All Comments on 'Snap Shot'

Well written very erotic and at the same time very sweet. Thanks and I would love to see that photo. jps.ipad@gmail.com

that was beautifully written! if you still send it, please send it to olemiss1000@hotmail.com

You really caught the moment and the adrenalin rush.

Masterfully written. Thank you.

Would surely love to c a snap of her!!!

Sweet, affectionate, and a little uncertain - whether that moment actually happened or not, you nailed it.

I too read the whole story and was moved by the story itself, the author has real talent to bring scenes to life in an intensely evocative way- they should be selling books, not writing on here for free!

this is the first story i've read in the whole of this site that actualy gave me goose bumps. I fealt like I was there in 1965. Hats off, simply a devistating story.

I am shaking, there is almost too much passion in this story. Superb writing.

So much sensuality,desire,animal lust, and trust involved. So much emphasis today on porn shots and girlie magazines, when the written word tells the story of the artistic photos. Absolutely the best written, well crafted story of the bygone era of my generation, when these feelings were so real and vibrant. The story had me mesmerized the whole time, beginning to end, most of the time holding my breath. I could feel Jim's feelings so real, feel the heat, taste the excitement. BRAVO! The best ever on Literotica!

this is a brilliant little story. very well written it really took me in.

keep it up.

Fantastic story that vividly transports the reader back in time to a highly sensual and evocative setting!

Well written in a style that captures the mood, ambience and experience as a whole.

Two thumbs up!

Would be honored to receive the picture.

Please send to harryflashman@live.com

Kind Regards

An alluring and enticing story! A true testament to how relations should be nourished.

Photos? By all means I want to see the inspiration: charles@cartersr.com

i just have to see the picture that goes with this story bdunn91@gmail.com

This is a fantastic story, I'm happy that you decided to share it with the world. I would love to see the shot, if you are willing to still send it out. My e-mail is HelixPhoenix79@gmail.com

Also, imagine how beautiful and peaceful and passionate this world would be is everyone was made love to like this and knew how to make love like this. Such a profoundly personal experience that melts stress, thoughts, sadness, leaving you whole and loved and loving.

This story is amazing. It's beautiful and not predictable because it gripes you so closely in each moment. I roll my eyes at sappy romantic stories and have mild interest in hardcore stuff but this was something more. You two were so young, so excited. And it was a real STORY that you could sink your teeth into. It gave me so many vivid sensations! I thoroughly enjoyed the experience of reading it. I will remember this story fondly, and by showing such sweet depth of intimacy it has already affected my sex life. That's how good it is! Get an editor and a publisher.

So well written, I feel as if it were a memory of my own.

... this story has struck me. I have no better way of describing it. Thank you, Mad Mike.

No other way to describe my reaction to this beautifully sensual tale... Wow!

It was artsy and classic, one that the reader will keep on thinking, what if I was there? can you publish the snapshot? you are a great writer!

This is the kind of story that makes me seriously consider erotica as a form of art. The dreamlike state of beauty and intimacy you've crafted here is unmatched by any other story on this site. Bravo.

yes, truly the best story I have read on Literotica. erotic and gentle at the same time. for your sake, i hope that it was non-fiction.

Amazingly written. I loved it.

I would love to see the snap shot that obviously has made such an impact.

Mike, you may be a photographer, but you're also a great writer. Great job.

Excellent. Loved the story. It was or is uncommonly well written. I found it to be very erotic. Thanks for sharing with us

What a lovely story - in every way! So sensuous and so full of deep affection! Well done! :-)

This was probably one of the best things I've ever read on here - a real treat to see something and read something with true feeling - it was very sexy, but the way you built up to it was awesome. I love that idea of hazy summer days. She sounds beautiful, and if you ever get sick of photography, maybe you should turn to writing? :D

Just wow. :)

I adored this story, and it held me captive the entire time I was reading it. Even though it's now 3am, near enough, and I am about exhausted, I couldn't get up from my computer without finishing.

My only complaint was the ending, though it fits well with the rest of the story I think. Simply a personal burr, and not much constructive I could give about it.

Hope to be reading more of your work soon! ^-^

Mike (If that is Ur Name),

U had me Leaking from two places. First my pussy juices (of excitement), Then my tears (of Happiness).

Love & Kisses,

Betty18

Be Naughty

really great. the erotic coupled with the emotion. would make any reader think of his/her heady high school days and how the memories linger.

awesome in a word!

i love the way you led us through the story, your descriptions were fantastic, it made me feel i was there you have great talent thanks for sharing

I can't even put into words how awesome this is.

