by RejectReality
I trust you will write follow ups for Chritmas and/or New Years or possibly share phone numbers and they set up their own date times.
Very nice read. Thank You!
Always love stories with confident, decisive women who aren't ashamed of their sexuality. You created your characters with style and your developing plot with imagined activities clearly related to the season.
Well done. More please.
MLJ
Except for the "Del" "Dale" name mix-up, this was an exceptional submission. Well done!
Wonderful story, great pace and descriptions... Hope you do well in the contest
My only complaint is that the Cool Whip wasn’t utilized more! Maybe you can touch on the threesome in another one of your stories? Maybe there’s a Christmas follow-up to this one?
Some guys are just born lucky, I guess. Good story and, somewhat believable. I found myself a bit jealous n a weird way.
What I found distracting was when Dell changed his name to Dale a couple of times. If I had all that going on, I may not have remembered my own name, so I can let it pass.
Good story, beleivable. Reminded me of my fantasies about my best friends mom!
*facepalm* I went through this doing a find for every occurrence of "Del" making absolutely sure I didn't accidentally use "Dell" instead, because I'd caught myself doing that. I was all happy that I'd caught and backspaced them all before starting the review process, and now I realize I had three "Dales" in there. D'OH! How those didn't jump out me during the text-to-speech review, I don't know. Fixed in the original doc, and I think I'll actually put in an edit for this one after the contest is over.
Well done! Nice and quick read. I really enjoyed the short build up and dialogue before the sex between Amber and Del. You created quite a believable chemistry between the two that I could not ignore. I even found myself smiling a couple times while reading. Not to mention, the writing definitely turned me on when I wasn’t feeling particularly in the mood prior to starting the read. That’s impressive on its own. Thank you for that. I’m sure you could explore more from these two characters if you really wanted to. But if not, this short bit of writing alone still suffices. Again, well done! Five stars!
Nice... Mature ladies with big, suckable, titties, and pumpkin pie, make a good holiday combination!!!
This story is fantastic! You really managed to make characters that seem real and fully-fleshed-out despite being just a couple-page short story. Fantastic!
I thought that was so well written, so many feeling’s put into words , good plot, for me just a tad too long on the build up with all the food thing, but a really good piece of work.
Like the famous scene with Chris Evans wearing Cool Whip on his pecs, I imagine Del with a bit of Cool Whip on HIS pecs, maybe scattered along a treasure trail, and Amber licking him clean. Maybe he could have a bit of sexy blond chest hair mixed in there too! After all, Del is one sexy young man!
Love! Love! Love! This! It took me days to find something this good to read. Thank you so much! :)
What a great bit of writing! This is the first story of yours I've stumbled across but I'll definitely be reading more. I loved the set-up, the realistic dialogue; and I found the detailed description of the sex -- the attention paid to the foreplay, where their hands went as they changed positions, the laughter and light-headedness between orgasms -- to be delightful.
Have done it But never understand why you would want to spray face,tits etc instead of in vagina. Greatest feeling in the world.
Tried different things and liked some but pussy definitely the best
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Many friends nurses etc even woman doctor. Very outspoken about sex. Lot of differences. Some women don't even like breasts played with others love it. Some like anal a lot don't. No standards unlike porn. Work on it together. ER nurse. woman came in with gear shift nob had to be removed. Male ball point pen stuck in penis. Different strokes for different folks
Lucky stud seduced this MILF in need. The pussy eating erased all possible guilt. She is all in for you young hung cum spurting cock. Worshipping his big balls and giving up her ass next