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chilleywilleychilleywilleyabout 10 years ago
enough to put you off of writing in the erotic couplings catagory

Not a bad story, very original plot, and all, but nobody commented?. It was a little lacking in drama, in the loving wives category, drama is perhaps more natural, or inherent in the story.

Telling it from his point of view sort of limits the story since he's the epitome of laid back as we don't know what's going through her mind, and it's a mind in torment. I suppose it's hard to see if from the opposite sexes POV.

Anyway, nice story

Chilley

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Old enough to know better and young enough to say "what the fuck" and do it anyway. After a brief hiatus due to health concerns, back to try to see if I can learn how to set these combinations of fantasy and memory to print. While some works touch on memory perhaps more than...