I felt like I was there with you, watching everything unfold in front of me.

Very well narrated, One of the Jewels of the collection here.

This is definitely the best story I have read on this site so far! Excellent writing. You have talent!

The emotion - the detail - the pacing - INCREDIBLE. Absolutely amazing. Your talent does not lie only in the visual arts. THANK YOU so much for sharing. A real delight.

The story here was captivating. Written in a way that almost allowed me to forget I was reading print. It seems so personal and yet distant as it's all just recollection of a beautiful moment.

I find myself hoping that this truly happened to some lucky "Jimbo" exactly as described. Even reading the account has been intensely intimate and pleasurable... I can only imagine the feelings of that young man.

I loved this story, the way that you built it up and then very smoothly relived the moment through your words. Awesome reading this one, one of the best stories that i have ever read.

i dont think there will be a better story. Mike had i been in your place i could have asked her....... for you know .... soul binding.

what an amasing story had to read it several times its just brilliant would love to see the photo thank you for a wonderfull story

Only ever rarely do I search for stories, God am I glad I found yours! I lost track of time and space so completely that I awoke upside down mouth watering. If anyone needs a passionate defibrillator, consume this work of art.

Thank You,

-Devin

The slow slow pace and luscious attention to detail had me captivated. The wonder and tenderness in this story are beautiful, I haven't read a story like this by a man before. Thankyou for sharing it.

You, Sir, have a gift. Thank you for sharing it with us, the most beautifully written and captivating story I've yet read!

you are sir! one of the fantastic writer.horrahhhh

The build-up in this story was out of this world. Absolutely incredible detail, and the flow was just all there, making this story an incredibly desirable read. I did not want it to end; when I finished your last paragraph with the mention of the picture, my immediate reaction was that I have to see it. Not for sexual purposes, but for my own curiosity - simply the way you were able to word this story gave me the most vivid of mental images. I myself have always been told I was a good writer, but I never really put myself out there. I was thinking of starting out here on Lit would be a nice test, and this story is definitely an inspiration leading me towards that idea. If you would be so kind, my email is jrchefhead@gmail.com. Thanks so much, and please, keep on writing! :)

A wonderful piece of writing and erotica. Not only do you capture the essence of the long tease, but you've reminded us of what it was like in '65, before the huge sexual revolution. A couple young kids, and a moment of pure discovery. Outstanding.

Beautifully written, and incredibly hot. The tension was perfectly built, and then brought to an incredibly satisfying conclusion. I appreciate that you took time to tailor the story. It added immeasurably to the intimacy of the two characters. Incredible story!

best i ve ever read in the site, hope more is there to come

You may have the print Mike, but I have the very picture in my head. You exposed the picture to me in every detail and it will stay with me as your remaining print stays with you. I applaud your writing and now I know what I am striving for in my own attempts to create a slice of life that must be remembered. Thanks, Tom

This story is a must read. VONN

I love how you took the time to paint every detail. I really, enjoyed every part of it. :) amazing

I loved it. Very sweet and sexy. Brings back all sorts of memories.

This guy can write......plain and simple. If you can't drudge up some personal memory from the queues this guy leaves, you're either 8 yrs old or dead. He truly paints a picture that is so detailed as to put you in the head of the protagonist (the guy narrating the story). Seriously, I'll look for more of Mad Mike's stories as this was so far above anything else I've ever read here as to make it #1 without a challenger.

This is simply the greatest story I have ever read on this site. Simply delightful. Passionate and just stunning. Thank you kindly, sir.

What a tale! Presented so uniquely, the narrative, I almost feel as though I were there my self! Quite arousing, You have, in this story, captured the essence of erotic literature!

One of the best I've read on this site ever.

really loved your story, it was gripping from the very beginning, and both participants were instantly likeable.

In my short life I have read a lot of literature, a lot of stories. Stories ranging from the short and inconsequential to grand epics of seemingly superhuman people, but this short story, this one snapshot in time of a child's summer afternoon, was one of the best and most moving pieces I have ever read. I truly thank you from the bottom of my heart, for writing this story and allowing me a glimpse of your snapshot. I really dont think I will ever forget this piece. Mr Mad Mike, I salute you :P.

I have read quite a number of stories, but this one....this one is awesome. I am sure, i am going to remeber this one for a very long time.

This is a beautiful story, great detail and a pleasure to read, cynth sounds like the true love everybody longs for and sometimes finds, i wish she would have ended up with you!

