by m_storyman_x
Too many typos and spelling mistakes to be really enjoyable
trying to figure out which character is really involved
Couple of minor errors, farther instead of farther and getting names mixed up. Other than that good.
Especially when Tina farted as he entered her. Boy, what a turn on.
or 2 or 3 or more and A whole mess of proof readers
This shit ass writing is not even grade 3 level
Thinking about one sentence,, as she bent over (farter),, damn,, if that was me i would have kicked her ass,, how dare you fart on me
Good plot,,to bad the author is so lousy, this could have been a great story
I was pretty much holding Tina at arm's length, emotionally, hoping that things worked out with Tina.
Too many times in this chapter you formed sentences along this line, as far as I can see from reading there was only one Tina in the story
So how can you be holding Tina back waiting for Tina, maybe you were holding Patty back or maybe even Lania or Rose
Glad you are back, and eagerly anticipating the next chapter
That was a nice continuation of the story I hope we don't have to wait as long for chapter 5.