All Comments on 'Sueños Blancos [White Dreams]'

Most siblings don't just wake up one day and stick it in. Take your time, build the story by telling of the emotional struggle they are both experiencing. The longing, but societies taboo.

Keep up the good work!

I agree. The begining was pretty confusing. You switched around the time line to much. So was this yesterday morning? Today morning? What happened last night? If it's not important then don't put it in. Otherwise it has great potential. I suggest having one of the editors help you with this and any other chapters.

it was good but it could be better u left out to much in my opion skipped around to much it was guud though just needs work