, and responsibility as the communicator.stroyteller. General examples include:

Spelling a word two different ways, even in the same sentence!!!!

Forgetting the name a character (Krystal/Crystal)

Haphazard capitilization through out the chapters.

Misuse of words where the form used made no sense or doesn’t even exist.

Failure to do something as fundamental as a spell check.

Omitting key words from a sentence making it awkward, at best, unreadable at worst.

Starting out misspelling a word, beginning to spell it correctly, and then reverting to the incorrect version.

Uncommunicative redundancies.

Too many words with too little actual communication.

Awkward, clumsy, unintelligible, convolouted, and nonsensical phrasing.

Separating compound words into separate words.

Mismatching pronouns with their antecedents.

Repeating the same or similar words two or more times in the same sentence without adding one thing to the meaning or readability.

Confusing plurals with possessives. Adding apostrophes where they don’t belong and omitting them where they do.

Contradictory adjectives/subjects.

Splitting proper names.

Lack of consistency in almost all aspects, save the rife errors.

Caramel Frappuccino (caramel frappuccino)

makeup (make-up)

out of site (sight)

set up (set-up)

Crystals (Crystal’s)

comming (cumming)

god (God) (24)

for what (seemed like) several fevered minutes

pent up (pent-up)

bared down (bore)

Meat Loaf (meat loaf)

Husband (husband)

Grandma and (grandma)

Grandpa) (grandpa)

Camel Toe (camel toe)

Family (family)

was (not) a request

heart's rapid (beating)

cover it (them)

eye-full (eyeful)

Brother (brother)

Slut (slut) (3)

half way (halfway)

hard on (hard-on) (3)

Son (son)

Daughter's (daughter's)

Daughter (daughter) (8)

spread eagle (spread-eagled)

turn on (turn-on)

forbidden taboo (ARE YOU SURE IT WASN’T PERMISSIBLE TABOO????)

blindfolds (blindfold) (2)

Baby (baby)

Husband's (husband's)

cock slid in (slide)

Krystal (Crystal)

With all the complex situations, errors etc I loved reading it and hope you continue ...

Wishing that you would come back and write on! You are, in my heart, the absolute BEST!

Would have loved reading more of your writings

This is the only continuing series that I really enjoyed. There is so much more that could be done with the characters.

Is there any possibility that will be more ... this is the best series that I have read and there are so many more places to take this .... please .... More !!!

Another wish to see you come back! Please say hi at least if you can. I hope you come back! More chapter love would make the word a happier place!

if he does not bring on more parts then I think I will continue writing the story

Hopefully you can close this series with the whole family have a grand finale orgy bringing in tom into their circle. Tom haven't even fucked Kristy yet.

I loved the majority of the story,it's a shame that it ended with Tommy not joining in,though.

Best story i've ever read...

Do you know similar stories on literotica?

You have a nice series going here. Well written and plays to the imagination. I am hopeful you will have many more chapters with Kate. Lots of storylines still to be developed.

Loved this one, but I would have liked it if KATE started licking her daughter's ass and continued for a few pages...it was soooo HOT! Having the husband then lick his daughter's ass and Kate's ass as well..

I agree with others that the grammatical and spelling errors in this whole story collection are ridiculously numerous. The story would be better if there weren't so many side stories. The whole Raven thing is bullshit. The younger kids' website aspect of it is lame. Using the photography to drive the erotica is okay in the beginning, but it gets old. The taboo of her fucking her son sort of gets diluted as the story moves on. Her relationship with her daughter is actually the hottest aspect of the whole story. Involving her husband was sort of okay, but keeping him in the dark was kind of more interesting. I would like to have seen the dom at the party move into her life.

I also would like to see Kate become much more submissive and have Kristy up the ante in terms of whipping her and making her drink her piss, etc. She should be hurting her every day in some way. I would love to see Kristy call the shots from some point in the story on. The mother should be her total slut/slave. She should have Kate get a tattoo of her name on her ass, and "slave," on her cunt, so everyone would know the deal. She also should have seduced the Dad and the son herself.

Love this story series! It’s by far the best on this site! I hope you can continue adding to the story.

Please continue this great story.

Grammer and spelling errors fall to the wayside when such a powerful story unfolds. Great job, you had me dripping!

This is a great story thread. Its a damn shame he has not logged back in 6 years. So sorry that it isn't happening

still have hope! ;-)

Your editing sucks, but forget I wrote that. I read past it and enjoy it.

This is an awesome story. It seems to envelop many categories besides incest which is one of the things that makes it so engrossing. I was constantly hard and couldn’t keep my hands away from my cock.

