All Comments on 'Surprise Homecoming'

You write and think like a 10 year old kid. I give out very few 1's but this is absolutely deserving of nothing more.

I know teenagers who can write better stories.

We all have different skills. Yours do not include creative writing so best if you recognise this.

No build up, no storyline, no nothing - just another stupid husband and his whore of a wife. Boooorrrrrriiiiing!

If you write shit that gonna fly in the sense of common sense then give us a warning.

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i'm gonna have to stop saying this. this is the worst story i've ever seen on this site.it seems that every time i write that something comes along that is worse.

I wonder if the people that review these stories realize that these authors seem to get off on being treated like crap. Every time you mock these guys they love it, don't feed them and they will go back in the closet.

Hubbie coming up the stairs hearing noises in the bedroom is a standard theme and this effort doesn't bring anything new to it. Your dialogue needs to be separated from paragraphs. 2*

well your a woman of a gay guy.

1* enough said.

People that believe or even entertain this shit are sick... He should have placed a bullet in them both and smiled after and pissed on them both.

Even If he wanted his wife to have another, it should be agreed between them both...Never cheating...I believe that cheating ends any marriage...Even if he was a cuckold, he should never have accepted cheating...

Because its the same fucking story as damn near every other story in here.

I bet there are 100s of essentially the same Bitch/WACC stories here.

The shit some of the writers here at Literotica spew out, and it all seems to come from the same arse.

When a man is dominant, in a lot of cases, he decide financial matters, disciplines the kids, drives the car, gives his wife a housekeeping allowance, treats her like arm candy, see to it her credit card is kept topped up, pats her on the head when she does a good thing, but rarely allows her to make any important decisions. Pretty demeaning, wouldn't you say?

Now if you believe the writers here at literotica, when a woman has the dominant role, does she do as the man does? No, not on your life, no she has to turn her man into a cum swallowing, cock sucking, snivelling wimp, all the while humiliating him in front of his friends and family.

Funny, I don't seem to remember a story where the male is dominant and he has her licking his girlfriends pussy, bowing a scraping all the while having to keep a butt [lug firmly wedged in her arse.

If I were in a dominant/submissive relationship....Somehow I think I'd rather be female and submissive to the male of the species. Males seem to understand the power plays involved. While women have no idea how to maintain a Dom/sub relationship without getting all egotistical and going all ape shit overboard about it.

That is.......if you believe the writers here at Literotica.

Guess Not.1* for posting garbage.

Just put a 'willing cuck' disclaimer up front. I won't waste my time and you get 2-stars for very little effort.

I don't go for the denial/humiliation aspect of cuckolding but the sex is always hot.

I frequently fantasize about this very scenario. I'd love to come home early one day and find my wife getting laid with some big cock stud.

Why I waste the time, just another way to procrastinate.

a joke nobody can be that stupid. Next time you should warn your readers that this is a fun piece. idiot

I really get off on stories about cuckolding. But this was just a terrible story. No effort at all put into it.

But it wasn't. Funny that is. Maybe English isn't your first language? You give no information in your Bio to indicate that fact. And while I don't normally criticize people's grammar (this isn't a site for professional writers), yours made this story impossible to enjoy. It read like a list of things to do. See this. Do that. Don't think. Don't act. Just too dry to make for a good read. No emotion. Not a single decent character in the lot. She, in particular, was a total nasty piece of work. I gave you a "1" because negative scores aren't possible. This was simply terrible.

TSIA

Read like a badly written manual from some government agency.

First time I gave anyone 1 Star.

You might want to look at another profession/advocation.

leave the bitch and file for a divorce

Only heard this story a thousand times on here before.

Same boring cuckold shit!! Are there no real men authors??

Save yourself from needless grief and get an editor. Thiscould have been much better with a second opinion before you released it to the masses.

If you had an editor... get a different one.

I hope there is a part two and more.

in short, no surprise at all

It's as if there was a program that lets the "writer" select stock characters, common situations, and cliche actions, press a button, and it spews out the so-called story. There was nothing here that indicated you spent more than a few seconds, a few moment's thoughts, on this. It's not writinging, it's typing.

Just more of the same

I would have walked over to my dresser got my 357 and blew them both away with his big cock still in her.

You are a sad little boy, who shit in your wheaties?

This was horrible on so many levels (which have been covered, and then some).

The thing I always find amusing in these cheating wife/husband comes home early stories is that the cheaters are incapable of closing the bedroom door all the way!

Lots of times actually, but you missed making Brad black.

Just one star, and most seem to agree with that. Needs an editor and some originality, not to mention some credibility.

Another fucking TRASH Story. Redlegs27, you are one very sick A-HOLE, you need to go back on your MEDS. Hubby should have took a baseball bat to these to cheating pieces of SHIT.

Reads like a chinese assembly booklet

On second thought, don't.

This story could have been summarized in fewer than 10 short sentences with just as LITTLE feeling as is evidenced here.

1. Man returns home early and finds well-hung dude fucking his wife.

2. Wife sees Hubby watching and hides him until Bull leaves! (why?)

3, Wife admits trysts with Bull is NOT new AND will continue!

4. Hubby is cut off from sex with Sweetie!

Gee, that was FOUR short sentences and NO feeling. Develop your brevity!

Fucking foolish , they both should die .

I feel like I just got a root canal.

Here's what you should do. First, go out and buy every Hemingway, every Dickens, and every Ian Fleming you can get your hands on. Read every one of them.

