All Comments on 'Small Town Stimulus Plan'

Started out very good, but some incomplete sentences, missing words, typos and two sentences that defied understanding turned me off. Caused me to wonder why I should waste my time on sloppy work. <p> The second section of the story was like it was written by someone else. Where the first section enjoyed careful character development and details, the second sections was Wham! Bam! Thank you ma'm! <p> The story line fell apart in the second section. It appeared the hero had some good ideas on how to turn the factory around, so the purpose of all the unsolicited sex was unclear. Some apparently important details went unresolved. For example, you made a big deal about the doc taking several blood samples, but its significance was never apparent. <p> Recommendations: 1) read what you have written so as to find obvious errors. Better yet, take advantage of a free editor. 2) Have an objective for the story and then make sure the prose hits that objective. 3) Fill out your biography. Leaving it all blank indicates you're not proud of it. Most of the time that transcends to the story in general. Be proud of your self, be proud of your work. Otherwise, it is a turn off for your readers. You have good possibilities as an author, but in this case they missed the mark, missed by a lot.

Yes you had errors, and yes maybe the last part of the story could have used some brushing up and character development, but over all this was a really good story, and I hope it continues. It seems to me that all the available pussy in this little town is competing for the new hard cock. I wonder how the guys are going to take to the competition.

Please continue the story.

As to the other comments, I usually write in Microsoft Word, and I find that the Spelling and Grammar check tool will catch almost all the little mistakes. Plus the thing is smart enough to make some recommendations on sentence structure that actually improve your writing.

When I go to the outback I've never got that kind of welcome.

Good introduction, but please do some proofreading. Not sure where you are going with this, but you already seem to be jumping around.

I would normally give a first time author a 25 for a story like this with as many spelling and grammatical errors - but this story has a somewhat unique story line which has a lot of potential to be developed so I'm being generous with a 75 rating to encourage the author to continue the story and also seek an editor to help improve the quality of the writing.

Was written well enough to be interesting so quit bellyaching.

I really like this story. I'd like to read a sequel or three. That said, I'm really anal about spelling and grammar. Poor spelling and grammar indicates a lack of attention to detail and distract from the story. Despite that, I really enjoyed the story.

I really liked it -- looks like he ended up in heaven! My only question -- why is this in Loving Wives since there is no indication that any of the pussy he was exposed to is married?

Having once been in a similar situation in small town usa trying to save a company that was going down the pan have to say I missed out on the fun you had really want to read some more like what happens next week

For the read.

Good story spoiled by bad grammar and spelling.

Poorly written cheating wife comedy that wasn't really funny.

Story started out well and then just went into fuck mode. What happened?

Fuck this incel bullshit

Wth?