All Comments on 'Summer's End Ch. 01'

Am I first to comment? If so, yay!!<br><br>

CG - you are the master at pulling readers in from the very beginning. I love how descriptive you are, and quite envy it :) Such as:<br>

<i>Twenty feet in front of them was a crooked split-rail fence, and five feet beyond that was the bluff that dropped nearly straight down to the piled concrete seawall. Their dad, grandfather, and a neighbor had put the seawall down there years ago in an effort to prevent further erosion. Beyond the edge of the bluff was Lake Michigan. Blue-green near the shore, it blended into a dazzling sapphire further out</i><br><br>

You draw a picture with your words, and I could visualise the cabin, the view, the broken steps. And of course, the angst that I love, the possible triangle, leaving me wondering if Emma is going to fall for Adam's line of bull. Probably so -- because that's a rite of passage for a girl, isn't it? The charming jerk who you think really likes you, only to find out you were no more than a conquest. I can't wait for the next installment - muah!

Real nice read, 5 stars. Looking forward to the next part.

yay! glad to see you've returned :)

great story so far! i was totally bummed when it ended, but i can't wait for the follow-up.

As always, you paint a vivid portrait, chargergirl. Great characters, great dialogue, this is sure to be another fantastic story. I can't wait to read the second chapter.

I love the closeness that Brandon and Emma share. Very nice start, I look forward to reading the rest of their story. Glad you've returned.

Liked it - but I thought you were a tad slower than I would have liked. I would've liked something to actually happen between two characters in the first chapter, not just the hint of what is yet to come. Nice writind and style, but I would've liked a smidge more heat.

And another great story begins--I love the way Brandon is honest with himself from the start. Both he and Emmie are likable characters. Can't wait for the next installment. And special kudos for bringing two of my favorite things into the story--tabby cats and Lake Michigan.

Loved it. I like the slower plot type stories & this is perfect

excellent start, CG. i know how much rffort goes into building the pace slowly. superb piece, a sublime springboard for Ch2. *kisses*

The longer you're able to go without sex, the better! <p>

And if a writer is successful enough --- clever enough with plot, dialogues, wit, characterization, setting, etc. --- pretty soon the reader wants whatever it is going on to continues, with or without sex. <p>

Good start. Keep the sex to minimal. We have enough stories where the penis and vagina and other things appear and being fondled before there's any story to tell what's going on. You don't need to do that to attract readers.

Another great story keep it up. Can't wait to read more

love the way you are casually leading up to the climax, not like some who just jump right in..all stories need a point where your biting at the nails, waiting for what's going to happen next..good job and can't wait for yours

Hey CG. I just wanted to say that this story is awesome and I can't wait for the 2nd half to see where it goes. Good luck and waiting for the 2nd chapter. Is it done yet? What? Not yet. What about now? ;)

I have no words but, "FANTASTIC"! I've been waiting to see more of your writing since your last chapters, and you're finally back. I love the way you lead up to the chain of events with your characters. It's not just another wham-bam-thank you-ma'am story. You pull it out and make it very sensual. Please don't stop. I know writing takes time to develope but please hurry.

Again, fantastic job. You've got skills Chargergirl, You've got skills.

I really enjoyed this story this morning. It has the appeal of a romance and the underlying promise for more detailed and promising erotica from the writer. Thanks for sharing it with us. I hear Ch. 2 is out and am anxious to have a read. ~ RedHairedandFriendly

Oh my god...it's just wonderful, charger...can't wait to read the next chapter, and damn...it makes me wish I had a brother, heheh...

...he should have just grabbed his sister and fucked her silly--she would have loved it!

chargergirl you are a great story teller! Nice pacing, not rushed, drawing the reader in peaking at the right moments and leaving the reader wanting more. Great job. Keep up the writing, you show great talent. Loved your work.

i really like your writing style; it's so simple and easy to follow, plus it never bores me. your characters are anything from superficial, seeing as how every other story is totally generic. you've really brought something special to the table and i love it. can't wait to get to chapter two!

A beautiful love story gets set up for a sad and tragic ending. (just like it works in real fucking life)

Did she take the condoms?? You didn't say.

At least the male protagonist isn't one.

...but totally appreciative of your style. Can't wait to read more. So I think I will.

It's interesting that the overhearing her brother's desire for her has awakened her arousal by him as well. And why the hell is Brandon friends with Adam when the latter is such a lecherous creep?

Let's Go Brandon

Great start…!!! 5 stars