Ignore those fools that try to analyze your writing and constantly criticize and berate it and you. They just don’t understand what this website and the writings are all about, erotic fantasy and pleasuring the mind.

Please keep writing whatever you enjoy. And I certainly hope you’ll also continue this series with further chapters, the potential scenarios are stimulatingly limitless.

still hoping!

From part 1 to the 20, That was the most intense work I've ever read.

a family orgy

I know you have been gone for a long time and maybe this isn't your hobby anymore, but I hope that you will consider coming back and adding more to this story! I feel like some characters were just getting exciting and the group was hopefully about to grow too! Please, please consider coming back and adding more!

Just one of your many fans

NT

So hot I read it at least four times. I love this hot story so much. Please write more like this one.

I have returned to read this story again and again! That it's told from the perspective of the Mother unable to contain the lust she feels for her son's huge cock resonates within my own compulsion to suck cock. Her description of his cock being forced all the way down her throat is precisely the way that I love being throat fucked. wonderful series! Encore Please!

This is without a doubt the best series of stories of all.

How about a foursome with Kate, Jeanine, Gina, and Kristy. You would make this story so HOT I might be afraid it would melt my tablet. Today is 17 Jan. 21. Please continue this series. So much MORE can be done. Chapter 20 was submitted on 21 Mar. 12. It will be eight years in Mar. Please write SOONEST! As so many have said, this REALLY IS the BEST series on this site.

This is the best story/series I have read (all 5s). The emotional, and psychological development and personal growth of the main characters (mother, father, daughter and son) was almost excellent. I would like to suggest a few additional chapters: (1) Mother dominates and punishes daughter, as appropriate; (2) Father dominates and punishes daughter, as appropriate; (3) Son dominates and punishments mother, as appropriate; (4) Mother dominates and disciplines son's girlfriend, as appropriate; (5) Mother participates at Raven's club; (6) Kate & John attend another part at Gina's house. I hope you other 21 stories are at least half as good as this one. This series has the potential for a novel. How much would you need?

Just read all you chapters (1 thur 20) and it has kept me up for four days straight. 10 years now since your last contribution, and you could write another 20 chapters with all the possible story lines. I would love to see Kate bring all her family together as lovers, and kick that bitch Gina in the teeth!

This work is a true masterpiece! Let the adventures of Kate continue!!! Author you can do it, right? The flight of fancy is not limited.This is art and there can be everything.Here's another great piece of Summer's Blackmail author wilcox010.

Will you ever write more?

amazing.. I want to read about more of Kate and her sexy adventures.. her slutty time with her family and others

Dear author, don't leave your reader! Come back! I believe in your talent and ability to write a sequel to Kate's adventures! Intrigue and passion, curiosity and vice, pleasure and shame - all this I found in your work, which can be called a bestseller.Flight of thought is not limited and it belongs to you.May the force be with you.

I would love to read more

Fantastic story!!! I hope you have more to come soon. So hot and fun o read and fantasize.

It has toe be the hottest story I have ever read. Hopefully there will be more to come!

What an amazing story. I really enjoy your writing and the situations you created. I hope you decide to add some more chapters to this as you could easily keep going.

Still hoping on hope for more chapters!

Even after years I wish on every start to have Fantasy69 make a comeback!

*crosses fingers*

amazing story. I would love to read more

I wouldn't change much about this masterpiece. If anything, the sex machine dildo needed to be bigger. Not 12 inches but bigger. 14 or 16 and Kate needs to get pounded. The nightclub bondage needs more spanking. Kate needs to be spanked by her daughter with a paddle from the sex store. Plus Katie keeps dreaming about a gang bang and she deserves one where Tommy and John end up being the last two with some double penetration. Double anal

amazing story. Definitely a master piece.

In addition to problems listed in the comments, its unsettling on one way. Most times there is no continuity, building up on previous experience.

for example 0) Kate's constant modesty is annoying even though she engages in certain risky behavior at times 1) Story buildup between Kate and Kristy lacks follow-up and advancing; mostly one sided with again modesty at every level is annoying. They should have been lovers after adult store trip or much before than that.

2) In the last chapter, what was son doing while a huge tryst going on in the house, in the same floor?

I think you got what I am saying.

Writer clearly absconding and totally would have been nice had he continued. From the sentencing and typos, English may not be his/her first language - done a fantastic job in spite. A good editor can fix all that in a digital era.

A rewrite with continuity would be make this an all time hit.

Cheers

Best I’ve ever read

Love the entire series. Great story, great writing. Just wish there was more. It sort of ended with a few loose ends.

