All Comments on 'Sophie and her Daddy'

good jod until you had daughter using dildo and then dad finding her hymen didnt it break with 8 inches od that dildo in her

You need to find a good editor. Real bad.

Comma usage would be helpful.

Sorry but it's true

First take a lesson in Anatomy

Then take a lesson in English

Then try to keep your facts straight

First off, that was so awfully written I could barely stand to read it. Punctuation, use it!

And yeah...an 12-inch dildo doesn't break her hymen but her dads 8-inch penis does? Erm...maybe not.

This was a very good try, but puncuation would have made the story flow better. And the fact that she was a virgin using a 12" dildo and it did not break through her hymen, but her father's 8" did, not at all biologically possible. Redo the story and edit.

Great story line, but I have to agree with the other comments about the dildo vs. dad's "member."

Editors are readily available at Literotica. Choose one, let them give you pointers. It will really make a difference.

I enjoyed your story. There are some flaws which have been mentioned already. The people who were so nasty in their criticism should just leave off. I wish people would be more constructive in their criticism. "Crap" is a crappy thing to call anyones work. Who died and made you Dorthey Parker. I just wanted to mention a couple of things you don't know. You can make corrections to a story and re-post it. There are instructions in the FAQ. Also, you can delete comments if you want. I usually only delete ones that flame. Good luck with your other work.

Looks like it was written by an eight-year-old, who dropped out of school