All Comments on 'Summer of Innocence Pt. 01'

It reminded me of when i got my cherry popped for the first time.

An excellent story that is tinged with realism. Keep up these types of writings as they are fun to read.

But interest gets PIQUED, not PEAKED.

What an exciting, well-written story! Narration is terrific, dialogue is smooth and natural. Sex scenes are hot, hot, hot. Set-up is plausible and there are no hitches that I can see. Nice job!

I like reading from a male perspective because men have a way of describing a sexual experience with a woman that just turns me on. Your words were chosen well and it felt as if I was there in the story watching it with my own eyes. Porn written at its best!

Congratulations; you've turned me on!!

Good story overall. could use another edit to remove redundant parts and tighten the story a bit. Also check for continuity of which girl was which, what they were wearing, etc.

it has good storey lien there is sexy things coming every witch way hot.

That was an excellent story. Well written and realistic in every sense. It hit the 5 stars mark for me when he licked each girls asshole. It's too bad he didn't spend more time doing so and bringing each one to orgasm by thoroughly licking and sucking their dirty anuses while totally tongue fucking each. A description of the scent and taste of each would have been perfect.

Incredibly erotic story! My own personal fantasy, and the two girls came right out of my dreams! For my own personal version of this incredible fantasy, Amy's tits would be a very little bit smaller, and the girls would both be 16 years old! Mega-hot! I've been reading and re-reading this story for a long time! It needs a tiny bit of editing.

I agree with petemgurk.

Except, unlike him, I do see one significant hitch.

The hymen covers the opening of the vagina.

Go to Internet and search:

Hymen location.

So, the progression described with Emily is impossible:

1) "cock head wedge between her cunt lips"

2) "head of my cock was inside her"

3) "another inch"

4) "deeper"

5) "press against her cherry"

5) should have been between 1) and 2).

Story so great and written so well, I thought I was still reading TexasTallTales (I had been reading one of TTT's tales just before this one).

Was surprised to get to the end and find it is Erikkhan.

So, judging from my first Erikkhan read, he must be as good or better than the prolific, popular, legendary TTT.

Immediately, unhesitatingly gave it 5 stars.

Paul in Oklahoma

Well written and realistic storyline. Doubt that 18 year old girls are that innocent....I think they were about 15 but you had to say 18 for story to be accepted.