Love the entire story however the mom could have been pregnant through some of it because in a few of the stories you never specified if her and her son use condoms or her and her daughter boyfriend or even her sons friends and they daughters friends or they husband . So other than the fact that she could have been pregnant with somebody else baby you did good it was a excellent story . I hope you continue writing and come back to this story and add a epilogue that maybe had the mom pregnant and her daughter at the same time and you have them both having the same due date but because of a gangbang there waters break and there both driven to the hospital by each other partner mom gets son and daughter get dad and boyfriend .

Thought this whole series was worth the read. While not a big dom-sub fan, the action sections were super arousing. Author spent a little too much time on Kate's emotional distress and inability to be in control of her actions/feelings for my taste. Expected a full family sexcapade for the payoff. That might have been thrilling. Overall, however, a great narrative.

Considering it started with mother and son it should of ended that way, maybe bring in the daughter as well.

can not wait to read the rest of it as its good so far

Damn shame you didn't continue the series.

Fucking Hot!

I never get tired of rereading this series!

I hope the author find their way back and brings us new chapters!

Loved the series! You are an exciting author. IMHO, I would have ended this with mom/son and perhaps daughter. The way it was in the very beginning.

I though your story is the best that I have ever read, but there shouuld be more there is so much more to tell. like does Kristy get pregnant by dad does mommie bring Tommy into the open or does mommie get pregnant by Tommy or some other male. I hope your write about this or if there is more where can I find it. please respond.

Commemorating 11 years since this chapter was released.

This series is so hot!!! and sooo long. And yet there is more to tell. How is Tommy brought in to the family sharing, does mom go to work at Raven's club? There is a continuity problem there. Raven was working at Max's, then City Line and in the last section she owns a club. At any rate there are a lot of threads hanging that could be followed up on.

Fabulously sexy!!! Loved the character Kate such a sexy submissive mommy.

I love every bit of this, too bad there probably won't be anymore about this family if it was 11 years ago, but i gave it 5 star

This started off so good. The author obviously gave up because this story went off the rails from a mom/son incest story to mom screwing everything that moves. It became a mess and they couldn't figure out any else outrageous to add to it. Unfortunately that is typical on this site for amateur writing on here. They should have stopped with the second one but no had to drag the story on and on. Stop listening to the suggestions of others about what to add in your story.

More!,.. what Betty, Jason, raven and all the rest

Hi i love this storey its just a storey and not to bad

This is a classic example of a great erotic story losing its plot. Such an abrupt ending…leaves the reader with no closure.

Chapter 21-Tommy continues to fuck his mother Kate and she stops taking her birth control pills so that Tommy impregnates her with a huge load of his cum and sperm. John continues to fuck his daughter Kristy after Kristy quits taking her birth control pills. John fucks Kristy and pumps a huge load of his cum and sperm deep inside Kristy's pussy that impregnates his daughter. Nine months later, on the same day, Kate gives birth to a baby boy that looks just like her son Tommy and minutes later Kristy gives birth to a baby girl that looks just like her father John

I loved it, I loved the entire series, it was so fucking hot. Thank you Thank you

Such a hot series. I would love to edit for you. You are a truly great writer. I couldn’t get enough of this story. I could read about Kate and her family and friends forever.

I am surprised there were no bruises on ass from hand slaps, or soreness/looseness from Giant fuck machine phallus!!! Can't wait - HOPE there are more in this series. If not, Series 2 could be about Kate getting DPd by Jason and Tim - straponed by Elaine and/or Gina or Suzie or Kristy or any new person introduced. Kid or kids finding out what Mom does when she is not at home. Kate pulling a train for all the construction workers at her house for the pool. Kate, John, Kristy, and Tommy in 4some. The list is GiNormous!!! Blackmailed by kid, if only 1 finds out about Mom's side dishes - or both - for different things. Gina follows Kate and sees her chained up!!! Kate and Kristy go visit girl at adult store and go in booth again for 3 hours!!! Kate finds out Adam is model for Giant Phallus. It goes on n on n on.

awesome i have read it over andd over cant get enough thank for writting such a great story

Agree with the comments below, you are a creative writer and have established wonderful characters that readers enjoy following. As a result, there are a plethora of good ideas for continuing this series and I hope you do as well.

One storyline I didn’t see suggested was a spin-off that gives us the chance to get to know Betty better as your introduction of her was unique and the follow-up encounter with Kate fascinating, left me hoping for more. Oh and would we get to meet Kristi’s mysterious friend?

Thanks for the entertaining lit. Cheers, Papabear2238

I hung off every word.Absolutely FANTASTIC.more please more

I was glad that Frank go what was coming to him..it should have been worse for him though.. I was expecting Kate to tell John and her daughter after dad fucked Kristy and was ready to jump her again, to tell them both to have fun,because I'm go to go fuck Tommy tonight while your fuck till daylight !