This is a classy piece of vintage erotica. Quite beautifully, the story feels like the literary equivalent of one of the narrator's photos, suffused with youthful passion and viewed in later life with a tinge of sadness and longing. This touched me really quite deeply. Wonderful.

An excellent example of the coupling of beauty and art :)

What an amazing story. Do you really have the picture still? I'd love to see it. Maybe I could get a friend to take something similar of me... Though I'm sure it wouldn't be as amazing as your story.

This was a quite beatiful and yet highly erotic peice.

Shame yo have written only one more.

wow, i've felt the excitement at the same time i felt sorry for them. i loved this story. as if i am in the place, i love Cynthia. most beautifull snap shot of passion... - rusho

I really am speechless. That was so amazingly sad and heart breakingly beautiful at the same time.. It was amazing and completely unlike anything I've ever read before. I think you should get in touch with her, those pictures are too precious to never see again. Beautiful work, I really hope you never stop writing.

I would like to see the picture, not for sexual intentions but I am an artist as well and maybe it would inspire me. My email adress is hondagrl447@yahoo.com. For security reasons that is an email I made up specifically for this. Again, beautiful work. Thank you for writing it.

That was by far the best I've ever read on this website. You are an amazing storyteller, and because of that I could feel the excitement between the two... Simply amazing. Great work.

The youthful passion and the excitement of being young when every sensation seems new is skilfully portrayed. The sense of longing remains. Great story- write more please.

this honestly is the most amazing story ive read. ever. im speechless.

mind blowing wow!!!

One of the best I have ever read. The way you tell the story is purely astounding, I couldn't stop reading even if the world began to crumble. If this story you've told is real, wow. If it isn't, haha, it doesn't matter. GOODJOB, I hope you put new submissions.

A story so real I could almost feel the excitment and pleasure they shared. Thanks for a fantastic read

This was one of the most moving peices of literature I have ever read. this has truelly changed my life!!

Beautiful story...

You definitely should've married her, or at least dated her.

She sounds like an amazing girl...

Definitely sounds like a true story, and if it isn't, who cares?

You might want to consider writing as a professional career... You're amazing!

And send me a picture please!!!

Mike (or Jim), this is one of the most amazing stories I've ever read. I've been an avid reader of the stories on this site and I've never posted before on any of these stories. This story, however, gave me the desire to post my opinion for the first time.

Your grammar and wording is impeccable, your extensive vocabulary also made the story enjoyable to read. The vivid imagery you created in my mind was absolutely astounding. I've no doubt that I will be reading this story over and over again.

You're a very experienced writer, or so it seems, and your experience definitely increased the amount of pleasure I had reading this story.

Thank you for writing this story.

Mike, if you can paint with light half as well as you can paint with words, your photography must be something to behold. Thanks for sharing such a wonderous story.

Extremely sweet story, reminded me of long hot summers and being young with a whole world waiting for you. I decided that this one is true, at least for me :) Cheers Yoron.

Very good story! It was though a little slow towards the beginning and middle but things definetely sped up! Keep on writing... try some fiction too and also try to keep the stories a little more concise. :)

A beautiful piece of writing, with enough detail but not overdoing it. Erotic, sensual and capturing the innocence of such experiences. Those who are lucky enough to have had them know exactly how it feels, those who haven't can easily imagine and live in hope.

This was a story unlike any other that i have read here. Unlike others this is written as beautifully as im sure your memory is. If I ever experience anything nearly as loving as this then I will die a happy man.

P.S. You have made a fully grown man weep in joy. Congrats.

I have never cried while reading a story here on Literotica.

I don't even know why I did.

Truly a masterpiece.

Incredible writing! Your characters come alive on the page, in front of my eyes. That, and the warmth and caring between Cynth and Jimmy makes the story so real. More, please!

And, photo, please!

"She turned around to face me and leaned back, gripping the edges of the vanity with her hands. Her hair seemed to just flow down over her shoulders with a slight natural wave, thick and full. Her cheeks were flushed; this was all natural, not an effect of any rouge. In fact, I doubt she had any make up on at all. It was something about her, or her bedroom, or maybe it was the qualify of the light, but her skin appeared softer, whiter, yet those eyes of hers were every bit as bright and richly green as they had been out in the sun.

"Hang on," I said coming forward and holding my light meter out as though it were a compass guiding my way. "I'll get a shot right there, just like that." I stepped right up, happy to be able to keep focused on the meter's needle and relieved not to have to let her look into my eyes.