Then make a list of every English teacher you ever had. Buy a pistol and shoot every God damn one of them before they fuck up any more children. Just kidding don't do that really.

In all sincerity you need to do a lot more reading before you do any more writing.

I didn't vote.

I've had submissions rejected before for what I thought were some pretty lame reasons. And now I read where you accepted this crap????? As the title asks, WHY??

I won't read any more. Sucked

This could only have been written by someone out to provoke the commentators on this site.

This was his first time, and frankly he did not do as badly as others. As with most first timers he rushed the story. Instead of developing the story as to how good his wife looked, had she changed in the last 2 months since she has been fucking a real man stud. Had the sex for him dwindled? Next time or for chapter two, please explain a bit before jumping right into fucking. Also, as a hung stud, your wife's pussy would have been stretched out long before you caught them fucking. Any husband would have noticed her tight pussy was now loose when he fucks her. Anyway, remember to put some time and thought into it first. Do an outline. Why is the wife turning into a Dominate. Has she been making hubby eat her pussy more and his own creampies? But I also think you could maybe be a good writer here.

So short and typical. The bottom line: Husband finds wife have having sex with a big dick and it turns him on.

I will never ever get married. I can't hate this story. It was simple and to the point.

5 stars!

It was a good premise and all, but it's just too short. The characters aren't fleshed out enough, and it ends too quickly. It reads too much like a summary of all the slut-wife cuck-husband tales, but without any imaginative plot points. Try again, add some more detail, more plot points, more character development.

Peglegs27 would have shown more creativity by mowing his lawn. Show some respect for yourself! You certainly haven't shown your readers any respect.

How the fuck would you know how bad it is. You wouldn't know an erotic story if it slapped you across the face. This was a farce of a story not worth reading and you know it. Just another new scum bag trying to write erotica and failed. 1*

This site is degrading more and more into the holy grale of the cuckold-community. Obviously the change from "literotica" to "cuckerotica" does not seem to bother the overhead. How does it sya: You need to be a wimpy cuck to love a wimpy cuck. Imagine all these cucks could eventually find a "real" wife...lol

Na - no danger there...

This site needs to ban all of this cuck bullshit.

Where was the passion, the fire?

No one acts like that

More like an opening paragraph. And the dialogue was just awful. Like a 12 year old thought it up. And why isn't the husband upset? For that matter, why isn't anybody in this mess displaying any real emotion? Terrible story.

He should just go in the room pack all his clothes and leave, never looking back at the cheating slut.

ridiculous cuck shit.

to offset the asshole of LIT's 1 vote

then I read the first sentence. It was written so badly I decided my time would be better spent picking the wax from my ears. Since I didn't read it I won't vote but I wish people who want to write would learn to do so.

annony never stops his flaming comnets. 5 to offset this fag's 2 vote

fuck u redlegs fuck ur story

he is a wimpy cucky. TK U MLJ LV NV

THAT'S YOU!!!

Kevin is sedated and castrated as his penis, scrotum and sperm are no longer of any importance whatsoever to his wife. I hate wimpy assed husbands.

Don't write!!! This story sucks! Any guy who likes seeing his wife fucked by another guy should be castrated!

You've heard of a "one hit wonder". This was a "one miss wonder".

Some people show some real literacy with their comments when they can do it anonymously. I wonder if they kiss their mama with that same mouth.. Worse yet, how did these pathetic comments on Jan 29 make it past the sensors?? Mind boggling.. It's okay to be a little critical if you don't like a story but be a human being and use some constructive criticism instead of a garbage mouth.

Kevin is a normal guy then just like that he sucks another guys cum from his wife and accepts being told he can't have sex with her. Never happen. So much of this stupid crap here.

Stupid story

Stupid writer

Stupid everything

I don't understand how it could rate half that good

Fucking bullshit

This cuck sickness is rated much too highly.

What a piece of shit. Enough said.

Somebody take this writer's Man Card. That may be why as a contributor, he was "One and Done".

Literotica absolutely needs a "Cuck/Cuckold" section.

Shitty cuck story

Fucking cuck story. Zero rating for wimpy writer

Crap. Utter crap.

I’m getting fed up with these pathetic cuck stories, a real man wouldn’t stand for that shit.

Why do these idiots post stuff like this.poor English,very poor story and a waste of time.They have no talent and waste our time.Go away stupid

C'mon Lit, make a cuckold category please. These stories are abhorrent.

Cuck shit...

...and poorly written cuck shit !

Not worth the 5 minutes of my life to read it...

Another wimp story full of BS from any real man

As soon as this guy watched and did nothing I quit.

I'd show her ass the door so fast. Can only fuck her if i eat his cum out of her pussy.... maybe he should film t and send it to everyone she knows... This is way too much of a wimp story...

Humiliation is not cool and is unnecessary to the story

People being shitty to one another is really unpleasant.

In a different ending... When Sarah goes to meet her husband in the hallway. He's not there. He left. A week goes by when there's a knock on the door. Special Delivery. she signs the form and the man informs her she's been served. Kevin divorced her. Well, she thought she had traded up. She wanted to marry Brad but Brad was already married. she didn't know he was married and apparently, his wife knew he was a cheater. Brad dropped Sarah like a hot potato. He only had sex with married women. It took awhile before Sarah realized what she had lost...

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Another story of a little Dick inadequacy husband.with a wife in control of their sex life. Where is the love at? Not in their hearts. That’s for sure