by dante267
A litle rough in spots but still a good read.
I hope that he takes his mom sexually, and gives her more pleasure than she has ever had.
Thanks for the good read.
I couldn't finish. Your writing is terrible and the mistakes are glaring to the point I'm having to guess or fill in what you meant to say. I read maybe 3-4 paragraphs and quit. Just because you hav a fantasy doesn't mean your any good at relaying it to others in an erotic manner.
Pissed I wasted any of my time on a shit read.
Maybe you need to do a little refresher course before ragging on someone else. What is hav, and perhaps you meant to use you're (as in you are) instead of your (as in your house). if your going to bust on someone else, at least be able to get it right yourself.
Your mom went from wearing jeans to a skirt in two minutes. You also need help with the art of English language...
Pretty good story line though, it needs some polish...
I don't know if this story is "Good" or not because I couldn't bring myself to read past the third paragraph.
The inconsistencies and stilted conversations suggest that English is not your first language. I'm sure you'll improve with time; but for this story, it's not worth reading.
the story wasn't as bad as the other comments said. Just work on editing your story better.
not bad, the theme was good turned me onfor sure,
mom and son sex is so hot
Never mind the English grammar professors, if you need some ideas read "Ahabscribe, BarondeSade, & Many Feathers", they are the best here. As far as I'm concerned your ok and the story was very good. I love incest romance.
First learn English, second work on a plot. even erotic stories need a plot.
hope to see the next chapter soon.and the english thing dont sweat it if they comment about it that mean they knew what you were trying to say ;]
was pretty hot-BG
So he reaches into her jeans to rub her clit then pulls down her skirt and panties to lick her pussy? that seems an odd attire.
you have a nice story I would choose your story over a hundred others I have read keep up the good work
The story is very poorly thought out and scripted. Your grammar needs major work also. I didn't enjoy it at all.
Before it can be considered good it must have consistency.
I too saw the fatal flaw of going from jeans to a skirt in a matter of two paragraphs.
In one paragraph you wrote, "I took my other hand and shoved it inside her jeans rubbing her clit."
Then in the paragraph following the next one the first sentence you wrote was, "She gasped and I slipped down her skirt and panties."
This all supposed to happen in a matter of real minutes. Even I know that skirts and jeans are an either/or proposition and never ever worn together. This is were I lost interest in your story as I suspect many more did as well. Did you even look for an editor?
Nothing is greater than a mother giving herself to her own boy. I will never forget the first time my cock was pumping in and out of my mothers warm cunt hole, she was my first fuck and I loved her.
This story is so poorly written that I had to stop reading shortly into it. It's not worth getting into specifics. Your English is awful, too.
Words my mother finally said after3 years of teasing.
One minute he is shoving his hands in her jeans then the next ripping off her skirt. You suck!