"It seemed she filled the room. The scent of her, the color of that blue, the pink of her lips, the heat of her breath, the flush in her cheeks, the way her hair moved, everything, she seized my every sense and so much more. I was more wound up than anything I had ever known. Yet I managed to keep a grasp of reality telling myself this was a once in a lifetime opportunity, and I had to concentrate and stay focused if I could ever hope to record any of this on film. But concentrating was hard; I was hard. I resolved, despite the distractions of how she was teasing me, I was going to maintain some level of sanity and do my best to try.

This is marvelous stuff.

By the way, I started reading "Damned" and just couldn't make it through. Good story, great writing, but I chickened out when it looked like something really was going to happen. That's just me.

Gary

PS: I wonder why this removes all returns and centers the text? Not the way I typed it.

A beautiful story so well told, I hope your photography is as good as your ability to take your readers into Cynth's bedroom with you, I felt as if I was standing right there watching every little byplay as you took me with you, turning me into that wonderful girl, Im ashamed to say you made me come too.

Thank you

Thank you so much for your beautiful story. It was rich and full of colour and passion. I have not enjoyed a story so much for a long, long time. The characters were alive and real. I would love to see the picture.

This was a great story - rich in detail and picturesque use of words. Having been using some kind of camera for over thirty years, albeit not professionally, I very much appreciated the way the story undfolded as if seen through the viewfinder.

If every person's first time were like this one, the world would be a different place. Thank you for sharing this beautifully written memory. I was amazed.

Your story is the most beautiful one about the sparkling sense of to see and to be seen I read so far (Even if I only ran over the part after the shot). It has left me awestruck. Mad Mike, thank you very much!

I must say one thing, it is a wonderful story. But there is something about it that almost bored me. It seemed to run on and on without much excitement for me. In all, it was long...

Keep up the wonderful work though!

What an amazing story. It's so much better than any others I've ever read. It doesn't feel at all sordid and it builds perfectly. Don't stop writing - you're so good at it.

if everyone on this dear old planet could have enjoyed their first sexual encounter with even a fraction of the love, joy and incredibly beautiful eroticism that you have described so wonderfully in this story. Thank you.

It would be wrong to say this isn't one of the most magnificent and inspiring stories I've ever read. Your story touches on a different level than any other on literotica, and you tell it with such profound beauty. I do hop-e you continue writing, and have other stories that marvel as this one does.

Your story just blew me away. Just about all of the stories on Lit go like this. She looked, I looked, she sucked, I sucked, orgasm, she sucked, I sucked, plunged in, orgasm. But your story was so different. So personal, so sensual, so loving, and caring. Keep up the terrific work. Hope to see more by you.

That was the best and most tender story of young love I have ever read.I am glad I went to the voyuer and ex. portion of the stories.I found quiet a surprise there.I feel the story could go into playboy or such magizine and be one of the top stories.I can't praise you enough.Thank you for bring up some beautiful memeories of my youth and envey of yours.

It's such a shame that the best score I can give is a 5. This is erotic writing at its best. Of course I'd like to see the print but most importantly your writing about this event is second to none.

Your writing was outstanding at capturing the apprehension and nervousness of a young virgin male. You captured the beauty of his neighbor in words so eloquently.

If you still are sharing the print I would love to see it. Even if not, I learned a lot from reading your story and will use it to improve my own writing.

Thanks again for a great reading experience.

Bob

This is the best erotic story I have ever seen. It makes sex stories pale in comparison. This is not about the sex, but the eroticism of childhood, the intimacy of growing up next to the girl you dreamed about. It's about coming of age, viewed through the lens of a lifetime. If I could give you a 10 on a scale of 1 to 5, I would do so.

Wow. It was just incredible. Wow.

I absolutely loved your story. I don't normally like the one on one exhibitionist/voyuer stories but yours was so well written it kept me turned on from beginning to end. You took it at the perfect speed building up the anticipation and letting our imaginations run wild thinking about what was going to happen next. I am going to read your other story and I hope you will send in more submissions. You are a great writer.

Such a tender and intimate story; every detail seems to be so well planned. The characters are so real, I feel like I know them.

5+

i really liked the content of your story... being a photographer myself i can relate alot to the story... the only thing i would have done is i would have made it shorter... i can honestly say that i skipped certian parts because they just seemed to go on forever... ince they went inside and Cynth. changed is where it really picked up, everything before that is just kinda blah... but i cant be too much of a critic, all in all it was an awesome story, write more but make them shorter with a smaller intro...